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leonard

June 29, 2023

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Online orders

Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through a shopping online website. I order all of them 3 days ago. In that 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores. Both are far from my home, in the south side of my country (my home is in the middle of the north side). Because of that, these two take 3 days to be delivered to me.
I’ve bought clothes to prepare for the sea trip that I mentioned in the previous post. There are two T-shirts and one pair of shorts in total. All of them are one of the newest in their store so they’re just a little expensive. I’ve looked for sales and vouchers to decrease the price. After unboxing these packages, I’ve very satisfied with them. They look very similar to what the shop advertises. What’s more, both are fitting with me. I’ve worried that they are not comfortable and their quality is low, but it comes as I expected. I think today is my lucky day.
Not at all, the remaining order is what I truly want because I will use it for a long time. It is my modern black calculator. I used my sister’s old calculator until it ran out of battery. So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’s time for buying a new one. This latest version calculator is great as I saw the review video on the Internet. It has many functions to help me solve some Math problems. Moreover, it can be useful in physics and chemistry (I haven’t tried it yet). That calculator is very convenient, but of course, it must also have a corresponding price. Its price is almost equal to the sum of the other 2 packages combined.
The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year now decreased to half. I should continue to save this money for demand.
In short, all of these orders make me glad. Next time, if I have conditions and I can afford that, I’ll buy more on this website.

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Online orders

Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through an online shopping online website.

I ordered all of them 3 days ago.

In thate 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores.

Both are far from my home, which is in the south side of my country (m. My home is in the middle of the north side).

Because of that, these two takeit took 3 days to be delivered to me.

I’ve bought clothes to prepare for the sea trip that I mentioned in the previous post.

There are two T-shirts and one pair of shorts in total.

All of them are one of the newestw season arrivals in their store, so they’re just a little expensive.

I’ve looked for sales and vouchers to decrease the price.

After unboxpacking these packages, I’ve very satisfied with them.

They look very similar to what the shop advertises.

What’s more, both are fitting withfit me.

I’ve was worried that they arewould not be comfortable and their quality is low, but it comes as I expected.would be poor but that was not the case.

I think today is my lucky day.

Not at all, only that, the other remaining order is what I truly want becauseed and I will use it for a long time.

It is my modern black calculator.

I used my sister’s old calculator until it ran out of battery.the battery stopped working.

So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’thought it was time forto buying a new onecalculator.

This latest versionmodel of calculator is great as I saw the review video on the Internet.

It has many functions to help me solve some Mmath problems.

Moreover, it canould be useful in physics and chemistry (I just haven’t tried it yet).

That calculator is very convenientuseful, but of course, it must also have a corresponding price.

Its price is almost equal to the sum of the other 2 packages combined.

The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year, has now decreased toby half.

I should continue to save this money for demandany future purchases..

In short, all of these orders makde me glad.

Next time, if I have conditionsrequire anything and I can afford thate price, I’ll buy more on this website.

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leonard

July 1, 2023

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Thanks for your corrections! :)

Online orders

Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through an online shopping online website.

I order all of them 3 days ago.

In thatose 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores.

Both are far from my home, in the south side of my country, (my home is in the middle of the north side).

Because of that, these two takeook 3 days to be delivered to me.

I’ve bought clothes to prepare for the sea trip that I mentioned in the previous post.

There are two T-shirts and one pair of shorts in total.

All of them are one offrom the newest clothes in their store so they’re just a little expensive.

I’ve looked for sales and vouchers to decrease the price.

After unboxing these packages, I’vem very satisfied with them.

They look very similar to what the shop advertises.

What’s more, both are fitting with mefit me well.

I’ve was worried that they arewould not be comfortable and that their quality iswould be low, but ithey coames as better than I expected.

I think today is my lucky day.

It is my modern black calculator.

I used my sister’s old calculator until it ran out of battery.

So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’s time forto buying a new one.

This latest version calculator is great as I saw the review video on the Internet.

It has many functions to help me solve some Mmath problems.

