June 14, 2024
Oilseed Rape
When I was a child, I lived in a small village.
To the south of my village, there was a small river flowing eastward.
To south of the river, there was a village named Dali village.
Between each village and the river there was farmland. The distance from each village to the river was about 600 meters.
The river separated the farmland of the two villages. The farmland on the south side of the river belonged to Dali village. The farmland on the north side belonged to my village.
One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like vegetables was planted in the farmland on the south of the river. Soon we got to know it was oilseed rape and were told it tasted good if you cooked it with noodles.
At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad. We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables.
One day, a few other children and I decided to get some of the oilseed rape to see how delicious it would be.
We crawled into the oilseed rape field near the south side of the river. Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a far place, "don't run, we will catch you, little thief!"
We immediately ran to our village as soon as we heard the shouting. I felt my heart almost beating out of my chest.
In the end, we were all safe. We didn't see any adults chasing after us. Maybe, they just wanted to frighten us.
Before we sneaked into the oilseed rape field, we had done enough reconnaissance work and made sure that no one was guarding the oilseed rape field.
Even now, I sometimes wonder where the adults were and how they spotted us.
Oilseed Rape Plants
This isn't wrong but saying that as-is may be unfortunately confusing to people who aren't aware it's a plant
Anything else that makes it clear it's a plant would do the same thing
When I was a child, I lived in a small village.
To the south of my village, there was a small river flowing eastward.
To south of the river, there was a village named Dali village.
Between each village and the river there was farmland.
The distance from each village to the river was about 600 meters.
The river separated the farmland of the two villages.
The farmland on the south side of the river belonged to Dali village.
The farmland on the north side belonged to my village.
One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like vegetables was planted in the farmland on the south of the river.
Soon we got to know it was oilseed rape and were told it tasted good if you cooked it with noodles.
At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad.
We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables.
One day, a few other children and I decided to get some of the oilseed rape to see how delicious it would be.
We crawled into the oilseed rape field near the south side of the river.
Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a far place, "don't run, we will catch you, little thief!"
We immediately ran to our village as soon as we heard the shouting.
I felt my heart almost beating out of my chest.
In the end, we were all safe.
We didn't see any adults chasing after us.
Maybe, they just wanted to frighten us.
Before we sneaked into the oilseed rape field, we had done enough reconnaissance work and made sure that no one was guarding the oilseed rape field.
Even now, I sometimes wonder where the adults were and how they spotted us.
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Oilseed Rape
When I was a child, I lived in a small village.
To the south of my village, there was a small river flowing eastward.
To the south of the river, there was a village named Dali village.
Between eachmy village and the river there was farmland.
The distance from eachmy village and Dali village to the river was about 600 meters.
The river separated the farmland of the two villages.
The farmland on the south side of the river belonged to Dali village.
The farmland on the north side belonged to my village.
One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like a vegetables was planted in the farmland on the south of the river.
Soon we got to know it was oilseed rape and were told it tasted good if you cooked it with noodles.
At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad.
We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables.
One day, a few other children and I decided to get some of the oilseed rape to see how delicious it would be.
We crawled into the oilseed rape field near the south side of the river.
Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a faraway place, "don't run, we will catch you, little thief!"
We immediately ran to our village as soon as we heard the shouting.
I felt my heart almost beating out of my chest.
In the end, we were all safe.
We didn't see any adults chasing after us.
Maybe, they just wanted to frighten us.
Before we sneaked into the oilseed rape field, we had done enough reconnaissance work and made sure that no one was guarding the oilseed rape field.
Even now, I sometimes wonder where the adults were and how they spotted us.
June 15, 2024
Thank you very much.
When I was aALSO POSSIBLE: During my child,hood I lived in a small village.
The original is fine; I merely offer an alternative.
To the sALSO POSSIBLE: South of my village, there was a small river flowing eastward.
The original is possible; the correction above is more concise.
To south of the river, there was a village named Dali village.
NOTE: No need to repeat the word "village" twice.
Between eachthat village and the river there was some farmland.
NOTE: Not *all* villages are like this. (The word "that village" is better than "each village.")
MY GUESS: The distance from each village in that region to the river was about 600 meters.
COMMENT: In some regions of China, this might not be true. I therefore added "in that region."
ALSO POSSIBLE: The river separatmarked the farmland ofbetween the two villages.
Although the original is possible, this is clearer.
The farmland on the south side of the river belonged to Dali village.
The farmland on the north side belonged to my village.
One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like some vegetables that was planted in the farmland on the south of the river.
Soon we gotcame to know it was oilseed rape and were told it tasted good if youwhen cooked it with noodles.
At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad/tough/frugal.
The words "tough" or "frugal" also could be used instead of "bad."
We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables.
One day, a few other children and I decided to get some of the oilseed rape to see how delicious it would be.
We crawled into the oilseed rape field near the south side of the river.
Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a far place, "dDon't try to run, we will catch you, little thiefs!"
GRAMMAR: The plural is better - more than "little theif" existed, right?
I felt my heart almost beating out of my chest.
In the end, we were all safe.
We didn't see any adults chasing after us.
Maybe, they just wanted to frighten us.
Before we sneaked into the oilseed rape field, we had done enough reconnaissance work and made sure that no one was guarding the oilseed rape field.
Even now, I sometimes wonder where the adults were and how they spotted us.
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Are you writing about this place: https://www.thedaliproject.com/dali-village-1
June 15, 2024
China has changed so much in recent decades, hasn't it?
June 15, 2024
Thank you very much.
No, I am not.
The place in the link is in Guizhou province. It’s a tourist attraction and is protected by the country. I am in the northwest part of Anhui Province. The Dali in my article is 大李 while the one you referred to is 大利. Li in Chinese has different characters and tones.
June 15, 2024
Yes. It has changed so much in the past decades.
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When I was a child, I lived in a small village.
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To the south of my village, there was a small river flowing eastward.
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To south of the river, there was a village named Dali village. To south of the river, there was a village named Dali NOTE: No need to repeat the word "village" twice. To the south of the river, there was a village named Dali village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Between each village and the river there was farmland. Between NOTE: Not *all* villages are like this. (The word "that village" is better than "each village.") Between This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The distance from each village to the river was about 600 meters. MY GUESS: The distance from each village in that region to the river was about 600 meters. COMMENT: In some regions of China, this might not be true. I therefore added "in that region." The distance from This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like vegetables was planted in the farmland on the south of the river. One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like some vegetable One year in spring, we children found that a new kind of plant that looked like a vegetable This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Soon we got to know it was oilseed rape and were told it tasted good if you cooked it with noodles. Soon we This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad. At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad/tough/frugal. The words "tough" or "frugal" also could be used instead of "bad." At that time, people's living conditions in the countryside were very bad. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables. We couldn't even eat fresh vegetables. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One day, a few other children and I decided to get some of the oilseed rape to see how delicious it would be. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We crawled into the oilseed rape field near the south side of the river. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a far place, "don't run, we will catch you, little thief!" Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a far place, " GRAMMAR: The plural is better - more than "little theif" existed, right? Only after we had picked one or two of the oilseed rape, we suddenly heard some adults shouting from a faraway place, "don't run, we will catch you, little thief!" This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We immediately ran to our village as soon as we heard the shouting. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I felt my heart almost beating out of my chest. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the end, we were all safe. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We didn't see any adults chasing after us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Maybe, they just wanted to frighten us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Before we sneaked into the oilseed rape field, we had done enough reconnaissance work and made sure that no one was guarding the oilseed rape field. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Even now, I sometimes wonder where the adults were and how they spotted us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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