Oct. 3, 2024
On the Road
I’m traveling on the road with a little bit of tiredness.
The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season.
So many people are traveling on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
我在旅行途中，带着几分疲惫。
树木耸立在远近的山上，因着季节，正变得色彩斑斓。
国庆节假期旅行的人太多了，我们不得不在高速公路上多花了两个多小时。
I’m traveling on the road withand (am/feel) a little bit of tiredness.
The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season.
Could say "growing" colorful, to be a bit more poetic
So many people are traveling on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
This is grammatically OK, but it would be more natural to say something like: "... that it took us an extra hour and a half on the highway"
When you say "spend time" it seems like you are choosing to do it; when you say "takes time" it seems like it is not your choice (and thus can feel more negative)
Oct. 8, 2024
Thank you for the corrections and feedback! I learned a lot from them.
Have a nice day!
On the Road
I’m traveling on the road with a little bit of tirednessbit of fatigue.
The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season.
So many people are traveling on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
Oct. 5, 2024
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
On the Road
I’m traveling on the road with aALSO POSSIBLE: I’m traveling along a road feel little bit of tiredness.
SUGGESTION: Specify *where* the road is. In China? In Europe? Are your driving or in a bus?
The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season.
So many people are traveling oin China during this national holiday that. Highways are packed, so we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highwayroad.
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So are your traveling to your hometown? Hope you have a nice trip.
Oct. 4, 2024
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
On the Road
Stylistically it’s better not to capitalise every word
I’m travelling on the road withbut I am a little bit of tiredness.
The trees stand on the mountains far and near, and far, gette changing colourful because of the season.
So many people are traveling on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
Oct. 3, 2024
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
On the Road
I’m sleepily traveling on the road with a little bit of tiredness.
“With a little bit of tiredness” can be changed to “sleepily”.
I think it would be better to change “traveling” to something else as well because it feels a little weird to me.
The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of theas far as the eye can see, changing colors with the changing seasons.
“As far as the eye can see” is another way that you could say this and is possibly a little more natural.
You could also reference “autumn/fall” if that’s the season you’re talking about in order to avoid the repetition of “changing” in my suggestion (since that’s making my suggestion sound a little weird as well).
So many people are travelingThere’s so much traffic on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
Optional: either way works, but my suggestion makes it a little more concise which could make it clearer.
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Good job! These changes were really just to make it sound more natural, because grammatically I don’t think there were any big problems.
Oct. 3, 2024
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
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I’m traveling on the road with a little bit of tiredness. I’m sleepily traveling on the road “With a little bit of tiredness” can be changed to “sleepily”. I think it would be better to change “traveling” to something else as well because it feels a little weird to me. I’m travelling on the road
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The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season. The trees stand on the mountains “As far as the eye can see” is another way that you could say this and is possibly a little more natural. You could also reference “autumn/fall” if that’s the season you’re talking about in order to avoid the repetition of “changing” in my suggestion (since that’s making my suggestion sound a little weird as well). The trees stand on the mountains far and near, and This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! The trees stand on the mountains near and far, getting colorful because of the season. Could say "growing" colorful, to be a bit more poetic |
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So many people are traveling on this national holiday that we have to spend one and a half extra hours on the highway.
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