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An Analysis of College Enrollment Expansion

The table illustrates the number of college enrollment each year from 1997 to 2005, while the line graph compares the number of three categories of university enrollment in the course of those years.
The table outlines that the enrollment of college enrollment changes every year. The most enrollment of the first-category universities in the course of those years is 700 000. And the most enrollment of the second-category universities in the course of those years is 1, 670, 000.
In 2003, the third-category universities started enrolling students.
The line graph shows that three categories universities enrollment varied during those years. The first-category universities had a slight growth from 1997 to 2000. Starting from 2001 the number had increased slowly. The number of second-category universities increased at a quicker rate from 1997 to 2005. In 2005, the third-category universities enrolled students and increased at a uniform fast rate.
Generally, in order to continue reforming reasonably, we should make unremitting efforts.

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An Analysis of College Enrollment Expansion


The table illustrates the number of college enrollment each year from 1997 to 2005, while the line graph compares the number of three categories of university enrollment in the course of those years.


The table illustrates the number of college enrollments each year from 1997 to 2005, while t. The line graph compares the number of three categories of university enrollment in the course of those years. The table illustrates the number of college enrollments each year from 1997 to 2005. The line graph compares the number of three categories of university enrollment in the course of those years.

The table outlines that the enrollment of college enrollment changes every year.


The table outlinillustrates that the enrollmentnumber of college enrollments changes every year. The table illustrates that the number of college enrollments changes every year.

The most enrollment of the first-category universities in the course of those years is 700 000.


The mosthighest number of enrollment of thes in first-category universities in the course of those years is 700 ,000. The highest number of enrollments in first-category universities in those years is 700,000.

And the most enrollment of the second-category universities in the course of those years is 1, 670, 000.


And the mostFollowing, the highest annual enrollment ofvolume in the second-category universities in the course of those years is 1, 670, 000. Following, the highest annual enrollment volume in the second-category universities is 1,670,000.

Not sure if "in the course" of refers to during the year or the university courses. Depending on the answer, I would rewrite the sentence (and the previous one) to avoid confusion :)

In 2003, the third-category universities started enrolling students.


The line graph shows that three categories universities enrollment varied during those years.


The line graph shows that three ird-categoriesy universitiesy enrollment varied during those years. The line graph shows that third-category university enrollment varied during those years.

The first-category universities had a slight growth from 1997 to 2000.


The first-category universities hadsaw a slight growth from 1997 to 2000. The first-category universities saw a slight growth from 1997 to 2000.

Starting from 2001 the number had increased slowly.


Starting fFrom 2001 the number had increased slowly.annual growth remained stagnant. From 2001 the annual growth remained stagnant.

You've got a few options here in describing charts — to be specific in the description we'd need to be able to see the data to describe it.

The number of second-category universities increased at a quicker rate from 1997 to 2005.


The numberenrollment-rate of second-category universities increased at a quicker rate from 1997 to 2005. The enrollment-rate of second-category universities increased at a quicker rate from 1997 to 2005.

A quicker rate than what? If you are comparing, add the other subject into this sentence.

In 2005, the third-category universities enrolled students and increased at a uniform fast rate.


In 2005, the third-category universities enrolled students and increased at a uniform fast rate, with numbers increasing steadily. In 2005, the third-category universities enrolled students, with numbers increasing steadily.

Again, to be specific you need to tell us exactly what the chart is doing.

Generally, in order to continue reforming reasonably, we should make unremitting efforts.


Generally, in order to continue reforming reasonably, we should make unremittingconcerted efforts. Generally, in order to continue reforming reasonably, we should make concerted efforts.

- Reforming what? Perhaps introduce this subject in the first sentence - Efforts to...? Again, explain what the goal is

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