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Nowadays, the working market is extremely competitive and is especially interested in scientistfic and technical areas of knowledge. Nowadays, the working market is extremely competitive and is especially interested in scientific and technical areas of knowledge.

That is the main reason why music is not a mandatory subject in most of schools. That is the main reason why music is not a mandatory subject in most schools.

As an class related to the arts, music is not as promoted as other subjects due to the fact that is considered both impractical for children's future and, an form of entertainment rather than a job for adults. As a class related to the arts, music is not as promoted as other subjects due to the fact that is considered both impractical for children's future and a form of entertainment rather than a job for adults.

Nice! I've just reworded some of this for clarity :)

These misconceptions ofabout music classes isare nowhere near to be correct. These misconceptions about music classes are nowhere near correct.

For example, Albert Einstein played violin, and he often said that music had helped him improve his creativity, whatich was really useful for him in physics. For example, Albert Einstein played violin, and he often said that music helped him improve his creativity, which was really useful for him in physics.

In other words, music favourpromotes the development of a better working brain in general terms. In other words, music promotes the development of a better working brain in general.

The word "favours" doesn't quite work here, as it implies that music itself prefers brains which are developing well -- "promotes" is a better fit :) Another option (which could be more accurate to what you are saying) is "In general terms, music promotes the development of a better working brain."

Music has been part of us since our origins, so why do people not demand it asfor it to be a compulsory subject in all schools? Music has been part of us since our origins, so why do people not demand for it to be a compulsory subject in all schools?

My opinion on this topic is very clear,: students shwould benefit from learning music as much as they have to do withdo from maths, biology or chemistry. My opinion on this topic is very clear: students would benefit from learning music as much as they do from maths, biology or chemistry.

In addition to the above, playing musical instruments is a really amuseding way of interacting and communicating with other people. In addition to the above, playing musical instruments is a really amusing way of interacting and communicating with other people.

Another reason to support music classes comes from theis the low standard of music that teens and youth usually listen to. Another reason to support music classes is the low standard of music that teens and youth usually listen to.

Just reworded this to link it more to your point :)

It is very repetitive and lacks of creativity (using always the sames tunes and samples). It is very repetitive and lacks creativity (using always the sames tunes and samples).

I used 'it' to highlight that I do not refer to any especific musical genre, though most people only think inof Reggaeton at this point, wrongly. I used 'it' to highlight that I do not refer to any specific musical genre, though most people only think of Reggaeton at this point, wrongly.

To conclude, schoools should not be influenced by political or economical ideologies, in order not and should thus stop giveing more importance to technical subjects and takebring back music to the classes. To conclude, schoools should not be influenced by political or economical ideologies, and should thus stop giving more importance to technical subjects and bring back music classes.