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KosteRico

June 20, 2024

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My Water Polo experience

I played water polo when I was a child. I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well on my level of competitions. I’m supposed to stay at 2 meter line zone and with my back to the goal. I was quite good at dribbling and shooting. But I mostly played mini water polo which is a subtype. It differs by the smaller field size, unlimited attacking time. My parents brought me there when I was a child to grow up a winner mindset, because my town didn’t have other strong teams which would compete on national level. But bullying, toxic relationship with a coach backed up my future dislike for that sport. I’ve had enough of it. Now I’m more into football and basketball haha

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I played water polo when I was a child.

I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well oin my level of competitions.

I’m was supposed to stay at the 2 meter line zone and with my back to the goal.

-I changed it to "was" as your story is in the past tense

-You could leave out the "and" - "I was supposed to stay at the two metre line zone with my back to the goal"

-I spelled "meter" as "metre" - both are correct

I was quite good at dribbling and shooting.

But I mostly played mini water polo which is a subtype.

I'm not sure if playing mini water polo doesn't allow dribbling and shooting. So I'll propose two options:

-If mini water polo doesn't allow dribbling and shooting, then the two sentences should be "I was quite good at dribbling and shooting, but I mostly played mini water polo, which is a subtype"

-If there is no limit on dribbling and shooting in mini water polo , then I propose " I was quite good at dribbling and shooting. I mostly played mini water polo, which is a subtype."

It differs by the smaller field size,pool size with unlimited attacking time.

Field is used for sports like football, on grass

My parents brought me there when I was a child to grow up to have a winner mindset, because my town didn’t have any other strong teams which would compete on national level.

The sentence is very long. You could try breaking it into more sentences.

"My parents brought me there when i was a child. They wanted me to have a winner's mindset, because there were no strong teams in my town that would compete on a national level"

But the bullying, and a toxic relationship with athe coach backed upinfluenced my future dislike for that sport.

-Backed up doesn't sound natural here. Maybe you could use "influenced" or "caused" (if these were the direct reasons for your dislike of the sport)

-You could use "the coach" or "my coach"

I’ve had enough of it.

I would propose "I had had enough of it." due to the story being in the past tense.

Feedback

Overall very good. I learned a lot about water polo. I would just say stick with the same tense throughout the piece.

My Water Polo experience

I played water polo when I was a child.

I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well onat my level of competitions.

This is very minor

I’m supposed to stay at 2 meter line zone and with my back to the goal.

I was quite good at dribbling and shooting.

But I mostly played mini water polo which is a subtype.

It differs by the smaller field size, and unlimited attacking time.

My parents brought me there when I was a child to grow up a winner mindset, because my town didn’t have other strong teams which would compete on national level.

But bullying, toxic relationship with a coach backed up my future dislike for that sport.

I’ve had enough of it.

Now I’m more into football and basketball haha

Feedback

Great writing. All my corrections are very minor. I played water polo a few times back in school - it's brutal even with a nice coach!

I’m supposed to stay at 2 meter line zone and with my back to the goal.


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I’m was supposed to stay at the 2 meter line zone and with my back to the goal.

-I changed it to "was" as your story is in the past tense -You could leave out the "and" - "I was supposed to stay at the two metre line zone with my back to the goal" -I spelled "meter" as "metre" - both are correct

My Water Polo experience


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I played water polo when I was a child.


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I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well on my level of competitions.


I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well onat my level of competitions.

This is very minor

I was a hole set (center forward) and did pretty well oin my level of competitions.

I was quite good at dribbling and shooting.


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I was quite good at dribbling and shooting.

But I mostly played mini water polo which is a subtype.


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But I mostly played mini water polo which is a subtype.

I'm not sure if playing mini water polo doesn't allow dribbling and shooting. So I'll propose two options: -If mini water polo doesn't allow dribbling and shooting, then the two sentences should be "I was quite good at dribbling and shooting, but I mostly played mini water polo, which is a subtype" -If there is no limit on dribbling and shooting in mini water polo , then I propose " I was quite good at dribbling and shooting. I mostly played mini water polo, which is a subtype."

It differs by the smaller field size, unlimited attacking time.


It differs by the smaller field size, and unlimited attacking time.

It differs by the smaller field size,pool size with unlimited attacking time.

Field is used for sports like football, on grass

My parents brought me there when I was a child to grow up a winner mindset, because my town didn’t have other strong teams which would compete on national level.


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My parents brought me there when I was a child to grow up to have a winner mindset, because my town didn’t have any other strong teams which would compete on national level.

The sentence is very long. You could try breaking it into more sentences. "My parents brought me there when i was a child. They wanted me to have a winner's mindset, because there were no strong teams in my town that would compete on a national level"

But bullying, toxic relationship with a coach backed up my future dislike for that sport.


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But the bullying, and a toxic relationship with athe coach backed upinfluenced my future dislike for that sport.

-Backed up doesn't sound natural here. Maybe you could use "influenced" or "caused" (if these were the direct reasons for your dislike of the sport) -You could use "the coach" or "my coach"

I’ve had enough of it.


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I’ve had enough of it.

I would propose "I had had enough of it." due to the story being in the past tense.

Now I’m more into football and basketball haha


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