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toshinou_kyouko

Feb. 5, 2024

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One of my favourite tv shows

I'm really fond of Adventure Times. This is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the dog. They live in, as I suspect, post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure! There're multiple kingdoms, each of these have something unusual about it. One of the kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called Candy Kingdom. There live candy people. Literally people (or living things) made of candy or other sweet things. The princess of this kingdom is Princess Bubblegum.
Another kingdom is called Ice Kingdom and as you already must have guessed there're lots of snow and ice. There live Ice King. At first he appears as a villain, but further in the series his character gets explained more and we understand that he's driven mad by his magic crown. But my favourite character is Marceline the Vampire Queen. I like how her character looks like. I'd say she has punk style. She wears cool outfit and has awesome haircut. She's very stylish. Also she's a badass and plays bass guitar.
One of the things I like this show for, are voice actors. Also, I like how story develops and we learn new facts about characters. Characters also grow and change with time.
Wrapping up, it's very interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.

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One of mMy fFavourite tv sTV Shows

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Well over half of the English results are for Favorite over Favourite; my browser fixes it to the shorter spelling every time.

I'm really fond of Adventure Times.

The show name is singular.

ThisIt is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the doga boy named Finn and a dog named Jake.

The verbiage used in the show will sound very, very weird to anyone who hasn't seen it. "the human boy" is only used in the show to draw you to the absurdity, people don't write or talk like this. You can rewrite this a few ways but I went with the most boring and easy to understand way.

They live in, as what I suspect, is a post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure!

TIn this world, there' are multiple kingdoms, each of these haves something unusual about it.

there're is really pushing it for most writing.

One of tThe kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called The Candy Kingdom.

you can check the fan wiki but I believe it's The Candy Kingdom in an introductory context.

There live cthe Candy people.

in this case I think it's a proper noun but I'm not checking

Literally people (oand other living things) made of candyies or other sweet thingsweets.

Another kingdom is called The Ice Kingdom and as you already must havemay have already guessed there'res lots of snow and ice.

There lives The Ice King.

At first he appears as a villain, but further in the series his character gets explainored more and we understand that he's driven mad by his magic crown.

This doesn't really explain why he's not a villain but I understand if you ran out of time, this is a long entry!

But, my favourite character is Marceline, the Vampire Queen.

I like how her character looks like.

I'd say she has a punk style.

She wears cool outfits and has an awesome haircut.

Also, she's a badass and plays bass guitar.

One of the things I like about this show for, areis its voice actors.

Also, I like how as the story develops and we learn new facts about characters.

You may have meant "how the story develops"

Characters also grow and change with time.

We're talking about development so this is not really also.

Wrapping up, it's very an interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.

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This is a long entry! I'm glad you found a good topic to write about. I would say that the British spellings of words are generally less in favor globally unless you intend to speak specifically British English going forward. They're obviously not wrong, but certainly less common given how English has spread these days.

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toshinou_kyouko

Feb. 6, 2024

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I really appreciate your corrections! I was wondering, in this correction: ~~This~~It is a cartoon tv series about ~~Finn the human boy and Jake the dog~~a boy named Finn and a dog named Jake.; how could I google it to learn more about This vs It usage? Is there a rule name for this? Obviously, I tried googling already but results were quite broad, about many cases.

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elwinmartin

Feb. 6, 2024

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the usage in the show is supposed to sound unnatural because the situation of a talking dog is unnatural, I'm not sure how to explain it "Finn the human" sounds like how you talk about aliens like 我々は人間である

ThisIt is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the dog.

They live in, as, I suspect, post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure!

There' are multiple kingdoms, each of these havehas something unusual about it.

One of the kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called Candy Kingdom.

Literally pPeople (or living things) literally made of candy or other sweet things.

Another kingdom is called Ice Kingdom and as you already must have guessed there're is a lots of snow and ice.

More of a personal preference.

There lives Ice King.

I like how her character looks like.

