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Onodak

Aug. 8, 2020

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Nothing in the world beats curry. I'd eat curry at every meal if I could and I actually ate it every day when I was in college. The problem is that they have a lot of calories. Even more so if I have a curry with a cutlet. But I don't want to give up curries.


カレーに勝る食べ物はありませんね。できることなら毎食カレーを食べたいし、実際、大学時代は毎日のように食べていました。問題はカロリーが高いこと。カツカレーを食べればなおさらです。でもカレーはやめられないんです。

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The problem is that theycurries have a lot of calories.

It's not clear to me what "they" references, since the previous sentence has only singular nouns.

EI get even more calorieso if I have a curry with a cutlet.

Your sentence is incomplete and I didn't understand what exactly "Even more so" referred to.

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I need to look into preparing more curries!

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Onodak

Aug. 10, 2020

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Thank you for your correction! I guess preparing curry is important, but I often use curry roux to make it easier.

My Story - My Favorite Food

Nothing in the world beats curry.

I'd eat curry at every meal if I could and. I actually ate it every day when I was in college.

Gingerbreadwoman made a separate suggestion ("...,and I actually did eat it..."). But you could also change it into two sentences and it would also sound fine :)

The problem is that thecurry usually haves a lot of calories.

You can use the singular word "curry" to refer to "types of curry" in general. We often use the singular form when we talk about a dish in general.

I added the word "usually" to show that while it is typical for curry to have a lot of calories, different types of curry may have different numbers of calories. Adding "usually" here makes the sentence sound a bit more natural to me.

Even more so if I have a curry with a cutletfor Katsu Curry.

The meaning of this sentence is currently "If I have curry with a cutlet, it has more calories". However, the number of calories in the curry does not change whether you eat it or not - the number of calories depends on which type of curry it is. So what you are trying to say is "As for curry with a cutlet, it has more calories". (Or more simply: "Curry with a cutlet has more calories.")
If we write out the correct sentence in full, it would be "The problem is even more so [for/with] curry with a cutlet". You can use "for" or "with" here, but as we're already using "curry with a cutlet", it looks better to not repeat this word too many times and just use "for".

You could also say "Especially curry with a cutlet" - this makes it a lot simpler! "Even more so" is more formal.

Finally, in English we actually have the term "Katsu Curry". You can use this to be a bit more specific and help the reader understand which type of curry you're writing about. You can use it with or without capital letters. However, I recommend using capital letters, as some people may not know what "Katsu Curry" is, and capitalising helps the reader understand that it is a specific type of dish.

But I don't want to give up eating curriesy.

Again, for talking about "curry in general", you can use the singular form - "curry".
I added "eating curry" so that it is clearer.

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Sorry if some of the explanations are really long. Just let me know if you'd like more help understanding what I've written.

I agree that curry is amazing. One of my favourite types is Katsu Curry and I also ate it most days when I was at university - it was cheap and delicious!
Do you like any types of curry from other countries, or do you just like Japanese curry? :)

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Onodak

Aug. 10, 2020

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Thank you for correcting! You like curry like me. I like Katsu Curry too. I also like curry with chunky vegetables and meat!

Nothing in the world beats curry.

The problem is that ithey haves a lot of calories.

Even more so if I have a curry with a cutlet.

But I don't want to give up curriesy.

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Curry is good stuff.
But is it true there's more calories if you get it *without* the cutlet?
I'm surprised. I thought the cutlet would add calories.

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Onodak

Aug. 10, 2020

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You're right, Katsu Curry is higher in calories than curry without the cutlet.

My Story - My Favorite Food

Nothing in the world beats curry.

I'd eat curry at every meal if I could, and I actually did eate it every day when I was in college.

The way you wrote it is not wrong, but the way I corrected it emphasizes the connection between the first part of the sentence and the second part.

The problem is that they have a lot of calories.

Even more so if I have a curry with a cutlet.

But I don't want to give up curries.

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Perfect!

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Onodak

Aug. 8, 2020

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Thank you for your correction. It can emphasize the connection between the sentences by adding "did". I'll keep that in mind.

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Monsieur_Elephant

Aug. 8, 2020

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A little precision: it depends on the tense of your sentence. If it is in the present tense, you have to write "I do eat curry every day". You can replace it by "actually", which works everywhere: "actually, I ate curry every day"

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Onodak

Aug. 8, 2020

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You mean: when the sentence is in the present tense I can use "do" and when the sentence is in the past tense I can use "did". And "do" and "did" can be replaced by "actually", If I use "do" or "did" I can't use "actually". Right?

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Nothing in the world beats curry.


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I'd eat curry at every meal if I could and I actually ate it every day when I was in college.


I'd eat curry at every meal if I could, and I actually did eate it every day when I was in college.

The way you wrote it is not wrong, but the way I corrected it emphasizes the connection between the first part of the sentence and the second part.

I'd eat curry at every meal if I could and. I actually ate it every day when I was in college.

Gingerbreadwoman made a separate suggestion ("...,and I actually did eat it..."). But you could also change it into two sentences and it would also sound fine :)

The problem is that they have a lot of calories.


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The problem is that ithey haves a lot of calories.

The problem is that thecurry usually haves a lot of calories.

You can use the singular word "curry" to refer to "types of curry" in general. We often use the singular form when we talk about a dish in general. I added the word "usually" to show that while it is typical for curry to have a lot of calories, different types of curry may have different numbers of calories. Adding "usually" here makes the sentence sound a bit more natural to me.

The problem is that theycurries have a lot of calories.

It's not clear to me what "they" references, since the previous sentence has only singular nouns.

Even more so if I have a curry with a cutlet.


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Even more so if I have a curry with a cutlet.

Even more so if I have a curry with a cutletfor Katsu Curry.

The meaning of this sentence is currently "If I have curry with a cutlet, it has more calories". However, the number of calories in the curry does not change whether you eat it or not - the number of calories depends on which type of curry it is. So what you are trying to say is "As for curry with a cutlet, it has more calories". (Or more simply: "Curry with a cutlet has more calories.") If we write out the correct sentence in full, it would be "The problem is even more so [for/with] curry with a cutlet". You can use "for" or "with" here, but as we're already using "curry with a cutlet", it looks better to not repeat this word too many times and just use "for". You could also say "Especially curry with a cutlet" - this makes it a lot simpler! "Even more so" is more formal. Finally, in English we actually have the term "Katsu Curry". You can use this to be a bit more specific and help the reader understand which type of curry you're writing about. You can use it with or without capital letters. However, I recommend using capital letters, as some people may not know what "Katsu Curry" is, and capitalising helps the reader understand that it is a specific type of dish.

EI get even more calorieso if I have a curry with a cutlet.

Your sentence is incomplete and I didn't understand what exactly "Even more so" referred to.

But I don't want to give up curries.


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But I don't want to give up curriesy.

But I don't want to give up eating curriesy.

Again, for talking about "curry in general", you can use the singular form - "curry". I added "eating curry" so that it is clearer.

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