March 21, 2022
Mystery in the dark
This is a creepy story of what I have lived through few weeks ago. It was Wednesday, I was walking home after my football practice. Outside was cold and dark which already made it scary. As I was walking I noticed someone walking in front of me 10m away, I thought nothing of it. The person was tall and he walked slowly and that made me nervous. Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dissapeared. That was weird because I could be sure that he went into the bushes. I started walking faster to see what happened but when I got there he was nowhere to be found. That gave me goosebumps and I was terrified. At that point I started running home to tell my parents what happened. To this day I don't know if I was tired and imagined it or I experienced something mysterious.
Mystery in the dark
This is a creepy story of what I have lived throughfrom a few weeks ago.
It was Wednesday, I was walking home after my football practice.
OutsideIt was cold and dark outside which already made it scary.
As I was walking I noticed someone walking in front of me 10m away, I thought nothing of it.
The person was tall and he walked slowly and that made me nervous.
Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dissappeared.
That was weird because I could be sure that he went into the bushes.
I started walking faster to see what happened but when I got there he was nowhere to be found.
That gave me goosebumps and I was terrified.
At that point I started running home to tell my parents what happened.
To this day I don't know if I was tired and imagined it or I experienced something mysterious.
Feedback
Great writing
I got scared too :(
March 22, 2022
Thank you so much!:)
This is a creepy story of what I have lived throughsomething that happened to me a few weeks ago.
It was Wednesday, and I was walking home after my football practice.
Outside it was cold and dark, which already made it scary.
As I was walking I noticed someone walking in front of me, around 10m away,. I thought nothing of it.
The person was tall and he walked slowly, and that made me nervous.
Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dissappeared.
That was weird because I could be sure thatn't tell if he went into the bushes.
To this day, I don't know if I was tired and imagined it, or if I experienced something mysterious.
Feedback
Great job! Just a tip to remember to include things like commas which can help break up your sentences a bit, when you are telling a story.
March 21, 2022
Thank you!
|
Mystery in the dark This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
This is a creepy story of what I have lived through few weeks ago. This is a creepy story of This is a creepy story |
|
It was Wednesday, I was walking home after my football practice. It was Wednesday, and I was walking home after my football practice. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
Outside was cold and dark which already made it scary. Outside it was cold and dark, which already made it scary.
|
|
As I was walking I noticed someone walking in front of me 10m away, I thought nothing of it. As I was walking I noticed someone walking in front of me, around 10m away This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
The person was tall and he walked slowly and that made me nervous. The person was tall and he walked slowly, and that made me nervous. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dissapeared. Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dis Out of nowhere he made a turn to the left and dis |
|
That was weird because I could be sure that he went into the bushes. That was weird because I could This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
I started walking faster to see what happened but when I got there he was nowhere to be found. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
That gave me goosebumps and I was terrified. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
At that point I started running home to tell my parents what happened. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
To this day I don't know if I was tired and imagined it or I experienced something mysterious. To this day, I don't know if I was tired and imagined it, or if I experienced something mysterious. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium