Oct. 31, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while this figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame. In addition, for most of the period, renting a house was more popular than owning one, whereas home buyers overtook renting over the final 30 years.
In 1918, the percentage of renters in England and Wales started at nearly 80%, after which it remained stable at approximately 70% between 1939 and 1953, before dropping progressively to around 60% in 2011. By contrast, the figure for households owning houses experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each.
From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight decrease to roughly 63% in 2011. Conversely, the opposite changes can be seen in the figure for dwellers who rented accommodation in England and Wales, which witnessed a slight decline to just over 30% in 2001 before recovering to 36% in the next ten years.
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IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while thise figure for renters decreased progressively decreased during this specific time frame.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while the figure for renters progressively decreased during this specific time frame.
In addition, for most of the period, renting a house was more popular than owning one, whereas home buyers overtook renting over the final 30 years.
In 1918, the percentage of renters in England and Wales started at nearly 80%, after which it remained stable at approximately 70% between 1939 and 1953, before dropping progressively to around 60% in 2011.
By contrast, the figure for households owning houses experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each.
From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight decrease to roughly 63% in 2011.
Conversely, the opposite changes can be seen in the figure for dwellers who rented accommodation in England and Wales, which witnessed a slight decline to just over 30% in 2001 before recovering to 36% in the next ten years.
IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while thise figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while the figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame.
In addition, for mostthe majority of the period, renting a house was more popular than owning one, whereas home buyershowever, home owning overtook renting overin the final 30 years.
In addition, for the majority of the period, renting a house was more popular than owning one, however, home owning overtook renting in the final 30 years.
In 1918, the percentage of renters in England and Wales started at nearly 80%, after which it remained stable at approximately 70% between 1939 and 1953, before dropping progressively to around 60% in 2011.
By contrast, the figure for households owning houseowners experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each.
By contrast, the figure for owners experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each.
You wrote 'renters' so it is helpful to keep that parallel by using 'owners' OR 'renting' & 'owning'
From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak at/of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight drop/decrease to roughly 63% in 2011. From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak at/of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight drop/decrease to roughly 63% in 2011.
Conversely, the opposite changes can be seen in the figure for dwellers who rented accommodation in England and Wales, which witnessed a slight decline to just abover 30% in 2001 before recovering to 36% in the next ten years.
Conversely, the opposite changes can be seen in the figure for dwellers who rented accommodation in England and Wales, which witnessed a slight decline to just above 30% in 2001 before recovering to 36% in the next ten years.
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Well done! Good luck with IELTS
Oct. 31, 2023
Thank you so much for your detailed review.
IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while thise figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame.
Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while the figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame.
In addition, for most of the period, renting a house was more popular than owning one, whereas home buyers overtook renting over the final 30 years.
In 1918, the percentage of renters in England and Wales started at nearly 80%, after which it remained stable at approximately 70% between 1939 and 1953, before dropping progressively to around 60% in 2011.
By contrast, the figure for households owning houses experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each.
From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight decrease to roughly 63% in 2011.
Conversely, the opposite changes can be seen in the figure for dwellers who rented accommodation in England and Wales, which witnessed a slight decline to just over 30% in 2001 before recovering to 36% in the next ten years.
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individually, the sentences are grammatically correct, but you can try to make them connect with each other a little big better by grouping similar ideas together (owning vs renting) instead of simply reporting statistics after statistics.
Oct. 31, 2023
connect a little bit better*
I would separate the ideas into renting then talk about owning, because here you jump from renting to owning back to renting, which makes the piece sound repetitive.
Oct. 31, 2023
Thank you very much. i will try to rewrite this essay.
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Overall, the percentage of those who owned accommodation saw an upward trend, while this figure for renters decreased progressively during this time frame.
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By contrast, the figure for households owning houses experienced a rising trend, reaching a parity of popularity with that of renters, at exactly 50% each. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight decrease to roughly 63% in 2011. This sentence has been marked as perfect! From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak at/of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight drop/decrease to roughly 63% in 2011. From 1981 onwards, the share of ownership continued to grow marginally, reaching a peak at/of about 70% in 2001 before seeing a slight drop/decrease to roughly 63% in 2011. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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