MY GUESS: In this world where everyon, in which most people wants to stand out from the crowd, many people have created a a personal definition of being "successful."

I could not understand the meaning of the original sentence, but guess this might be the meaning. (The original had some over-generalization errors: not everybody wants to be "successful" . . . some people are content as things as they are.)

There are many ways to understand the concept,"success" and it may change depending on the culture and customs of each society.

In the following essay, I will describe whathow I perceive as a "successful person" and the criteria to be classified like this.ing "successful."

Firstly, I consider that being successful is related to job competency, and how demanded is that position.

LOGIC: After retirement? And what about childhood? (For persons from age 18 - 65, this makes sense. However, what about older or younger people?)

There is a popular quote that says, “if you are good at something, you will be succeedingssful at it”."

PUNCTUATION: In American English, the period always comes *before" the end-quote.

Although I believe is true, there are other external conditions that influence ifing whether someone can reach thiseir potential at work.

The main one is related to how demanded is the job, due it is in line with paymentFor example, the market demand for their skills and their pay rate.

People can be good doing their job but still earning less than minimal wage because of the low demandvarious factors.

LOGIC: There are mutiple reasons for low wages. I therefore this wording.

To be more precise, I also believe that people who have good incomes are considered "successful" in amost society.ies.

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I can not say if it is positive or not, but reality shows, that is the most popular beliefMY GUESS: However, whether we should define "success" in terms of material wealth is open to debate.

In conclusion, I consider that being successful is interrelated with how people excel at work and how demanded is that job in a societyaccept a materialistic view of "success," even though not all rich people are happy and some con artists who are filthy rich are not respected.

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Opinion Essay 25/04. I would really appreciate the help :)

In the following essay, I will describe what I perceive as a successful person and the criteria to be classified like this.onsidered successful.

Firstly, I consider that being successful is related to job competency, and how demanded ising that position. is.

Although I believe this is true, there are other external conditions that influence if someone can reach this potential at work.

The main one is related to how demandeding is the job, due it is in line with payment rate. and the salary earned.

People can be good at doing their job but still earning less than the minimalum wage because of the low demand.

To be more precise, I also believe that people who have a good income are considered successful in a society.

Regarding why I think is this the criteria, I would say it is because I have receivedseen this in my society.

People like money and prestige, and these are the same qualities that hadve defined a successful person for many generations in my country.

I can not say if it is positive or not, but reality shows, that it is the most popular belief.

In conclusion, I consider that being successful is interdirectly related withto how people excel at work and how demanded ising that job is in a society.

Theseis criteria are based on the reality that I see in my society.

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'it' should be in its plural form, 'they', because it is replacing a plural phrase (the many ways to understand the concept).
Generally, 'society' refers to everyone in the world, so saying 'each society' sounds weird.

In the following essay, I will describe what I perceive as a successful person and the criteria to be classified like thisas successful.

You should try to avoid using the word 'like' in formal writing. You could also replace 'like this' with 'this way'.

Firstly, I considerbelieve that being successful is related to job competency, and how demanded is that position is.

There is a popular quote that says, “if you are good at something, you will be succeed ing at it”.

'you will be succeeding at it' implies you are already succeeding at it, not that you will succeed at it in the future.

Although I believe this is true, there are other external conditions that influence if someone can reach this potential at work.

The main one is related to how demanded is the job, due it is in line with payment rate is, and how high the salary is.

I'm not too sure what you meant by 'due it is in line with payment rate'

People can be good at doing their job but still earning less than minimalum wage because of the low demand.

Minimum and minimal are very similar words. They both mean the smallest possible amount of something. But, minimal can also mean 'very small' or 'barely adequate', whereas minimum can only be used with numbers. In this case, people always say 'minimum wage' rather than 'minimal wage' because it makes it clear that they are talking about the smallest possible wage, and not just a small wage.

To be more precise, I also believe that people who have good income are considered successful in a society.

Regarding why I think this this the criteria, I would say because I have received in mbeen influenced by society.

People like money and prestige, and these are the same qualities that hadve defined a successful person for many generations in my country.

Since they still define a successful person, you should use 'have' rather than 'had'

I can not say if it is positive or not, but reality shows, that is the most popular belief.

'cannot' should be used for formal writing because it is much more common.

In conclusion, I consider that being successful is interrelated with how people excel at work and how demanded is that job in as in society.

These criteria are based on the reality I see in my society.

In this world where everyone wants to stand out from the crowd,: people have created a definition of being successful.

The colon makes a grammatically correct transition into explaining a bit more about this world where everyone wants to stand out.

There are many ways to understand the concept, and it may change. It may depending on the culture and customs of each society.

In the following essay, I will describe what I perceive as a successful person and the criteria to be classified like thisas one.

Firstly, I consider that being successful is related to job competency, and how demanded is that position is.

There is a popular quote that says,: “if you are good at something, you will be succeeding atssful in it”.

The main one is related to how demanded ising the job is, due it is in line with payment rate.

For the second part of the sentence after the comma, I am not immediately sure what the meaning is.

People can be good doingat their job but still earning less than minimal wage because of the low demand for that particular job.

To be more precise, I also believe that people who have a good income are considered successful in a society.

Regarding why I think this this the criteria, I would say because I have received in my society.

After the comma, I'm not immediately sure what you are trying to refer to. Maybe you are trying to refer to how you have seen examples in your day-day life?

I can not say if it is positive or not, b. But, reality shows, that this is the most popular belief.

In conclusion, I consider that being successful is interrelated with how people excel at work and how demanded is that job in as in society.

As a side note, in this context it is slightly more natural to remove the pronoun preceding society.