yesterday
One of the best hikes I had in 2025
@marblemenow suggested that I talk about my best hikes.
Here it is: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/W1Ujh1m9U0E
As usual, please feel free to tell me if I did something wrong in the video.
This video has a follow-up story that came later.
When my friend and I went back to the foot of the waterfall and walked to the main road. We couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild. And all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for two of us.
At the end, two policemen who drove up to deal with a car accident took us to the nearest bus stop.
When the two policemen heard our exploration story, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top level of the waterfall. Every year, they have to rescue the lost hikers several times. And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some people are injured.
One of the best hikes I had in 2025
@marblemenow suggested that I talk about my best hikes.
Here it is: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/W1Ujh1m9U0E
As usual, please feel free to tell me if I did something wrong in the video.
This video has a follow-up story that came later.happened
Wwhen my friend and I went back to the foot of the waterfall and walked to the main road.
This can be made into one sentence by combining with the previous sentence.
We couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild.
While this is a complete and correct sentence, you can continue the thought with "and" making the complete thought flow more naturally.
Aand all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for two of us.
These two sentences can also be made into one sentence.
At the end, two policemen, who drove up to deal with a car accident, took us to the nearest bus stop.
This is a little more complex. Everything between the two "," is a small clarifying explanation. By itself it is not a complete sentence, but it adds more detail about why the policemen were there.
If you removed everything between ",", you would still have a complete and correct sentence: "At the end, two policemen took us to the nearest bus stop."
When the two policemen heard about our exploration storyedition, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top level of the waterfall.
Here "exploration story" is valid, but wouldn't typically be said by a native speaker. People would still understand you though.
Instead, using a word like "expedition", which is more grand than "exploration", adds subtle context that this hike entailed much more than your normal hikes!
^This is also a sentence where removing "which is more grand then 'exploration'", still leaves us with a complete sentence.
EThey told us that every year, they frequently have to rescue the lost hikers several times.
Added "They told us that" to clarify that the policemen told you this information.
"Several times" can be replaced with "frequently".
"lost hikers" does not need "the" in front of it.
And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some people are injured.
Feedback
Good job! You seem to have a very good grasp on English so tried to give more advanced feedback.
Please let me know if anything needs clarification!
today
Thank you so much for such detailed and advanced feedback and corrections!
I totally got them and learned a lot from them!
Have a nice day!
One of the best hikes I had in 2025
@marblemenow suggested that I talk about my best hikes.
Here it isone is / Here’s one: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/W1Ujh1m9U0E
Since you wrote “hikes” (plural) in the previous sentence, “it” (singular) doesn’t work here.
As usual, please feel free to tell me if I did something wrong in the video.
This video has a follow-up story that came later.
When my friend and I went back to the foot of the waterfall and walked to the main road., we…
Merge this with the next sentence.
W…we couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild.remote.
“Wild” sounds like maybe the available taxi drivers looked too disreputable, or maybe there were too many passengers fighting over each taxi. I’m guessing you mean “remote.”
And all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for (the) two of us.
Suggestion: And none of the cars that passed by had enough space for the two of us.
AtIn the end, two policemen who drove up to deal with a car accident took us to the nearest bus stop.
When {the two policemen | they} heard our exploration story, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top (level) of the waterfall.
Every year, they have to rescue the lost hikers several times.
And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some peopleof the {people | hikers} are injured.
Feedback
Well done! I’ll watch the video and provide feedback later.
yesterday
@JoeTofu's description of a wild taxi is hilarious. His suggestions of "remote" and "none" are excellent.
I read/heard no errors in the video. The camera work and audio were very well integrated, and the story of the hike was engaging because it was about more than the scenery and location. Overall, outstanding!
yesterday
Thanks for the vote of confidence, Liag!
:-)
today
@Tammy, I agree with Liag that the video is really good. Since I know you value feedback on pronunciation, I’ll call out two minor points:
• At the beginning and maybe a couple times later in the video: the vowel in “this” should be what we call a “short i”, as in “hit” or “miss”.
