The charge only lasted for a day. The charge only lasted for a day.

The charge only lasted for a day. The charge only lasted for a day.

I remember the exact day, it brokehappened on Decemeber 29th. I remember the exact day, it happened on Decemeber 29th.

I remember the exact day, --it broke on Decemeber 29th. I remember the exact day--it broke on Decemeber 29th.

It' was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather. It was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather.

It' was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather. It was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather.

It' was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather. It was a summer day that started out with cloudy weather.

What is the tense of your story? You should keep the same tense throughout.

I decided to put on a light black jacket to keep myself warm and headed out for my driving lesson. I decided to put on a light black jacket to keep myself warm and headed out for my driving lesson.

I decided to put on a light blackgrey jacket to keep myself warm and headed for my driving lesson. I decided to put on a grey jacket to keep myself warm and headed for my driving lesson.

No one ever says "light black". We only say "grey". (gray)

I also took an umbrella, just in case it started raining because recently I got caught in heavy rain. I also took an umbrella, just in case it started raining because recently I got caught in heavy rain.

Because recently I got caught by a heavy rain.- -

Because recently I got caught by ain heavy rain. Because recently I got caught in heavy rain.

BI did this because recently I got caught by a heavy rain. I did this because recently I got caught by a heavy rain.

Grammar rules say you can't talk a sentence with "because".

I would even say that it was a stormy rain. I would even say that it was a storm.

I would even say a stormy rain. I would even say a storm.

I would even say a stormy rain. I would even say a storm.

Luckily, only my clothes wasere fully drenched, and I emerged out of it fully in tact. Luckily, only my clothes were fully drenched, and I emerged out of it fully intact.

Luckily, only my clothes was fullyere drenched, and I emerged out of it fully in tact. Luckily, only my clothes were drenched, and I emerged fully intact.

Saying "emerged out of it" is redundant as they both mean the same thing. You can just say "emerged".

Luckily, only my clothes was fullyere drenched, and I emerged out of it fully in tact. Luckily, only my clothes were drenched, and I emerged out of it intact.

Drenched already means "fully". One cannot get more wet than "drenched" Similarly, intact means "whole"; can something become more "whole"?

By the time I reached the place where my driving lessons starttook place, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining heavily and. We we are back to a scorching hot day. By the time I reached the place where my driving lessons took place, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining heavily. We were back to a scorching hot day.

By the time I reached the place wherelocation for my driving lessons start, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining heavily and we awere back to a scorching hot day. By the time I reached the location for my driving lessons, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining and we were back to a scorching hot day.

By the time I reached the place where my driving lessons started, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining heavily andbrightly. We we are back to a scorching hot day.! By the time I reached the place where my driving lessons started, the clouds dissipated and the sun started shining brightly. We were back to a scorching hot day!

Sun shines brightly. The essence of sunlight is air so we would not describe it as heavy. Use ! to extress the extreme change in weather.

I'mve yet to master my driving. I've yet to master my driving.

I'mve yet to master my driving. I've yet to master my driving.

I'm am yet to master my driving. I'm am yet to master driving.

Having a yellingn instructor who yells doesn't help much. Having an instructor who yells doesn't help much.

Having a yelling instructor who yells doesn't help much. Having a instructor who yells doesn't help much.

When I finally returned home, I drank some coffee with some dark chocolate, drintaking some supplements alongt the waysame time. When I finally returned home, I drank some coffee with dark chocolate, taking some supplements at the same time.

Did you drink coffee mixed with dark chocolate? Did you have a mocha? Unless the supplements are liquid, we "take" pills.

I listened to a Harry Potter audiobook and then I sat down behindwith my laptop. I listened to a Harry Potter audiobook and then I sat down with my laptop.

I listened to a Harry Potter audiobook and then I sat down behindat my laptop. I listened to a Harry Potter audiobook and then I sat down at my laptop.

I was only half -surprised. I was only half-surprised.

Well, that phone had a history of meeting with an asphalt surface and surviving with only a little scratch. Well, that phone had a history of meeting with an asphalt surface and surviving with only a scratch.

there is an idiom "surving with only a scratch". It means little so we don't add the word little.

I'm a tall person, the phone fell about 5-6 years ago when a friend of mine decided to givscare me a fright andby jumpeding at me from behind. I'm a tall person, the phone fell about 5-6 years ago when a friend of mine decided to scare me by jumping at me from behind.

"give me a fight" sounds very Victorian, like a older English lady with grey hair who grabs at her pearls and fans herself because someone "gave her a fright". Are you 80 years old? And from the UK? If not, no one "gives you a fright". :). :D.

I happened to be speaking on the phone. I happened to be speaking on the phone.