Moreover, it can be useful in physics and chemistry (but I haven’t tried it yet).

Its price is almost equal to the sum of the other 2 packages combined.

The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year now decreased to half.

I should continue to save this money for demandlater.

In short, all of these orders make me glad.

Next time, if I have conditions and I can afford that, I’ll buy more on this website.

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Good job! Your sentence construction is very strong. There are some minor stylistic and grammatical correction, but otherwise, great job!

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leonard

July 1, 2023

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Thanks for your corrections and your feedback! :D

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Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through a shopping online website.


Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through an online shopping online website.

Today, I’ve just received 3 packages that I bought through an online shopping online website.

I order all of them 3 days ago.


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I ordered all of them 3 days ago.

In that 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores.


In thatose 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores.

In thate 3 packages, there are two bags from two different clothing stores.

Both are far from my home, in the south side of my country (my home is in the middle of the north side).


Both are far from my home, in the south side of my country, (my home is in the middle of the north side).

Both are far from my home, which is in the south side of my country (m. My home is in the middle of the north side).

Because of that, these two take 3 days to be delivered to me.


Because of that, these two takeook 3 days to be delivered to me.

Because of that, these two takeit took 3 days to be delivered to me.

I’ve bought clothes to prepare for the sea trip that I mentioned in the previous post.


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There are two T-shirts and one pair of shorts in total.


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All of them are one of the newest in their store so they’re just a little expensive.


All of them are one offrom the newest clothes in their store so they’re just a little expensive.

All of them are one of the newestw season arrivals in their store, so they’re just a little expensive.

I’ve looked for sales and vouchers to decrease the price.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After unboxing these packages, I’ve very satisfied with them.


After unboxing these packages, I’vem very satisfied with them.

After unboxpacking these packages, I’ve very satisfied with them.

They look very similar to what the shop advertises.


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What’s more, both are fitting with me.


What’s more, both are fitting with mefit me well.

What’s more, both are fitting withfit me.

I’ve worried that they are not comfortable and their quality is low, but it comes as I expected.


I’ve was worried that they arewould not be comfortable and that their quality iswould be low, but ithey coames as better than I expected.

I’ve was worried that they arewould not be comfortable and their quality is low, but it comes as I expected.would be poor but that was not the case.

I think today is my lucky day.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Not at all, the remaining order is what I truly want because I will use it for a long time.


Not at all, only that, the other remaining order is what I truly want becauseed and I will use it for a long time.

It is my most modern black calculator.


I used my sister’s old calculator until it ran out of battery.


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I used my sister’s old calculator until it ran out of battery.the battery stopped working.

So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’s time for buying a new one.


So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’s time forto buying a new one.

So besides replacing the battery, I guess it’thought it was time forto buying a new onecalculator.

This latest version calculator is great as I saw the review video on the Internet.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This latest versionmodel of calculator is great as I saw the review video on the Internet.

It has many functions to help me solve some Math problems.


It has many functions to help me solve some Mmath problems.

It has many functions to help me solve some Mmath problems.

Moreover, it can be useful in physics and chemistry (I haven’t tried it yet).


Moreover, it can be useful in physics and chemistry (but I haven’t tried it yet).

Moreover, it canould be useful in physics and chemistry (I just haven’t tried it yet).

That calculator is very convenient, but of course, it must also have a corresponding price.


That calculator is very convenientuseful, but of course, it must also have a corresponding price.

Its price is almost equal to the sum of the other 2 packages combined.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year now decreased to half.


The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year now decreased to half.

The pocket money that I saved from the beginning of the year, has now decreased toby half.

I should continue to save this money for demand.


I should continue to save this money for demandlater.

I should continue to save this money for demandany future purchases..

In short, all of these orders make me glad.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In short, all of these orders makde me glad.

Next time, if I have conditions and I can afford that, I’ll buy more on this website.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Next time, if I have conditionsrequire anything and I can afford thate price, I’ll buy more on this website.

It is my modern black calculator.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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