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Scarlett_Father

Sept. 12, 2023

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Myopia Laser Surgery

I have been nearsighted for over 30 years. I started to wear a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, I really tired of the frames on my face.

Some of my friends who had the same issue as me had received laser surgery. Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they express their excited emotions and how happy they are when they get rid of the eyewear. However, However, I also heard some people had complained they had some side effects like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction or even overcorrection.


I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, only care more about the related information.

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Myopia Laser Surgery

I have been nearsighted for over 30 years.

I started to wear a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, I reallyalthough I became tired of the frames on my face.

I really tired of the frames on my face is actually quite okay, but this is a more stylistic way of writing it and I think some English speakers might be confused for a moment. You could expand on this to make it more clear, by saying ''I really GREW tired of the frames on my face''

Some of my friends who had the same issue as me had received laser surgery.

Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they express their excited emotions and how happy they awere when they get rid of the eye wear.

Alternative in present tense: how happy they are now that they have gotten rid of the eye wear.

However, However, I also heard some people had complained that they had some side effects, like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction or even over-correction.

Very good!

I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, only. I care more about the related information.

I am not sure what you are trying to say with the last 7 words. If you would like to rephrase it I could maybe help.

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Overall good English. Keep it up!

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Scarlett_Father

Sept. 13, 2023

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I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, only. I care more about the related information.

I keep watching for the latest information about this kind of surgery.

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Scarlett_Father

Sept. 13, 2023

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Thank you for your corrections and explanations! :-)

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jtozzle

Sept. 13, 2023

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I keep watching for the latest information about this kind of surgery.

Okay!

A few ways I would write this:

''I'm more interested in the latest information (surrounding it) OR (relating to it)''

''I currently care more about keeping up to date with the technology''

I started to wearing a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, Iand I am really tired of the frames on my face.

Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they. They've expressed their excited emotions and how happy they are when theyto get rid of the eyewear.

However, However, I also heard some people had complained they hadof some side effects like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction, or even overcorrection.

I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, and only care more about the related information.

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the pros and cons of laser surgery, good writing!

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Scarlett_Father

Sept. 13, 2023

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Thank you for your corrections and comments! :-)

Myopia Laser Surgery


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I have been nearsighted for over 30 years.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I started to wear a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, I really tired of the frames on my face.


I started to wearing a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, Iand I am really tired of the frames on my face.

I started to wear a pair of nearsighted glasses when I was in middle school, I reallyalthough I became tired of the frames on my face.

I really tired of the frames on my face is actually quite okay, but this is a more stylistic way of writing it and I think some English speakers might be confused for a moment. You could expand on this to make it more clear, by saying ''I really GREW tired of the frames on my face''

Some of my friends who had the same issue as me had received laser surgery.


Some of my friends who had the same issue as me had received laser surgery.

Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they express their excited emotions and how happy they are when they get rid of the eyewear.


Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they. They've expressed their excited emotions and how happy they are when theyto get rid of the eyewear.

Fortunately, most of them are satisfied, they express their excited emotions and how happy they awere when they get rid of the eye wear.

Alternative in present tense: how happy they are now that they have gotten rid of the eye wear.

However, However, I also heard some people had complained they had some side effects like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction or even overcorrection.


However, However, I also heard some people had complained they hadof some side effects like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction, or even overcorrection.

However, However, I also heard some people had complained that they had some side effects, like fluctuation in vision, dryness, under correction or even over-correction.

Very good!

I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, only care more about the related information.


I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, and only care more about the related information.

I am afraid of the potential side effects of surgery on my eyes, so I haven't tried it yet, only. I care more about the related information.

I am not sure what you are trying to say with the last 7 words. If you would like to rephrase it I could maybe help.

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