May 26, 2022
My Village
My village is in the northern part of Anhui province, the central east part of China, where is a big plain, a part of the Huabei Plain.
The area that the village covered was a square shape. Around the village, there was a small river.
The village only had a single entrance, which was in the center of the south end of the village.
Entering the entrance, there was a road in the center of the village that went from the south to the north. On the two sides of the road, there were villagers' houses.
There were five rows of houses from the south to the north on each side of the road. Three houses in a row from the east to the west, and the east half and the west half of the road were symmetrical.
All the houses were bungalows which were made of adobe, earth, wooden sticks and wheat straw.
About 25 families and 140 people were in the village, so it was not a large village.
The villagers' lives were very primitive. We used cotton to make clothes, used oil lights, ate homemade plant oil, used plant ash water to wash clothes, and so on.
We went somewhere just by walking, because only a few families could afford a bike.
There was no electricity, no telephone, no TV, so we could only communicate with people by sending letters, and learning about news by listening to radios.
I lived there until I was fifteen years old, going to the city I live in now to study.
Many years have passed, and things have all changed. My village hasn't been the same village as it used to be, and I haven't been that young boy.
My Village
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Three houses in a row from the east to the west, and the east half and the west half of the road were symmetrical.
All the houses were bungalows which were made of adobe, earth, wooden sticks and wheat straw.
About 25 families and 140 people were in the village, so it was not a large villagebig.
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The villagers' lives were very primitive.
We used cotton to make clothes, used oil lights, ate homemade plant oil, used plant ash water to wash clothes, and so on.
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There was no electricity, no telephone, no TV, so we could only communicate with people by sending letters, and learning about news by listening to radios.
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Many years have passed, and things have all changed.
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Great writing! It was very interesting to read about your village :)
May 26, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my writings.
My village was in the northern part of Anhui province, the central east part of China, which is a big plain, a part of the Huabei Plain.
The area that the village covered was a square shape. Around the village, there was a small river.
The village only had a single entrance in the centre of the village’s south side.
Entering the village, there was a road in the centre of the village that went from south to north. On the two sides of the road, there were houses.
There were five rows of houses from south to north on each side of the road. Three houses in a row from east to west, and the east half and the west half of the road were symmetrical.
All the houses were bungalows which were made of adobe, earth, wooden sticks and wheat straw.
About 25 families and 140 people were in the village, so it was not big.
The villagers' lives were very primitive. We used cotton to make clothes, used oil lights, ate homemade plant oil, used plant ash water to wash clothes, and so on.
We traveled somewhere just by walking, because only a few families could afford a bike.
There was no electricity, no telephone, no TV, so we could only communicate with people by sending letters, and learning about news by listening to radios.
I lived there until I was fifteen years old. I went to the city where I now live to study.
Many years have passed, and things have all changed. My village isn’t the same village as it used to be, and I’m not a young boy anymore.
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My village is in the northern part of Anhui province, the central east part of China, where is a big plain, a part of the Huabei Plain. My village is in the northern part of Anhui province, the central east part of China, wh The sentence could be broken up with a full stop. |
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The area that the village covered was a square shape. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Around the village, there was a small river. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The village only had a single entrance, which was in the center of the south end of the village. The village only had a single entrance |
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Entering the entrance, there was a road in the center of the village that went from the south to the north. Entering the |
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On the two sides of the road, there were villagers' houses. On the two sides of the road, there were "Villagers" isn't needed |
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There were five rows of houses from the south to the north on each side of the road. There were five rows of houses from |
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Three houses in a row from the east to the west, and the east half and the west half of the road were symmetrical. Three houses in a row from |
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All the houses were bungalows which were made of adobe, earth, wooden sticks and wheat straw. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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About 25 families and 140 people were in the village, so it was not a large village. About 25 families and 140 people were in the village, so it was not To avoid the repetition of "village" |
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The villagers' lives were very primitive. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We used cotton to make clothes, used oil lights, ate homemade plant oil, used plant ash water to wash clothes, and so on. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We went somewhere just by walking, because only a few families could afford a bike. We What you wrote isn't wrong but this is more natural |
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There was no electricity, no telephone, no TV, so we could only communicate with people by sending letters, and learning about news by listening to radios. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I lived there until I was fifteen years old, going to the city I live in now to study. I lived there until I was fifteen years old |
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Many years have passed, and things have all changed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My village hasn't been the same village as it used to be, and I haven't been that young boy. My village |
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