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My stuffed toy
Do you have a stuffed toy? I had a stuffed toy when I was very young. I felt secure when falling asleep with it, and it was a soft, fluffy and cute penguin. When I was upset or going through hard times, I will hug it as a way to comfort myself. It makes me felt better. It is important for me because I treats it as my best friend. My mom told me that no adult will hug stuffed toys during sleep, I will keep hugging though.
I felt securafe when falling asleep with it, and it was a soft, fluffy and cutecute and fluffy penguin.
secure is fine, but i feel safe is a little more natural!
same with the adjectives, changing the order sounds a bit better
When I was upset or going through hard times, I willould hug it as a way to comfort myself.
would is will in the past tense :)
It makesde me feelt better.
It iwas important for me because I treatsed it as my best friend.
since you're talking about the past, i changed some sentences to be in the past.
if you want to talk about now, you say 'I treat it' as my best friend
My mom told me that no adult would still hug a stuffed toys during while sleep,ing. I will keep hugging, though.
we use 'would' instead of will because what your mom said is just a future guess, not something definite about the future. and you don't need to repeat keep hugging again, we already know because you mentioned it in the previous sentence.
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well done!! i love your way of expression :)
When I was upset or going through hard times, I willould hug it as a way to comfort myself.
This sentence needs the conditional “would” in place of “will”
It makesde me feelt better.
Past tense
It iwas important for me because I treatsed it as my best friend.
My mom told me that no adult willould hug stuffed toys during sleep, I willould keep hugging though.
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Good work! Just make sure your tenses/moods are in agreement
My stuffed toy
Do you have a stuffed toy?
I had a stuffed toy when I was very young.
I felt secure when falling asleep with it, and it was a soft, fluffy and cute penguin.
When I was upset or going through hard times, I will hugged it as a way to comfort myself.
will hug = future
hugged = past
It makesde me felt better.
makes = present
made = past
It iwas important for me because I treatsed it as my best friend.
is = present
was = past
My mom told me that no adult will hugs a stuffed toys during when they sleep, but I will keep hugging thoughmine.
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Very well written! Just a few minor errors, as you switch from the past to the present and to the future tense a few times. If you want to indicate switching to the present tense, you can use a word like "Now" to start the sentence (for example, "Now, it still makes me feel better". Also, I still hug my stuffed toy from childhood - no shame!
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Do you have a stuffed toy? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I had a stuffed toy when I was very young. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I felt secure when falling asleep with it, and it was a soft, fluffy and cute penguin. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I felt s secure is fine, but i feel safe is a little more natural! same with the adjectives, changing the order sounds a bit better |
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It is important for me because I treats it as my best friend. It is = present was = past It It since you're talking about the past, i changed some sentences to be in the past. if you want to talk about now, you say 'I treat it' as my best friend |
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