• About halfway through the video: “it was hard but” — the T at the end of “but” should not be voiced (the word should sound like one syllable, not two).
Again, these issues are really minor. Your narration in the video is great!
today
@JoeTofu @Tammy I didn't know you also would like feedback on pronunciation.
I think what may be happening when you say the word "but" is that you are adding a "short a" sound at the end, so it sounds like "butta."
I tutored Chinese children in English online for a while, and one of our most experienced colleagues told us that adding a "short a" sound at the end of some English words was common among native speakers of Mandarin Chinese who are learning English. I think he said it's because words in Mandarin don't end with a hard consonant (like the t in "but.") Maybe you will notice if that is what you are doing. If so, it could help you to anticipate when to double check the ending sound. For example, I think I hear it slightly at the beginning of the video when you say "best." But, I should emphasize that understand every word you said!
today
Thank you both so much!
I'll try to improve the pronunciation, especially on these two points:
1）the short i
2) words end with a hard consonant
Thanks again!
Have a nice day!
One of the best hikes I had in 2025
@marblemenow suggested that I talk about my best hikes.
Here it is: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/W1Ujh1m9U0E
We couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild.
And all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for two of us.
At the end, two policemen who drove up to deal with a car accident took us to the nearest bus stop.
When the two policemen heard our exploration story, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top level of the waterfall.
Every year, several times a year, they have to rescue the lost hikers several times.
And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some people are injured.
today
Thank you!
Have a nice day!
|
One of the best hikes I had in 2025 This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
@marblemenow suggested that I talk about my best hikes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
Here it is: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/W1Ujh1m9U0E This sentence has been marked as perfect! Here Since you wrote “hikes” (plural) in the previous sentence, “it” (singular) doesn’t work here. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
As usual, please feel free to tell me if I did something wrong in the video. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
This video has a follow-up story that came later. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This video has a follow-up story that |
|
When my friend and I went back to the foot of the waterfall and walked to the main road. When my friend and I went back to the foot of the waterfall and walked to the main road Merge this with the next sentence.
This can be made into one sentence by combining with the previous sentence. |
|
We couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
“Wild” sounds like maybe the available taxi drivers looked too disreputable, or maybe there were too many passengers fighting over each taxi. I’m guessing you mean “remote.” We couldn't take a taxi because it was too wild While this is a complete and correct sentence, you can continue the thought with "and" making the complete thought flow more naturally. |
|
And all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for two of us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! And all of the cars that passed by didn't have enough space for (the) two of us. Suggestion: And none of the cars that passed by had enough space for the two of us.
These two sentences can also be made into one sentence. |
|
At the end, two policemen who drove up to deal with a car accident took us to the nearest bus stop. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
At the end, two policemen, who drove up to deal with a car accident, took us to the nearest bus stop. This is a little more complex. Everything between the two "," is a small clarifying explanation. By itself it is not a complete sentence, but it adds more detail about why the policemen were there. If you removed everything between ",", you would still have a complete and correct sentence: "At the end, two policemen took us to the nearest bus stop." |
|
When the two policemen heard our exploration story, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top level of the waterfall. This sentence has been marked as perfect! When {the two policemen | they} heard our exploration story, they said we were lucky that we didn't climb to the top (level) of the waterfall. When the two policemen heard about our exp Here "exploration story" is valid, but wouldn't typically be said by a native speaker. People would still understand you though. Instead, using a word like "expedition", which is more grand than "exploration", adds subtle context that this hike entailed much more than your normal hikes! ^This is also a sentence where removing "which is more grand then 'exploration'", still leaves us with a complete sentence. |
|
Every year, they have to rescue the lost hikers several times. Every year, several times a year, they have to rescue the lost hikers Every year, they have to rescue
Added "They told us that" to clarify that the policemen told you this information. "Several times" can be replaced with "frequently". "lost hikers" does not need "the" in front of it. |
|
And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some people are injured. This sentence has been marked as perfect! And every time, it's hard and dangerous, especially when some This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium