Aug. 11, 2025
My Second, Even More Unconventional Hobby
In my last post I wrote about my first hobby, wich is playing an instrument, and how it affected all the different areas in my life. Now I want to introduce to you another passion I am following since I can remember. This hobby is called bowling. And I know what you're thinking - "Bowling isn't even that uncommon" but there is a big twist. In Europe, especially in germany and east of it, another type of bowling is played. It's actually the original version of it. The main differences are, that there are not 10, but 9 pins, the bowlingballs have no holes in them and a game is played by four sets via 30 attempts - 120 throws in total. Furthermore, there are a lot of rules that make this sport way harder than the US Version. I personally think it is a very great sport, even though it will probaply die out in the next few generations due to the lack of spectator appeal and the enourmous expenses such an alley has. But I will tell you, the feeling of playing a match 6 versus 6 - two duels at a time for 3 rounds wich at least last 1 hour each, and then winning, is the greatest feeling i've ever had. If you have the opportunity to experience it, do it!
In my last post I wrote about my first hobby, which is playing an instrument, and how it affected all the different areas in my life.
Now I want to introduce to you to another passion I am following since've had since as long as I can remember.
- There's nothing technically wrong with 'introduce to you' but it has a different meaning to 'introduce you to' which is what I think you mean. If I come see you and I bring a friend I will introduce TO you my friend and I will introduce YOU to my friend. Notice the ordering of you and to depending on who is being introduced to who. Here you are introducing the reader to your passion not introducing the passion to your reader so this is why I have changed the ordering
- People say 'follow your passion' but it's kind of figurative, you don't actually follow your passions you have passions so it's not really natural to write here is a passion I am following because you are talking about the act of doing the passion where it makes much more sense to talk about you having the passion. You would say 'I'm going to follow my passion' when your talking vaguely about it not specifically about it.
- The idiom is 'since as long as I can remember', need the 'as long as' part
This hobby is called bowling.
- Just an FYI, passion and hobby are two different things in English. A hobby is something you do casually, a passion is like something you are enthusiastic about that you live for because you love it that much. Just mentioning this because you talk about it being a passion in the sentence above and then you use the word hobby here which feels a bit weird just because it's like describing a drop in how much you like it. I think it would be more appropriate to either reuse passion or use another word like 'activity of mine' or 'interest of mine'
And I know what you're thinking - "Bowling isn't even that uncommon" but there i's a big twist.
- This is pretty casual text so it sounds a oddly formal writing 'there is' as opposed having it contracted into there's
The main differences are, that there are not 10, but 9 pins, the bowling balls have no holes in them and athe game is played byfor four sets via 30 attempts -totaling 120 throws in total.
- 'the' instead of 'a' is more appropriate here because you are talking about every game of this type of bowling. If you used 'a' in this context it sounds more like you are talking about one instance of the game
- Games are always played for a number of sets/series etc not by a number of sets/series
- totaling is a more natural way to show 30 x 4 = 120 then a hyphen
Furthermore, there are a lot of rules that make this sport way harder than the US Version.
I personally think it is a very great sport, even though it will probapbly die out in the next few generations due to the lack of spectator appeal and the enourmous expenses such an alley sport has.
- very and great do not ever go together. To say something is better than great you would need to use a strong word like 'fantastic'
- I didn't know what you mean by alley but by the sentence it seemed to make sense to put the sport there. Apologies if you meant something else
But I will tell you, the feeling of playing a match 6 versus 6 -, two duels at a time for 3 rounds which at leaslast for at least 1 hour each, and then winning, i - it's the greatest feeling iI've ever had.
- The order is almost always 'which last for at least ...'
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Good English overall, just a bit of finessing :)
Aug. 12, 2025
Thank you, these are really great tips! (Btw. With alley I meant the area you play in- like a bowling alley)
Aug. 12, 2025
No worries. Okay, in that case, the strucuture you used doesn't make the most sense with the alley. When you use 'such a ... has', the ... has to be the thing you are referring to which is in this case is the sport bowling. The way to phrase what you are trying to say is to say '... and the enormous expenses such a sport has such as the alley'. You can then add on however many things you want to the end of this to expand if you wish e.g. '... and the enormous expenses such a sport has such as the alley, the equipement, the insurance etc'
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My Second, Even More Unconventional Hobby |
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In my last post I wrote about my first hobby, wich is playing an instrument, and how it affected all the different areas in my life. In my last post I wrote about my first hobby, which is playing an instrument, and how it affected all the different areas in my life. |
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Now I want to introduce to you another passion I am following since I can remember. Now I want to introduce - There's nothing technically wrong with 'introduce to you' but it has a different meaning to 'introduce you to' which is what I think you mean. If I come see you and I bring a friend I will introduce TO you my friend and I will introduce YOU to my friend. Notice the ordering of you and to depending on who is being introduced to who. Here you are introducing the reader to your passion not introducing the passion to your reader so this is why I have changed the ordering - People say 'follow your passion' but it's kind of figurative, you don't actually follow your passions you have passions so it's not really natural to write here is a passion I am following because you are talking about the act of doing the passion where it makes much more sense to talk about you having the passion. You would say 'I'm going to follow my passion' when your talking vaguely about it not specifically about it. - The idiom is 'since as long as I can remember', need the 'as long as' part |
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This hobby is called bowling. This hobby is called bowling. - Just an FYI, passion and hobby are two different things in English. A hobby is something you do casually, a passion is like something you are enthusiastic about that you live for because you love it that much. Just mentioning this because you talk about it being a passion in the sentence above and then you use the word hobby here which feels a bit weird just because it's like describing a drop in how much you like it. I think it would be more appropriate to either reuse passion or use another word like 'activity of mine' or 'interest of mine' |
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And I know what you're thinking - "Bowling isn't even that uncommon" but there is a big twist. And I know what you're thinking - "Bowling isn't even that uncommon" but there - This is pretty casual text so it sounds a oddly formal writing 'there is' as opposed having it contracted into there's |
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In Europe, especially in germany and east of it, another type of bowling is played. |
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It's actually the original version of it. |
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The main differences are, that there are not 10, but 9 pins, the bowlingballs have no holes in them and a game is played by four sets via 30 attempts - 120 throws in total. The main differences are - 'the' instead of 'a' is more appropriate here because you are talking about every game of this type of bowling. If you used 'a' in this context it sounds more like you are talking about one instance of the game - Games are always played for a number of sets/series etc not by a number of sets/series - totaling is a more natural way to show 30 x 4 = 120 then a hyphen |
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Furthermore, there are a lot of rules that make this sport way harder than the US Version. Furthermore, there are a lot of rules that make this sport way harder than the US Version. |
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I personally think it is a very great sport, even though it will probaply die out in the next few generations due to the lack of spectator appeal and the enourmous expenses such an alley has. I personally think it is a - very and great do not ever go together. To say something is better than great you would need to use a strong word like 'fantastic' - I didn't know what you mean by alley but by the sentence it seemed to make sense to put the sport there. Apologies if you meant something else |
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But I will tell you, the feeling of playing a match 6 versus 6 - two duels at a time for 3 rounds wich at least last 1 hour each, and then winning, is the greatest feeling i've ever had. But I will tell you, the feeling of playing a match 6 versus 6 - The order is almost always 'which last for at least ...' |
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If you have the opportunity to experience it, do it! |
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