Jan. 1, 2020
New Year, New Hope
Happy New Year, everyone!
I struggled with many difficult things in the last year.
It was like I suddenly got a wild horse that wouldn’t listen to what I said.
I wanted to give up on keeping it but that would never be possible since the horse couldn’t survive by itself.
So I had to raise it even though the horse kicked me and I got hurt.
One day I realized the horse was opening its heart to me and sometimes wants to be stroked.
Sometimes it allows me to ride on its back...
This is just my fictional story, but now I’m feeling like I am with that horse.
This year I will challenge myself with that horse.
I believe there’s always hope, and we are walking together towards a place filled with happiness.
My image of 2020 is like that :)
I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy!
(Corrected on Jan. 9th)
みなさん、あけましておめでとうございます。
昨年は、たくさんの困難を抱えていました。
それはまるで、言うことを聞かない野生の馬を突然与えられたようでした。
私は飼うのを諦めたかったのですが、馬は一頭では生きていけないので、諦めることは許されませんでした。
そのため、その馬が私を蹴り傷を負っても、育てなければなりませんでした。
ある日私は、その馬が心を開きつつあること、そして時々なでられたがっていることに気付きました。
時々、背中に乗せてくれることも、、、
これは私の作り話なのですが、今も私はその馬と一緒にいるような気がします。
今年、私はその馬と共に挑戦します。
いつも望みはあると信じています。そして、私たちは幸せあふれる場所へと向かって歩いています。
私の2020年のイメージはそんな感じです :)
この一年がみなさんに、たくさんの幸せと喜びをもたらしますように！
This year I will challenge myself with thate horse by my side.
I’m not sure what you’re trying to say here. Are you saying that you made peace with the horse, and this year, you and the horse will challenge whatever obstacles that appear?
My 2020’s image is like thatThat’s my image for 2020 :)I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy!
I wish you a lot of happiness and joy too!
Jan. 2, 2020
Thank you for your collection!
There are so many metaphors that made you complicated, I guess.😅
I was trying to say that the horse (=kind of a piece of me) and I will challenge what I couldn’t last year. Or something new that needs my time and efforts. Or something else that will appear what I can’t imagine.
I didn’t write what it is clearly on purpose.
Happy New Year 2020, everyone!
I agree that saying either "New year" or "2020" is more natural.
There were a lot of tough things for me to handle last year.
It was like I suddenly got a wild horse that wouldn’t followlisten to what I said.
I wanted to give up on having it but it never be allowed since that horse couldn’tthe horse up, but I couldn't since it wouldn't have been able to survive by itself.
So I had to raise it even though the horse kicked me and I got hurt.
One day I realized the horse iwas opening his/herits heart and sometimes wantsed to be stroked.
Sometimes it allowslet me to ride on his/herit back.
This is just my fictional story, but now I’m feeling like I am with that horse.
I believe there’s always a hope, and (that) we are walking together toward thea place filled with happiness.
My 2020’s imageimage for 2020 is like that :) I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy!
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Best wishes for the new year!
New Year, New Hope
Happy New Year 2020, everyone!
There were a lot of tough things to handle last year.
It was like I suddenly got a wild horse that wouldn’t followlisten to what I said.
You can say 'listen to what I said' or 'follow my orders/instructions'.
I wanted to give up on havkeeping it, but ithat would never be allowedpossible since thate horse couldn’t survive by itself.
'allowed' is grammatically okay, but not so natural. Even better would be 'but I couldn't' instead of 'it would never be allowed'
So I had to raise it, even though the horse kicked me and I got hurt.
One day I realized the horse iwas opening his/her heartits heart to me and sometimes wants to be stroked.
It's unusual to say 'his/her'. You can use 'its' because it is an animal.
Sometimes it allows me to ride on his/herits back.
You could also say 'it lets me ride'. Because you call the horse 'it', you must use 'its' later.
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This is just my fictional story, but now I’m feeling like I am with that horse.
This year I will challenge myself with that horse.
I believe there’s always a hope, and we are walking together toward thes a place filled with happiness.
Hope as a noun is usually not singular. And I changed 'the' to 'a' because I hope there's many places filled with happiness, not just one :)
My 2020’s imageimage of 2020 is like that :) I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy!
If you say 'My 2020's image', it sounds like 2020 is 'my 2020', so you need to move the year away from 'my'.
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I haven't made too many changes to this because I don't want to move too far away from what you wrote.
I like how you described 2019 as a horse. It's a creative metaphor, but it also makes sense. It seems like you've overcome a lot this year, based on your description here and your past journal entries. I hope you have a good 2020 ahead!
Jan. 2, 2020
Thank you so much, Gelatin!
I’m really glad that you respect my original sentences, and imagine what I want to say, and you understand it.
I’m so so relieved my sentences made sense to you!
I’m not sure if I’ve overcome several things or not, but I just know I’m keeping on walking toward.
Thanks again for your kind words.
I hope you have a lot of happiness and joy this year!💐
New Year, New Hope
Happy New Year 2020, everyone!
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Handle is not wrong, but 'manage' or 'deal with' sounds more natural.