I happened to be speaking on the phone. I happened to be speaking on the phone.

I happened to be speaking on the phone. I happened to be speaking on the phone.

I dropped it out of fright. I dropped it out of fright.

This is completely okay.

To my surprise, the phone continued working propererfectly! To my surprise, the phone continued working perfectly!

But last year, the battery on the phone became weaker and weakstarted draining faster. But last year, the battery on the phone started draining faster.

In December, we had some harsh winter days and ion those days, the battery died before about mid afternoon. In December, we had some harsh winter days and on those days, the battery died before about midafternoon.

In December we had some harsh winter days and in those days the battery died before about mid afternoon. In December we had some harsh winter days and in those days the battery died before mid afternoon.

On December 29th, I discharunpluged it before noon and I rechargedthen I plugged it back again, but then Iit died again and never went back to lifeturned back on. On December 29, I unpluged it before noon and then I plugged it back again, but then it died again and never turned back on.

On December 29th I dischargedunplugged it before noon and I recharged but then Iit died again and never went back to life. On December 29th I unplugged it before noon and I recharged but then it died again and never went back to life.

On December 29th Iit discharged before noon and I recharged but then Iit died again and never went back to lifewould never turn on again. On December 29th it died before noon and I recharged but then it died again and would never turn on again.

Other than being "discharged from the military", discharge generally used to refer to fluids leaving the body...

I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it' was impossible to be fixed due to some problem with athe motherboard. I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it was impossible to be fixed due to some problem with the motherboard.

I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it's impossible to fix due to some problem with athe motherboard. I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it's impossible to fix due to some problem with the motherboard.

I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it' was impossible to fix due to some problem with a motherboard. I then took it to a repair shop where I learned that it was impossible to fix due to some problem with a motherboard.

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So, I thought I would sell it for parts. So, I thought I would sell it for parts.

At one place I was given a price ofoffered 150 rubles. At one place I was offered 150 rubles.

At one place I was given a price of 150 rubles., which is very little. At one place I was given a price of 150 rubles, which is very little.

More idiomatic would be "which is nothing"

Which is very little. (see comment) Which is very little. (see comment)

Incomplete sentence.

After a couple of months I happened to stumble upon another repair shop, so I asked how much they would give me for the broken phone. After a couple of months I happened to stumble upon another repair shop, so I asked how much they would give me for the broken phone.

They gave a double price of 300 rublesoffered me 300 rubles: double the amount from the previous offer. They offered me 300 rubles: double the amount from the previous offer.

They gave asaid double the price of --300 rubles. They said double the price--300 rubles.

I brought the phone and tThe guy, lookinged at the phone, and suggested that he would try to repair the phone and. I agreed. The guy looked at the phone and suggested that he would try to repair the phone. I agreed.

He thought that the problem was with athe display. He thought that the problem was the display.

He thought that the problem was with athe display. He thought that the problem was with the display.

He thought that the problem was with athe display. He thought that the problem was with the display.

We then ordered a brand-new display from China and it took 2 months to delarriver. We then ordered a brand-new display from China and it took 2 months to arrive.

We then ordered a brand-new display from China and it took 2 months to delarriver. We then ordered a brand-new display from China and it took 2 months to arrive.

However, after hime tryingied to repair the phone, he came to the same conclusion - the motherboard is deadbroken and couldn't be revivstored. However, after he tried to repair the phone, he came to the same conclusion - the motherboard is broken and couldn't be restored.

However, after him trying to repair the phone, he came to the same conclusion - --the motherboard iwas dead and couldn't be revived. However, after trying to repair the phone, he came to the same conclusion--the motherboard was dead and couldn't be revived.

So now the phone is sitting aton my desk and I'm thinking of going to a shop and selling it for 150 rubles. So now the phone is sitting on my desk and I'm thinking of going to a shop and selling it for 150 rubles.

So now the phone is sitting at my desk and I'm thinking of going to aback to the shop and selling for 150 rubles. So now the phone is sitting at my desk and I'm thinking of going back to the shop and selling for 150 rubles.

So now the phone is sitting aton my desk and I'm thinking of going to athe shop and selling for 150 rubles. So now the phone is sitting on my desk and I'm thinking of going to the shop and selling for 150 rubles.

But sShould I betterinstead throw it in the garbage? Should I instead throw it in the garbage?

But shwould Iit be better to throw it in the garbage? But would it be better to throw it in the garbage?

But should I better throwIt's better than throwing it in the garbage?, right? It's better than throwing it in the garbage, right?

Or: Would it be better that I throw it into the garbage? "But should I better throw it in the garbage" feels like the direct translation of an idiom in your language that does not translate to English. It has the structure of like Yiddish phrases, but doesn't translate to English.