She wears a cool outfit and has an awesome haircut.

One of the things I like this show for, armost about the show is the voice actorsing.

Also, I like how the story develops and we learn new facts about characters.

Wrapping up, it's a very interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.

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toshinou_kyouko

Feb. 6, 2024

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Thank you for your corrections!

One of my favourite tv shows


One of mMy fFavourite tv sTV Shows

https://www.elevenwriting.com/blog/is-your-capitalized-in-a-title#:~:text=ll%20explain%20why.-,Which%20words%20do%20you%20capitalize%20in%20a%20title%3F,(you%2C%20my%2C%20hers) Well over half of the English results are for Favorite over Favourite; my browser fixes it to the shorter spelling every time.

I'm really fond of Adventure Times.


I'm really fond of Adventure Times.

The show name is singular.

This is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the dog.


ThisIt is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the dog.

ThisIt is a cartoon tv series about Finn the human boy and Jake the doga boy named Finn and a dog named Jake.

The verbiage used in the show will sound very, very weird to anyone who hasn't seen it. "the human boy" is only used in the show to draw you to the absurdity, people don't write or talk like this. You can rewrite this a few ways but I went with the most boring and easy to understand way.

They live in, as I suspect, post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure!


They live in, as, I suspect, post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure!

They live in, as what I suspect, is a post apocalyptic world and are always ready for adventure!

There're multiple kingdoms, each of these have something unusual about it.


There' are multiple kingdoms, each of these havehas something unusual about it.

TIn this world, there' are multiple kingdoms, each of these haves something unusual about it.

there're is really pushing it for most writing.

One of the kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called Candy Kingdom.


One of the kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called Candy Kingdom.

One of tThe kingdoms, where the most of the action happen, is called The Candy Kingdom.

you can check the fan wiki but I believe it's The Candy Kingdom in an introductory context.

There live candy people.


There live cthe Candy people.

in this case I think it's a proper noun but I'm not checking

Literally people (or living things) made of candy or other sweet things.


Literally pPeople (or living things) literally made of candy or other sweet things.

Literally people (oand other living things) made of candyies or other sweet thingsweets.

The princess of this kingdom is Princess Bubblegum.


Another kingdom is called Ice Kingdom and as you already must have guessed there're lots of snow and ice.


Another kingdom is called Ice Kingdom and as you already must have guessed there're is a lots of snow and ice.

More of a personal preference.

Another kingdom is called The Ice Kingdom and as you already must havemay have already guessed there'res lots of snow and ice.

There live Ice King.


There lives Ice King.

There lives The Ice King.

At first he appears as a villain, but further in the series his character gets explained more and we understand that he's driven mad by his magic crown.


At first he appears as a villain, but further in the series his character gets explainored more and we understand that he's driven mad by his magic crown.

This doesn't really explain why he's not a villain but I understand if you ran out of time, this is a long entry!

But my favourite character is Marceline the Vampire Queen.


But, my favourite character is Marceline, the Vampire Queen.

I like how her character looks like.


I like how her character looks like.

I like how her character looks like.

I'd say she has punk style.


I'd say she has a punk style.

She wears cool outfit and has awesome haircut.


She wears a cool outfit and has an awesome haircut.

She wears cool outfits and has an awesome haircut.

She's very stylish.


Also she's a badass and plays bass guitar.


Also, she's a badass and plays bass guitar.

One of the things I like this show for, are voice actors.


One of the things I like this show for, armost about the show is the voice actorsing.

One of the things I like about this show for, areis its voice actors.

Also, I like how story develops and we learn new facts about characters.


Also, I like how the story develops and we learn new facts about characters.

Also, I like how as the story develops and we learn new facts about characters.

You may have meant "how the story develops"

Characters also grow and change with time.


Characters also grow and change with time.

We're talking about development so this is not really also.

Wrapping up, it's very interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.


Wrapping up, it's a very interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.

Wrapping up, it's very an interesting, kind, and funny show which I recommend.

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