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Erny

April 22, 2022

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Asking the boss for a raise

Dear Mr boss,

I am glad to report that the sales increased by 15 %. The reason lies within our team and our work ethics. Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company.

As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me.

First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me.

Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers.

I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers.

Sincerely

Erny [last name]

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Erny

April 22, 2022

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It is tTherefore inevitable, having somebody like me is a must.

Sorry, personal bias here but due to a certain very popular movie franchise, the word "inevitable" has a lot of extra baggage now. You're free to use the word if you want.

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April 22, 2022

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Dear Mr boss,

I am glad to report that the sales increased by 15 %.

The reason lies within our team and our work ethics.

As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me.

Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers.

I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers.

Asking the boss for a raise


Dear Mr boss,


Dear Mr. boss, Dear Mr. boss,

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Dear Mr b. Boss, Dear Mr. Boss,

I am glad to report that the sales increased by 15 %.


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I am glad to report that the sales have increased by 15 %. I am glad to report that sales have increased by 15%.

The reason lies within our team and our work ethics.


The reason lies within our team and our work ethics. The reason lies within our team and our work ethic.

Work ethic and work ethics mean slightly different things. Work ethic means someone's obligation to work, while work ethics would more mean the ethics of work.

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The reason lies within our team and our work ethics. The reason lies within our team and work ethics.

Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company.


Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company. Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company.

professionalism

Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyondwith their professional knowledge and work ethics so we can improve ourselves and therefore enrich the company. Everybody contributes with their professional knowledge and work ethics so we can improve ourselves and enrich the company.

Not really sure what you mean by "professionalism".

As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me.


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As a resultTherefore, there are strong indicatorreasons for raising the salary for othof all the members in my team and for me. Therefore, there are strong reasons for raising the salary of all the members in my team.

First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this .


First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this .

First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this .

my job role sounds better and more natural

First of all, my profession is quite specialized and neededa necessity because I can guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company, whereas nobody has aelse has had the special training for this to do so. First, my profession is quite specialized and a necessity because I can guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company, whereas nobody else has had the special training to do so.

It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me.


It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me. It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me.

crucial is a better word to use instead of inevitable.

It is tTherefore inevitable, having somebody like me is a must. Therefore, having somebody like me is a must.

Sorry, personal bias here but due to a certain very popular movie franchise, the word "inevitable" has a lot of extra baggage now. You're free to use the word if you want.

Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers.


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Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offersfor those with my expertise, other companies have approached me with job offers. I have yet to answer those. Because of the high demand for those with my expertise, other companies have approached me with job offers. I have yet to answer those.

I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers.


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I am looking forward to disscussing uponand coming to a mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth foron an increased salary befitting my contributions to theis company in a more appropriate manner, so I can decline these companies` other offers. I am looking forward to discussing and coming to a mutual agreement on an increased salary befitting my contributions to this company, so I can decline the other offers.

Personally, I don't think you should keep the last part about declining offers.

Sincerely


Sincerely, Sincerely,

Erny [last name]


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