Aug. 4, 2021
My Smartphone
I updated my smartphone a couple of days ago. The battery of my smartphone had lasted for about four days. After updating, the battery of my smartphone has not lasted three days. I thought the update software might have a bug. However, I could not find any information online. It may be a problem only for my smartphone.
数日前、スマホをアップデートしました。スマホの電池は、4日くらい持っていました。アップデートしたら、スマホの電池が3日持たなくなりました。アップデートのソフトウェアにバグがあるかもしれないと思いました。しかし、ネットでそのような情報は見つかりませんでした。私のスマホだけの問題かもしれません。
The battery of my smartphone had lasted forsmartphone battery used to last about four days.
After updating, the battery of my smartphone has not lasted three days.
Since updating, it has not even lasted three days.
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That's annoying! I hope your battery goes back to normal...
Your sentences are already very good, so I just made some stylistic suggestions.
Aug. 5, 2021
Thank you!
My Smartphone
I updated my smartphone a couple of days ago.
The battery of my smartphone had lasted for about four days.
After updating, the battery of my smartphone has non't lasted for three days.
When discussing life matters, the more casual contractions like 'hasn't' are preferred.
I added the 'for' just to better mirror the previous sentence, which is good for the intended comparison. What you had was also correct.
I thought the update software might have a bug.
However, I could not find any information online.
Since we're discussing information online, we can use the more formal tone here, but here's a more casual version:
However, I couldn't find any info online.
It may be a problem only for my smartphone.
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Good work! I would check to see if it reset your battery settings to factory default if you haven't already. I also know that some manufacturers have been caught making the battery life worse with updates to force people to upgrade. Good luck!
Aug. 4, 2021
Thank you!
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I updated my smartphone a couple of days ago. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The battery of my smartphone had lasted for about four days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The |
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After updating, the battery of my smartphone has not lasted three days. After updating, the battery of my smartphone has When discussing life matters, the more casual contractions like 'hasn't' are preferred. I added the 'for' just to better mirror the previous sentence, which is good for the intended comparison. What you had was also correct. After updating, the battery of my smartphone has not lasted three days. Since updating, it has not even lasted three days. |
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I thought the update software might have a bug. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, I could not find any information online. However, I could not find any information online. Since we're discussing information online, we can use the more formal tone here, but here's a more casual version: However, I couldn't find any info online. |
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It may be a problem only for my smartphone. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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