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Last night, when I was talking with a stationer owner, a woman suddenly put her hand on my shoulder and asked me why I had my hair cut so short. I looked at her and was a little confused because I didn't recognize her. But I didn't show my confuse and tell her that because it was convenient to wash. Then I looked at her up and down. She was in dark blue uniform of a gas station and she looked like older than me because the wrinkles around her eyes were so deep, and her daughter looked like ten years old. I searched her information thoughtout my brain but found nothing. I even doubted that whether I really knew her. I thought again and found out that she was my middle schoolmate due to her uniform and her daughter.
When I was in college, my friend Turn told me that her friend Bing was going to get married. I know Bing because we were distant relative. Furthermore, our age were very close but she was a grade behind me, thus we talked seldom. All her information I knew was from Turn, including her wedding.
Turn complained to me that Bing asked her to the wedding, but she had to go to school and had no time to go back hometown to attend the wedding. There was a custom that when you were invited to a wedding, you need to send a cash gift to your inviter regardless of you were present or not. Turn said that Bing just want to get the money without considering her situation.
I was having a good time in university and I was shocked why girl like Bing who had gone to high school would get married so early. We should have enjoyed our lives of the early 20s. I knew Bing didn't go to a good college because of her poor scores, but I thought she should not give up studyingwhich was good for her future. The age when she got married was about 21, which was very young. The man she married was low-educated, who was the son of a gas station owners. I couldn't understand at that time why she made such a bad decision.
At present, I know that work hard and be independent in this society is very hard for women, and they are taught to live a traditional life: to get married early so that you can choose a good (mostly not poor and younger) man, and marriage is their new birth that can change their lives. So they made their choices.
A choice I will never make.

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I looked at her and was a little confused because I didn't recognize her.

So they made their choices.

A choice I will never make.

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Last night, when I was talking with a stationer owner, a woman suddenly put her hand on my shoulder and asked me why I had my hair cut so short.


Last night, whenas I was talking with a stationery store owner, a woman suddenly put her hand on my shoulder and asked me why I had my hair cut so short. Last night, as I was talking with a stationery store owner, a woman suddenly put her hand on my shoulder and asked me why I had my hair cut so short.

I looked at her and was a little confused because I didn't recognize her.


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But I didn't show my confuse and tell her that because it was convenient to wash. Then I looked at her up and down.


But I didn't show my confuseion and tell her thatit was because it washort hair is convenient to wash. Then I looked at her up and down. But I didn't show my confusion and tell her it was because short hair is convenient to wash. Then I looked her up and down.

She was in dark blue uniform of a gas station and she looked like older than me because the wrinkles around her eyes were so deep, and her daughter looked like ten years old.


She was inwearing a dark blue uniform of a, gas station and suniform. She looked like older than me because the wrinkles around her eyes were so deep, and h. Her daughter looked likeabout ten years old. She was wearing a dark blue, gas station uniform. She looked older than me because the wrinkles around her eyes were so deep. Her daughter looked about ten years old.

Run-on sentence. Easier to read when broken down.

I searched her information thoughtout my brain but found nothing.


I searched her information thoughtoutracked my brain but found nothing. I racked my brain but found nothing.

I even doubted that whether I really knew her.


I even doubted that whether I really knew her. I even doubted whether I really knew her.

I thought again and found out that she was my middle schoolmate due to her uniform and her daughter.


When I thought again and found out that she wasbout it again, I realized she was one of my middle schoolmates due to her uniform and her daughter. When I thought about it again, I realized she was one of my middle schoolmates due to her uniform and her daughter.

When I was in college, my friend Turn told me that her friend Bing was going to get married.


When I was in college, my friend Turn told me that her friend Bing was going to getetting married. When I was in college, my friend Turn told me that her friend Bing was getting married.

I know Bing because we were distant relative.


I know Bing because we weare distant relatives. I know Bing because we are distant relatives.

Furthermore, our age were very close but she was a grade behind me, thus we talked seldom.


Furthermore,While our ages were very close but, she was a grade behind me, thus we talked seldom talk. While our ages were very close, she was a grade behind me, thus we seldom talk.

All her information I knew was from Turn, including her wedding.


All ther information I kneow was from Turnabout her, including her wedding, came from Turn. All the information I know about her, including her wedding, came from Turn.

Turn complained to me that Bing asked her to the wedding, but she had to go to school and had no time to go back hometown to attend the wedding.


Turn has once complained to me that Bing askinvited her to the wedding, but she had to go to. However, she had school and had no time to go back to their hometown to attend the wedding. Turn has once complained to me that Bing invited her to the wedding. However, she had school and had no time to go back to their hometown to attend the wedding.

There was a custom that when you were invited to a wedding, you need to send a cash gift to your inviter regardless of you were present or not.


There wais a custom that: when you weare invited to a wedding, you need to send a cash gift to your inviter regardless of whether you weare present or not. There is a custom: when you are invited to a wedding, you need to send a cash gift to your inviter regardless of whether you are present or not.

This is still an ongoing custom, so it needs to be present tense.

Turn said that Bing just want to get the money without considering her situation.


Turn said that Bing just wanted to get the money without considering her situation. Turn said that Bing just wanted to get money without considering her situation.

I was having a good time in university and I was shocked why girl like Bing who had gone to high school would get married so early.


I was having a good time in university and I was shocked whby girls like Bing, who had gone to high school wouldbut still geot married so early. I was having a good time in university and was shocked by girls like Bing, who had gone to high school but still got married so early.

We should have enjoyed our lives of the early 20s.


We should havbe enjoyeding our lives of the early 20s instead. We should be enjoying our early 20s instead.

I knew Bing didn't go to a good college because of her poor scores, but I thought she should not give up studyingwhich was good for her future.


I knew Bing didn't go to a good college because of her poor scores, butgrades. However, I thought she should not give up studying, which was good for her future. I knew Bing didn't go to a good college because of her poor grades. However, I thought she should not give up studying, which was good for her future.

The age when she got married was about 21, which was very young.


TShe age when she got married when she was about 21, which wais very young. She got married when she was about 21, which is very young.

Active vs Passive voice: I think active works better here.

The man she married was low-educated, who was the son of a gas station owners.


The man she married was low-educated, who wais not very educated. He is the son of a gas station owners. The man she married is not very educated. He is the son of gas station owners.

I couldn't understand at that time why she made such a bad decision.


At that time, I couldn't understand at that time why she made such a bad decision. At that time, I couldn't understand why she made such a bad decision.

At present, I know that work hard and be independent in this society is very hard for women, and they are taught to live a traditional life: to get married early so that you can choose a good (mostly not poor and younger) man, and marriage is their new birth that can change their lives.


At presentNow, I know that working hard and being independent in this society is very hard for women, and t. They are taught to live a traditional lifeves: to get married early so that you can choose a good (mostly not poor and younger) man, and m. Marriage is theira new bistarth that can change their lives. Now, I know that working hard and being independent in this society is very hard for women. They are taught to live traditional lives: to get married early so that you can choose a good (mostly not poor and younger) man. Marriage is a new start that can change their lives.

So they made their choices.


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A choice I will never make.


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