May 4, 2020
Newspaper holiday
I have nothing to do in the morning on a day without a morning paper. On such a day, the busy morning seems longer than the other days. However, it is the only day that I can enjoy a cup of coffee and a leisurely walk to the station. Though there’s no morning paper, I like the way I spend the day.
朝刊が休みの日は手持無沙汰だ。いつものあわただしい朝の時間が特に長く感じられる。しかし、朝のコーヒーを楽しみ、駅までゆったりと歩けるのはこの日だけだ。休刊日もまんざらすてたもんではない。
I have nothing to do in the morning on a days without a morning paper.
Like Brambsie suggested. This flows much better.
On such a day, the usually busy morning seems longer than theon other days.
I agree with Wethepeople about adding a "usually" here, but I think you should keep the "the", not change it to an "a". The phrase is referring to a time of day: "the morning" as opposed to "the afternoon" or "the evening", That means it's determinate and should be "the", not "a".
Also, if you want to be grammatically perfect, I'm pretty sure you do need an "on" for "than on others". You could also say "than on other days". However, that's pretty wordy. Personally, I'd throw it all out and replace it with an "otherwise".
"On such a day, the usually busy morning seems longer than otherwise."
However, it is also the only day that I can enjoy a cup of coffee and a leisurely walk to the station.
Adding an "also" here sort of adds the idea that you're conceding a point with this contrast. In the sentence before, you talked about how mornings without a morning paper are long like that's a bad thing. Now you're saying "but they're not actually that bad - there are good things about them, too". Adding the little "also" conveys that whole switch in tone. Plus it sounds very natural.
Though there’s no morning paper, I likestill enjoy the way I spend the day.
Enjoy is much better than like here. Saying you "like the way you spend the day" is more... defensive, or like offering an explanation. I would say that if someone suggested "You should really meditate instead of going for a walk in the morning". Then I would reply, "No thank you, I like the way I spend my day".
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This was really good, almost indistinguishable from a native English speaker's writing. If I weren't purposefully looking for things to correct, I wouldn't have noticed any mistakes.
May 6, 2020
Thank you!!!
I have nothing to do in the morning on a day withouhere I don't get a morning paper.
Made it sound like more of a narrative - it sounds better when you explain exactly how the newspaper is involved (in this case, it is delivered to you every day).
On such a day, thea usually busy morning seems longer than the other days.
Added "usually" because that's what it is - usual for a morning to be busy when you get the morning paper. I removed "the" because it sounds smoother.
However, it is the only day that I can enjoy a cup of coffee and a leisurely walk to the station.
Though there’s no morning paper, I like the way I spend the dayI can enjoy the day even when I don't receive my morning paper.
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Pretty good! Just some small flow problems, but I would definitely understand the message of the original draft.
May 6, 2020
Thank you!!!
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I have nothing to do in the morning on a day without a morning paper. I have nothing to do in the morning on a day w Made it sound like more of a narrative - it sounds better when you explain exactly how the newspaper is involved (in this case, it is delivered to you every day). I have nothing to do in the morning on Like Brambsie suggested. This flows much better. |
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On such a day, the busy morning seems longer than the other days. On such a day, Added "usually" because that's what it is - usual for a morning to be busy when you get the morning paper. I removed "the" because it sounds smoother. On such a day, the usually busy morning seems longer than I agree with Wethepeople about adding a "usually" here, but I think you should keep the "the", not change it to an "a". The phrase is referring to a time of day: "the morning" as opposed to "the afternoon" or "the evening", That means it's determinate and should be "the", not "a". Also, if you want to be grammatically perfect, I'm pretty sure you do need an "on" for "than on others". You could also say "than on other days". However, that's pretty wordy. Personally, I'd throw it all out and replace it with an "otherwise". "On such a day, the usually busy morning seems longer than otherwise." |
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However, it is the only day that I can enjoy a cup of coffee and a leisurely walk to the station. This sentence has been marked as perfect! However, it is also the only day that I can enjoy a cup of coffee and a leisurely walk to the station. Adding an "also" here sort of adds the idea that you're conceding a point with this contrast. In the sentence before, you talked about how mornings without a morning paper are long like that's a bad thing. Now you're saying "but they're not actually that bad - there are good things about them, too". Adding the little "also" conveys that whole switch in tone. Plus it sounds very natural. |
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Though there’s no morning paper, I like the way I spend the day.
Though there’s no morning paper, I Enjoy is much better than like here. Saying you "like the way you spend the day" is more... defensive, or like offering an explanation. I would say that if someone suggested "You should really meditate instead of going for a walk in the morning". Then I would reply, "No thank you, I like the way I spend my day". |
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