Jan. 12, 2021
Overbearing mother
I will be writing this essay regarding a girl I am dating, but I will not reveal her name with respect to her.
I met this girl at the gym and, casually, began chatting with her. After a while, I noticed that her mother, who goes to the gym with her daughter, looks over when I talk with her daughter. Initially, I found this behavior inoffensive and thought the mother was just wondering who I was.
A couple of days later, I decided to ask the girl out, and she liked the idea. However, to my surprise, she told me she would need to talk with her mother about it. I got confused since the girl is 23 years old, but I let it pass once she told me that she would be able to go out with me.
Fast forward to our date, the girl revealed to me that her mother just allowed her to go out with me under the condition that her brother was seated at the table next to us, which he did not do but had to keep that from his mother. This dropped my jaw and raised a lot of red flags. Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit that I was with her, and she told her mother she would be with her brother and his girlfriend.
Since then, our second date, we have not been able to hang out due to her mother controlling behavior and emotional blackmail. Her mother threatens to make the girl homeless if she does not obey what she is told.
Therefore, now, I am really skeptical about keep on trying to date this girl since she seems powerless to stand up for herself, and I do not intend to be involved in such a complicated family dynamic.
Please, if you can evaluate my level of proficiency based off my writing, that would be pretty helpful.
I tried to write casually since It is something that is from my day to day life.
An Overbearing mother
I will beam writing this essay regarding a girl I am dating, but I will not reveal her name without of respect tofor her.
I met this girl at the gym and, casually, I began to chatting with her.
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Since then, our second date, we have not been able to hang out together due to her mother's controlling behavior and emotional blackmail.
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I will be writing this essay regarding a girl I am dating, but I will not reveal her name without of respect tofor her.
After a while, I noticed that her mother, who goes to the gym with her daughter, always looks over whenever I talk with her daughter.
ThisMy jaw dropped my jaw andand this raised a lot of red flags for me.
Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit/kept from her mother that I was with her, and instead, she told her mother she would only be with her brother and his girlfriend.
Since then, our second date, we have not been able to hang out due to her mother's controlling behavior and emotional blackmail.
Her mother threatens to make the girlr homeless if she does not obey her and do what she is told.
Therefore, now, I am really skeptical about keep on trycontinuing to date this girl since she seems powerless to stand up for herself, and I do not intend to be involved in such a complicated family dynamic.
Overbearing mMother
In English, the first letter of all nouns, verbs, adjetives, adverbs, pronouns, etc., are capitalized in the title.
I will beam writing this essay regarding a girl that I am dating, but I will not reveal her name without respect tofor her.
"I will" is often written/said as "I'll".
"I am" is often written/said as "I'm".
I met this girl at the gym and, casually, began chatting with her.
After a while, I noticed that her mother, who goes to the gym with her daughter, was looksing over when Iile I was talking with her daughter.
Initially, I found this behavior inoffensive and thought the mother was just wondering who I was.
A couple of days later, I decided to ask the girl out, and she liked the idea.
However, to my surprise, she told me she would need to talk with her mother about it.
You could also phrase this last part as, "talk it over with her mother".
I got confused since the girl is 23 years old, but I let it pass once she told me that she would be able to go out with me.
Instead of "I let it pass", you could also say "I let it slide", which sounds a bit more natural to me.
Fast forward to our date, and the girl revealed to me that her mother justhad only allowed her to go out with me under the condition that her brother was seated at the table next to us, which he did not do, but he had to keep that from his mother.
"did not" is often written/said as "didn't".
This droppedmade my jaw drop and raised a lot of red flags.
Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit that I was going with her, and she told her mother that she would only be with her brother and his girlfriend.
Instead of "omit that I was going with her", you could also write, "lied about me not going".
Since then, our second date, we have not been able to hang out together due to her mother's controlling behavior and emotional blackmail.
"Have not" is often written/said as "haven't".
Her mother is threatensing to make the girl homeless if she does not dobey what she is told.
Instead of "make the girl homeless", you could say, "kick her out on the streets".
"Does not" is often written/said as "Doesn't".
Therefore, now, I am really skeptical about keep on trying to datekeep dating this girl, since she seems powerless to stand up for herself, and I do not intend to be involved in such a complicated family dynamic.
"I am" is often written/said as "I'm".
"Do not" is often written/said as "don't".
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! The passage really flowed nicely! I did notice, however, that you didn't use a ton of contractions.
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I met this girl at the gym and, casually, began chatting with her. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I met this girl at the gym and, casually, I began to chat |
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Initially, I found this behavior inoffensive and thought the mother was just wondering who I was. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Initially, I found |
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A couple of days later, I decided to ask the girl out, and she liked the idea. A couple of days later A couple of days later, I decided to ask the girl out, and she seemed to have liked the idea. |
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However, to my surprise, she told me she would need to talk with her mother about it. However, to my surprise, she told me she would need to talk with her mother about it. You could also phrase this last part as, "talk it over with her mother". However, to my surprise, she told me she would |
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I got confused since the girl is 23 years old, but I let it pass once she told me that she would be able to go out with me. I got confused since the girl is 23 years old, but I let it pass once she told me that she would be able to go out with me. Instead of "I let it pass", you could also say "I let it slide", which sounds a bit more natural to me. I |
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Fast forward to our date, the girl revealed to me that her mother just allowed her to go out with me under the condition that her brother was seated at the table next to us, which he did not do but had to keep that from his mother. Fast forward to our date, and the girl revealed to me that her mother "did not" is often written/said as "didn't". Fast forward to our date, the girl revealed to me that her mother |
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This dropped my jaw and raised a lot of red flags. This
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Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit that I was with her, and she told her mother she would be with her brother and his girlfriend. Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit that I was going with her, and she told her mother that she would only be with her brother and his girlfriend. Instead of "omit that I was going with her", you could also write, "lied about me not going". Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to omit/kept from her mother that I was with her, and instead, she told her mother she would only be with her brother and his girlfriend. Some weeks later, on our second date, the girl had to |
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Since then, our second date, we have not been able to hang out due to her mother controlling behavior and emotional blackmail. Since "Have not" is often written/said as "haven't". Since Since |
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Her mother threatens to make the girl homeless if she does not obey what she is told. Her mother is threaten Instead of "make the girl homeless", you could say, "kick her out on the streets". "Does not" is often written/said as "Doesn't". Her mother threatens to make Her mother threaten |
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Therefore, now, I am really skeptical about keep on trying to date this girl since she seems powerless to stand up for herself, and I do not intend to be involved in such a complicated family dynamic. Therefore "I am" is often written/said as "I'm". "Do not" is often written/said as "don't". Therefore, now, I am really skeptical about
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