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Mother's Day Surprise: The Results
Yesterday, I wrote about my Mother’s Day project.
If you're interested, please check out that post for the details.
Here is what happened.
About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge"
When I told her about the challenge, she was really surprised.
However, she hesitated to spend it all and decided she only wanted to pick out one book.
We walked around a huge bookstore together, talking about the books on the shelves—how they were chosen and how they were arranged.
In the end, she didn't actually choose a book.
She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking there with me.
I really wanted to buy something for her, but I respected her wishes and didn't.
I realized that for her, the time we spent together was enough.
Seeing her happy was the most rewarding part of the day for me.
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Mother's Day Surprise: The Results
Yesterday, I wrote about my Mother’s Day project.
If you're interested, please check out that post for the details.
Here is what happened.
About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge" About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge"
If this is a subheader then this is corrrect, but is a little confusing considering what follows. Perhaps "Revealing the" instead of "About the" would work better.
When I told her about the challenge, she was really surprised.
However, she hesitated to spend it all and decided she only wanted to pick out one book.
We walked around a huge bookstore together, talking about the books on the shelves—how they were chosenselected and how they were arranged.
We walked around a huge bookstore together, talking about the books on the shelves—how they were selected and how they were arranged.
Changed "chosen" to "selected" to increase variation in word choice and since it felt like it fit a bit better. Though "chosen" is not wrong.
In the end, she didn't actually choose a book.
She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking around there with me. She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking around there with me.
I really wanted to buy something for her, but I respected her wishes and didn't.
I realized that for her, the time we spent together was enough.
Seeing her happy was the most rewarding part of the day for me.
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However, she hesitated to spend it all and decided she only wanted to pick out one book. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge" About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge" About the "10,000 Yen Book Challenge" If this is a subheader then this is corrrect, but is a little confusing considering what follows. Perhaps "Revealing the" instead of "About the" would work better. |
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We walked around a huge bookstore together, talking about the books on the shelves—how they were chosen and how they were arranged.
We walked around a huge bookstore together, talking about the books on the shelves—how they were Changed "chosen" to "selected" to increase variation in word choice and since it felt like it fit a bit better. Though "chosen" is not wrong. |
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In the end, she didn't actually choose a book. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking there with me. She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking around there with me. She loves reading and just being in a bookstore, so she was perfectly satisfied just walking around there with me. |
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I really wanted to buy something for her, but I respected her wishes and didn't. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I realized that for her, the time we spent together was enough. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Seeing her happy was the most rewarding part of the day for me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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