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Sometimes it allows me to ride on his/herits back.
You need to pick one of it / he / her, and stick with it. If you don't know the sex of the horse, you can use it.
This is just mya fictional story, but now I’m feeling like I am with? that horse.
It's not clear what you mean here. Do you feel like you are the horse? Or that you are the owner of the horse? Or that you are entering the new year in the company of the horse?
This year I will challenge myself with? that horse.
This sentence needs more detail. You will challenge yourself to do what with the horse? Make friends? Control it? Work together?
I believe there’s always a hope, and we are walking together toward the place filled with happiness.
My 2020’s imageimage for 2020 is like that :)I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy!
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Good effort! I hope you and your horse have many happy adventures together in this new year.
Jan. 2, 2020
Thank you for your correction!
Sorry I didn’t write what I will challenge on purpose because I’m in a complicated situation.
I feel that horse is like a piece of myself.
And thanks for your kind word too!
Yes, I hope we enjoy the adventures in this year! :)
New Year, New Hope
Happy 2020, everyone!¶
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Happy New Year 2020, everyone!
What you wrote is fine, but these feel more natural to me.
There were a lot of tough things for me to handle last year.¶
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Last year, there were many tough things for me to handle.¶
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I had a lot of tough things to deal with last year. ¶
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Last year, I faced many difficulties.¶
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I struggled with many difficult things (OR issues) in the last year.
"Struggle with" and "face" are more active verbs that you could use here, if you wanted to. "Face" has a nuance of confrontation, you can "face your fears". It is like you either have to or are choosing to look these things in the eye. "Struggle" implies difficulty. You can struggle to carry something heavy or a difficult fight can be called a "struggle".
It was like I suddenly got (OR had) a wild horse that wouldn’t followrefused to obey me (OR listen to what I said OR follow my orders OR do what I said).
I wanted to give up on having itit up but it could never be allowed since thate horse couldn’t survive by itself.¶
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I wanted to give up but I couldn't because the horse couldn't survive on its own. ¶
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I wanted to give up but the horse couldn't survive without me.
"Give it up" means to give up on having something. If you don't want a baby, you can "give it up for adoption". You can also just say "give up", as in giving up on the situation or the problem.
So I had to raise it even though the horse kicked me and I got hurt me.
One day, I realized that the horse iwas opening his/her heart and sometimesits heart to me and sometimes wanted to be stroked. ¶
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One day, I realized that the horse was opening its heart to me and wanted to be stroked occasionally.¶
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One day, I realized that the horse was opening its heart to me. Sometimes, now, it wants to be stroked.
You can use either 'it' or the singular 'they' to refer to the horse, so long as you always use the one you pick. You used 'it' earlier, so I will be using 'it'. :)
Sometimes it allows me to ride on his/herits back.
This is just my fictional story, but now I’ma story I made up (OR wrote OR created), but now I feel like I am with that horse.¶
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Though it is my own fictional creation, I now feel like I am with that horse. ¶
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This is only a fictional story, but I feel like I am with that horse now. ¶
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It's just a story, but now I feeling like I am with that horse.
I believe that there’s always a hope, and that we are all walking together toward the place filled withs a place filled with happiness.¶
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I believe that there is always hope and that, together, we are walking towards a joyful place.¶
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I believe there is always hope and that together we are making the journey towards a place filled with happiness.¶
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I believe that there is always hope and that we all walk together on the path to happiness.¶
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I believe there is always hope and we are all walking together on a path to happiness.
Your original sentence is fine, but these are some options that might be more natural. I do not think I quite got the feeling of it, but these feel closer to me.
My 2020’s image is like that :)That is the feeling I have about 2020. ¶
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That is what I am imagining for 2020. ¶
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That's the energy I am bringing to 2020. (this is more colloquial)¶
I hope this year brings all of you a lot of (OR lots of) happiness and joy!
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What an absolutely wonderful sentiment! ”いつも望みはあると信じています。そして、私たちは幸せあふれる場所へと向かって歩いています。” is so lovely that it almost brought tears to my eyes. 感動しました。
Great job! This post feels very poetic. I hope that this year is kinder and brings you endless joy, luck, and love. I am rooting for you! 応援しています！あけましておめでとうございます。Happy New Year! :)
Jan. 2, 2020
Thank you so much for your correction and your warm messages... I’m really moved too.
Also it is so helpful that you showed various example sentences with explanation in details. It’s really kind of you!
I’m so appreciate it.🙏🏻✨
ありがとうございます。
Apricottaさんにもたくさんの喜びと幸せが待っていますように💕
Jan. 2, 2020
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I struggled with many difficult things in the last year. |
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It was like I suddenly got a wild horse that wouldn’t listen to what I said. |
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I wanted to give up on keeping it but that would never be possible since the horse couldn’t survive by itself. |
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One day I realized the horse was opening its heart to me and sometimes wants to be stroked. |
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Sometimes it allows me to ride on its back. |
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I believe there’s always hope, and we are walking together towards a place filled with happiness. |
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My image of 2020 is like that :)I hope this year brings all of you a lot of happiness and joy! |
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