Dec. 18, 2021
My Superhero
When we got this theme, I didn't know who is my superhero. On the first I
was think that we must write about movie superhero, but I don't like movies with
Superman,Betman, Spiderman.
My superhero is my dad. He said that his alter ego is criminal, but he hide
that very good. We laugh of that , because he is the best person which I know. My
dad wear a cloak of kindness, timidity and patience. He's job is very heavy,
because he must keep us together. His strongest weapon is his patience. We are
always drama people and he is always here to calm us down. His biggest flaw is
kindness, because everyone takes advantage of him.
If I get ever married, my dad always be my superhero. He is my anchor.
My Superhero
When we got this theme, I didn't know who is my superhero was.
On theAt first I
was thinkthought that we musthad to write about movie superhero, but I don't like movies with
"must" doesn't normally get used in the past tense in Modern English anymore.
with (characters like) Superman, Betman, and Spiderman.
It sounds smoother to include "characters like X, Y, and..." here.
My superhero is my dad.
He said that his alter ego is (a) criminal, but he hides it very well.
I'm not sure, but if you meant to use "criminal" as an adjective here, no need for the "a".
that very good.
Moved this up.
We laugh ofat that , because he is the best person which I(we) know.
If you start the sentence with "we", using "we" again would make more sense.
My
No correction, just fixing the format.
My dad wears a cloak of kindness, timidity and patience.
He'is job is very heavydifficult,
because he must keep us together.
His strongest weapon is his patience.
We are
We are always drama people andtic, but he is always here to calm us down.
1. "people" is a bit unnecessary here.
2. "but" sounds more natural here.
His biggest flaw is his kindness,
kindness, because everyone takes advantage of him.
If I get ever married, my dad always be my superhero.
He is my anchor.
Just a suggestion, but "X is my rock" is another common expression used like this, especially for friends/family who support you. (This tends to be used more by Americans, though)
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Overall, well-written! Expressed thoughts clearly, and used expressions and vocab quite well!
Dec. 18, 2021
Thank you for taking your time!
Dec. 18, 2021
He is my anchor.
If I get ever married, my dad will always be my rock.
Is will be correct? Or, my dad always be?
Dec. 19, 2021
Yep, that's correct!
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that very good.
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When we got this theme, I didn't know who is my superhero. When we got this theme, I didn't know who |
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On the first I
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was think that we must write about movie superhero, but I don't like movies with
"must" doesn't normally get used in the past tense in Modern English anymore. |
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Superman,Betman, Spiderman. with (characters like) Superman, Betman, and Spiderman. It sounds smoother to include "characters like X, Y, and..." here. |
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My superhero is my dad. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He said that his alter ego is criminal, but he hide He said that his alter ego is (a) criminal, but he hides it very well. I'm not sure, but if you meant to use "criminal" as an adjective here, no need for the "a". |
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We laugh of that , because he is the best person which I know. We laugh If you start the sentence with "we", using "we" again would make more sense. |
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My
No correction, just fixing the format. |
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dad wear a cloak of kindness, timidity and patience. My dad wears a cloak of kindness, timidity and patience. |
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because he must keep us together. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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His strongest weapon is his patience. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We are
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always drama people and he is always here to calm us down. We are always drama 1. "people" is a bit unnecessary here. 2. "but" sounds more natural here. |
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His biggest flaw is His biggest flaw is his kindness, |
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kindness, because everyone takes advantage of him.
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If I get ever married, my dad always be my superhero. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He is my anchor. He is my anchor. Just a suggestion, but "X is my rock" is another common expression used like this, especially for friends/family who support you. (This tends to be used more by Americans, though) |
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