Feb. 21, 2023
OFFICIAL EMAIL
Write an official e-mail to an investor asking for financial support for your new invention. Describe the invention and explain how it can help people.
Dear sir/ madam,
I am writing to you because I am looking for an investor to financially back my newest invention. I believe my invention will be very beneficial to a lot of people.
My idea for an invention is for a wheelchair that is able to be lowered and raised. Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things in reachable distance.The device will be equipped with three buttons on the right or left armrest depending on whether the person is left-handed or right-handed. Pressing the upper button will set the vehicle for driving in the direction chosen by the passenger. The middle button will safely lower it to the left or right side as needed. The upper button, on the other hand, will raise the user up to three levels selected by them. The device will be available with a remote control so that grandchildren or other family members can serve their loved one.
I suggest that a wheelchair with lifting and lowering function will help save disabled and elderly people plenty of time. They will be able to reach things on high shelves and things that are normally out of reach. Disabled people will be able to lock doors, open windows and check thermostats which a lot of people in wheelchairs currently cannot do since they are in a sitting position. I think also lowering the chair would help a lot. It would help greatly since when a disabled person drops something on the floor, they are not usually able to pick it back up.
I hope that I have piqued your interest. Should you have any queries or doubts, please do not hesitate to enquire about my invention.
I look forward to your response.
Yours sincerely,
XYZ
Dear sSir/ mMadam,
I believe my inventionit will be very beneficial to a lot of people.
My idea for an invention is for a wheelchair that is able to be lowerraised and raislowered.
I don’t know why, but in English (maybe just the USA) we always say “raised and lowered” and not the other way around.
Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things within reachable distance.. The device will be equipped with three buttons on the right or left armrest depending on whether the person is lefright-handed or righleft-handed.
Not sure why, but right is always first.
The upper button, on the other hand, will raise the user up to three different levels selected by them.
“Different” here because it is otherwise confusing if you mean it goes up three levels or it can go to three separate heights.
Yours sSincerely,
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Very nice. Well written.
Feb. 21, 2023
Thank you for correcting my work and teaching me a lot by the way.
OFFICIAL EMAIL
Write an official e-mail to an investor asking for financial support for your new invention.
Describe the invention and explain how it can help people.
Dear sSir/ m or Madam,
I am writing to you because I am looking for an investor to financially back my newest invention.
I believe my invention will be very beneficial to a lot of people.
My idea for an invention is for a wheelchair that is able tocan be lowered and raised.
Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things in reachable distance. The device will be equipped with three buttons on the right or left armrest depending on whether the person is left-handed or right-handed.
Pressing the upper button will setdrive the vehicle for driving in the direction chosen by the passenger.
The middle button will safely lower it to the left or right side as needed.
The upper button, on the other hand, will raise the user up to three levels selected by them.
The device will be available with a remote control so that grandchildren or other family members can servehelp their loved one.
I suggest that a wheelchair with lifting and lowering function will help save disabled and elderly people plenty of time.
They will be able to reach things on high shelves and things that are normally out of reach.
Disabled people will be able to lock doors, open windows and check thermostats, which a lot of people in wheelchairs currently cannot do since they are in a sitting position.
I also think also lowering the chair would help a lot.
Alternatively, you could put the also after 'would'.
It would help greatly since when a disabled person drops something on the floor, they are not usually able to pick it back up.
I hope that I have piqued your interest.
Should you have any queries or doubts, please do not hesitate to enquire about my invention.
I look forward to your response.
Yours sincerefaithfully,
I was always taught that you use 'yours faithfully' if you don't know the person and started the email with 'Sir or Madam'. 'Yours sincerely' is used when you do know the person you are writing to.
XYZ
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Good job, your English is very good and you used some great vocabulary here :)
Feb. 21, 2023
Thank you so much for helping me with this email.
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I am writing to you because I am looking for an investor to financially back my newest invention. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I believe my invention will be very beneficial to a lot of people. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I believe |
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My idea for an invention is for a wheelchair that is able to be lowered and raised. My idea for an invention is My idea for an invention is for a wheelchair that is able to be I don’t know why, but in English (maybe just the USA) we always say “raised and lowered” and not the other way around. |
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Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things in reachable distance.The device will be equipped with three buttons on the right or left armrest depending on whether the person is left-handed or right-handed. Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things in reachable distance. The device will be equipped with three buttons on the right or left armrest depending on whether the person is left-handed or right-handed. Aging adults, the disabled and people who are unable to walk need things within reach Not sure why, but right is always first. |
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Pressing the upper button will set the vehicle for driving in the direction chosen by the passenger. Pressing the upper button will |
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The middle button will safely lower it to the left or right side as needed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The upper button, on the other hand, will raise the user up to three levels selected by them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The upper button, on the other hand, will raise the user up to three different levels selected by them. “Different” here because it is otherwise confusing if you mean it goes up three levels or it can go to three separate heights. |
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The device will be available with a remote control so that grandchildren or other family members can serve their loved one. The device will be available with a remote control so that grandchildren or other family members can |
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I suggest that a wheelchair with lifting and lowering function will help save disabled and elderly people plenty of time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They will be able to reach things on high shelves and things that are normally out of reach. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Disabled people will be able to lock doors, open windows and check thermostats which a lot of people in wheelchairs currently cannot do since they are in a sitting position. Disabled people will be able to lock doors, open windows and check thermostats, which a lot of people in wheelchairs currently cannot do since they are in a sitting position. |
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I think also lowering the chair would help a lot. I also think Alternatively, you could put the also after 'would'. |
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It would help greatly since when a disabled person drops something on the floor, they are not usually able to pick it back up. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I hope that I have piqued your interest. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Should you have any queries or doubts, please do not hesitate to enquire about my invention. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I look forward to your response. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Yours sincerely, Yours I was always taught that you use 'yours faithfully' if you don't know the person and started the email with 'Sir or Madam'. 'Yours sincerely' is used when you do know the person you are writing to. Yours |
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