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SAManglai

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My trip in Rome

This summer I gone with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) in Italy. It was more my choice than her's.
First of all we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as eat pizzas, glaces and pastas. Then we got in a night bus to Bologna. And the following day we gone to Venice to parade around this beautiful city.
The thing I will always keep in mind is our walk into all the little streets of Venice. There was many beautiful buldings, shops and the fact that this city seems like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.
We very liked our trip, particulary me and I really want to go in Italy again next summer.
Thank you for reading this !

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My trip in Rometo Italy

Seems like you went to multiple cities, so I replaced Rome with Italy.

This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) into Italy.

First of all, we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as to eat pizzas, glacesice cream and pastas.

Is glace a specific type of ice-cream in Italy? If not, put ice cream there.
I removed the plural from the listed words, I've never seen these specific ones written with an s at the end.

Then we got ion a night bus to Bologna.

Usually we get into cars, but onto buses, airplanes boats etc.

And the following day we gonewent to Venice to paradewalk around this beautiful city.

"parade around" gives off a sense of pridefulness or sometimes arrogance.

Just saying "walk around" or "walk through" makes more sense.

The thing I will always keep in mindremember is our walk intos through all the little streets of Venice.

"always keep in mind" is more for remembering a task or a warning. It's also feels formal, something someone would tell you at work or that you'd read in a document.

There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops and the fact. The most beautiful thing was that thise city seemsed like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thingand, surrounded by the sea.

"Island" is more commonly used than "isle".

Slightly reworded it. I seemed like you were trying to create an image, so I made it more concise.

You could probably reword this is multiple ways.

We verreally liked our trip, particulary me andespecially me. I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

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The word "went" is what's usually used for the past tense of the verb to go. If you want to use the word gone, it should be "had gone" instead.

Overall nice work!
I'm glad that you had fun on your trip!

This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) in Italy.

It was more my choice than her's.

First of all, we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as eat pizzas, glaces and pastas.

Then we got in a night bus to Bologna.

And the following day we gonewent to Venice to parade around this beautiful city.

“the beautiful city” sounds more natural since the city is specified as Venice

The thing I will always [keep in mind/remember] is our walk into all the little streets of Venice.

There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops and t. The fact that this city seems like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.

Island is more common than isle

We very liked our trip very much, particularly me and I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

Thank you for reading this !

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Good job! I'm glad your trip went well

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SAManglai

Nov. 11, 2024

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Thanks !

My tTrip into Rome.

You go on a trip TO somewhere.

This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) into Italy.

Past tense is "went". "gone" is past participle and would be used in say the perfect tense. However, perfect tense would be incorrect here.

It was more my choice than her's.

No ' in hers.

First of all we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as to eat pizzas, glaceice creams and pastas.

We don't use glaces in English. You might say gelato or gelatos instead of ice cream as you are in Italy and we do sometimes use the word gelato. You would not make pasta plural in this case.

Then we got in a night bus to Bologna.

And the following day we gonewent to Venice to paradestroll around this beautiful city.

"parade" doesn't really work here. It has a bit of a sense of showing off as opposed to simply walking.

The thing I will always keep in mindremember is our walk intoamong all the little streets of Venice.

"keep in mind" is more an instruction to remember something rather than simply remembering it.

There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops, and the fact that this city seems like an isleand because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.

"were" plural form. "island" would be much more likely than "isle". In theory you could say isle but it is a bit more poetic / archaic sounding.

We very liked our trip, particularly me, and I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

Thank you for reading this !

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Good work. Most obvious thing gone instead of went. It's go - went - have gone.

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SAManglai

Nov. 11, 2024

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okey thanks !

My trip in Rome


My tTrip into Rome.

You go on a trip TO somewhere.

My trip in Rometo Italy

Seems like you went to multiple cities, so I replaced Rome with Italy.

This summer I gone with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) in Italy.


This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) into Italy.

Past tense is "went". "gone" is past participle and would be used in say the perfect tense. However, perfect tense would be incorrect here.

This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) in Italy.

This summer I gonewent with my girlfriend (currently EX-girlfriend lol) into Italy.

It was more my choice than her's.


It was more my choice than her's.

No ' in hers.

It was more my choice than her's.

First of all we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as eat pizzas, glaces and pastas.


First of all we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as to eat pizzas, glaceice creams and pastas.

We don't use glaces in English. You might say gelato or gelatos instead of ice cream as you are in Italy and we do sometimes use the word gelato. You would not make pasta plural in this case.

First of all, we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as eat pizzas, glaces and pastas.

First of all, we flew from Marseille to Rome to visit the city as well as to eat pizzas, glacesice cream and pastas.

Is glace a specific type of ice-cream in Italy? If not, put ice cream there. I removed the plural from the listed words, I've never seen these specific ones written with an s at the end.

Then we got in a night bus to Bologna.


Then we got in a night bus to Bologna.

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Then we got ion a night bus to Bologna.

Usually we get into cars, but onto buses, airplanes boats etc.

And the following day we gone to Venice to parade around this beautiful city.


And the following day we gonewent to Venice to paradestroll around this beautiful city.

"parade" doesn't really work here. It has a bit of a sense of showing off as opposed to simply walking.

And the following day we gonewent to Venice to parade around this beautiful city.

“the beautiful city” sounds more natural since the city is specified as Venice

And the following day we gonewent to Venice to paradewalk around this beautiful city.

"parade around" gives off a sense of pridefulness or sometimes arrogance. Just saying "walk around" or "walk through" makes more sense.

The thing I will always keep in mind is our walk into all the little streets of Venice.


The thing I will always keep in mindremember is our walk intoamong all the little streets of Venice.

"keep in mind" is more an instruction to remember something rather than simply remembering it.

The thing I will always [keep in mind/remember] is our walk into all the little streets of Venice.

The thing I will always keep in mindremember is our walk intos through all the little streets of Venice.

"always keep in mind" is more for remembering a task or a warning. It's also feels formal, something someone would tell you at work or that you'd read in a document.

There was many beautiful buldings, shops and the fact that this city seems like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.


There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops, and the fact that this city seems like an isleand because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.

"were" plural form. "island" would be much more likely than "isle". In theory you could say isle but it is a bit more poetic / archaic sounding.

There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops and t. The fact that this city seems like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thing.

Island is more common than isle

There wasere many beautiful buildings, and shops and the fact. The most beautiful thing was that thise city seemsed like an isle because of all the water is the most beautiful thingand, surrounded by the sea.

"Island" is more commonly used than "isle". Slightly reworded it. I seemed like you were trying to create an image, so I made it more concise. You could probably reword this is multiple ways.

We very liked our trip, particulary me and I really want to go in Italy again next summer.


We very liked our trip, particularly me, and I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

We very liked our trip very much, particularly me and I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

We verreally liked our trip, particulary me andespecially me. I really want to go into Italy again next summer.

Thank you for reading this !


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