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yui

May 22, 2020

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organizing my house

Last night, I suddenly came up with organizing my house. Then, I had cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight. I wonder why suddenly I have an impulse to do something at midnight.

And this morning, as soon as I wake up, I organized a fridge.
After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this moment.
In my house, there are so much stuff, so I want to aim for a minimalist by selling or throwing away it.

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Last night, I suddenly came up withdecided to organizinge my house.

Then, I had cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.

I wonder why suddenly I have an impulse to do somethingI had the impulse to organize and clean at midnight.

And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

AThen I realized, after cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and. I like this momentat refreshing feeling after I clean.

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In my house, there's too much stuff, so I'm trying to become a minimalist. I plan to do this by selling or throwing away some stuff.

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yui

May 23, 2020

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Thank you very much!

Last night, I suddenly came up withdecided to organizinge my house.

Then, I hadI cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.

I wonder why I suddenly I have anhad the impulse to do something like that at midnight.

And then this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like thisat moment.

In my house, tThere areis so much stuff, so in my house. I want to aim for a minimalist style by selling or throwing away it.

I missed something here:
"throwing away it" -> "throwing it away".

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My room was very cluttered, so I tidied it yesterday. It's definitely a good feeling when you finish!

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yui

May 23, 2020

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Thank you for correcting. I felt so good after I finished!

Last night, I suddenly came up with decided to reorganizinge my house.

別の言い方です :)

Then, I hadSo, I cleaned up themy kitchen feverishly at midnight.

feverishlyはあまり使われていないと思います。

I wonder why I suddenly I have anthe impulse to do something at midnight.

And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I reorganizsed athe fridge.

過去形です

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this momenat.

In my house, tThere areis so much stuff in my house, so I want to aim for a minimalist bytry and live more minimalist, and start selling or throwing away it[things I don't need].

私だったらこう書きます(^o^)
[things I don't need]はoptionalです!

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Reading your entry has made me want to clean... :')

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yui

May 23, 2020

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Thank you for correcting!
In the last sentence, why do you correct the position of "in my house"?
Is it unnatural that is brought to the start of phrase?

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midori

May 23, 2020

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It's not unnatural, but I think it's more common to write it how I wrote it.
"In my house, there is so much stuff..." sounds kind of poetic/almost like a lyric. So, if you were aiming for that, it would be OK.
But when just writing a diary entry or talking to someone, "There('s) is so much stuff in my house..." is better!

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yui

May 23, 2020

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I understand it! Thank you very much!
Your explanation is very easy to understand.

oOrganizing mMy hHouse

Mostly all letters in a title should be capitalized
Exceptions:
https://grammar.yourdictionary.com/capitalization/rules-for-capitalization-in-titles.html

Last night, I suddenly came up with an idea to organizinge my house.

You can't say what you wanted to say how you said it, because you need to mention that you thought of what you wanted to do.
You could either say "I suddenly came up with an idea to organize my house," or "I suddenly thought about organizing my house," or"I suddenly decided to organize my house"

Then, I had cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.

I wonder why suddenly I have aI had a sudden impulse to do something at midnight.

Sounds better this way - also you have to say "had" instead of "have" because your impulse was in the past, so you have to use past tense

And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

You have to say "woke up" instead of "wake up" because of past tense. You already woke up.

If you say "a fridge", it could be anyone's fridge. When you say "the fridge" or "my fridge", that means you are talking about your specific fridge.

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this momentfeeling.

I think "feeling" sounds better than "moment" here, because you are saying that you feel refreshed.

In my house, there areis so much stuff, so I want to aim for a minimalist lifestyle by selling or throwing things away it.

"Stuff" is singular, so you should say "is" instead of "are"

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Awesome text! :)

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yui

May 23, 2020

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Thank you for correcting.
You explained the reason why that can be so in detail, so it's very helpful to me. Thank you!

organizing my house


oOrganizing mMy hHouse

Mostly all letters in a title should be capitalized Exceptions: https://grammar.yourdictionary.com/capitalization/rules-for-capitalization-in-titles.html

Last night, I suddenly came up with organizing my house.


Last night, I suddenly came up with an idea to organizinge my house.

You can't say what you wanted to say how you said it, because you need to mention that you thought of what you wanted to do. You could either say "I suddenly came up with an idea to organize my house," or "I suddenly thought about organizing my house," or"I suddenly decided to organize my house"

Last night, I suddenly came up with decided to reorganizinge my house.

別の言い方です :)

Last night, I suddenly came up withdecided to organizinge my house.

Last night, I suddenly came up withdecided to organizinge my house.

Then, I had cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.


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Then, I hadI cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.

Then, I hadSo, I cleaned up themy kitchen feverishly at midnight.

feverishlyはあまり使われていないと思います。

Then, I had cleaned up the kitchen feverishly at midnight.

I wonder why suddenly I have an impulse to do something at midnight.


I wonder why suddenly I have aI had a sudden impulse to do something at midnight.

Sounds better this way - also you have to say "had" instead of "have" because your impulse was in the past, so you have to use past tense

I wonder why I suddenly I have anhad the impulse to do something like that at midnight.

I wonder why I suddenly I have anthe impulse to do something at midnight.

I wonder why suddenly I have an impulse to do somethingI had the impulse to organize and clean at midnight.

And this morning, as soon as I wake up, I organized a fridge.


And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

You have to say "woke up" instead of "wake up" because of past tense. You already woke up. If you say "a fridge", it could be anyone's fridge. When you say "the fridge" or "my fridge", that means you are talking about your specific fridge.

And then this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I reorganizsed athe fridge.

過去形です

And this morning, as soon as I waoke up, I organized athe fridge.

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this moment.


After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this momentfeeling.

I think "feeling" sounds better than "moment" here, because you are saying that you feel refreshed.

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like this momenat.

After cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and I like thisat moment.

AThen I realized, after cleaning up something, I always become feel refreshed and. I like this momentat refreshing feeling after I clean.

In my house, there are so much stuff, so I want to aim for a minimalist by selling or throwing away it.


In my house, there areis so much stuff, so I want to aim for a minimalist lifestyle by selling or throwing things away it.

"Stuff" is singular, so you should say "is" instead of "are"

In my house, tThere areis so much stuff in my house, so I want to aim for a minimalist bytry and live more minimalist, and start selling or throwing away it[things I don't need].

私だったらこう書きます(^o^) [things I don't need]はoptionalです!

In my house, tThere areis so much stuff, so in my house. I want to aim for a minimalist style by selling or throwing away it.

I missed something here: "throwing away it" -> "throwing it away".

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