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anim_elite

Jan. 11, 2020

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My proposals text

Hello,
This is my preferred field, which I'm personally and professionally passionate about. Fortunately, the job description, requirement, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best aligned with my experience and interests.

I generally understand what you need to be done. We can get into more details if you'd like to do work with me.

I have tons of experience in Django/DRF. I've done a similar project like this in the past, so I don't think there would be any issues getting what you need done.

I am flexible and available just about any time you need me to work. I am also available most weekends, especially during the day.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you!

Corrections

My pProposals text

Hello, This is my preferred field, which I' am personally and professionally passionate about.

Contractions (I'm, can't, don't, etc.) are reserved for casual writing.

Fortunately, the job description, requirement, and responsibilities of this specific position seem bestwell aligned with my experience and interests.

I generally understand what you needs to be done.

We can get intodiscuss more details if you' would like to do work with me.

I have tonsplenty of experience in Django/DRF.

"tons" is slang and unsuitable for a job application.

I' have done a similar project like this in the past, so I don't think there would be any issues getting what you need done.

I am flexible and available just about any time you need me to work.

I am also available most weekends, especially during the day.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you!

My proposals textApplying for a job

Your title sounded really unnatural but I couldn't think of a way to fix it without changing the whole thing. Since this reads like an email sent for the purpose of applying for a job, I changed the title to reflect that.

Hello, This is my preferred field, which I'Dear (Sir, Madam, Mr./Ms. [name], etc.),¶

This is a field that I a
m personally and professionally passionate about.

It seems that this is a text written to try to secure a job. You would give a proper greeting using the recipient's name or title if you know it, not just say "Hello." Also, jumping right into talking about your interests instead of the project is not ideal.

Fortunately, tThe job description, requirements, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best alignedalign well with my experience and interests.

I generally understand what you need to be dthe requirements of this positione.

We can get into more details if you' would like to do work with me.

I have tons ofa extensive experience in Django/DRF.

"tons of" sounds too informal for this type of text.

I've dn addition, I have worked one a similar project like this in the past, so I don' not think there would be any issues getwith completing what you need done.

I am flexible and available just about any time you might need me to work.

Since you don't have the job secured, I added "might" to add a more hypothetical feel.

I am also available most weekends, especially during the day.

HI hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you!

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Bees

Jan. 11, 2020

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This title doesn't sound natural and doesn't really give a good idea of what the text is about.

My proposals text

Hello, This is my preferred field, which I'm personally and professionally passionate about.

Fortunately, tThe job description, requirements, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best alignedto be a good match with my experience and interests.

Fortunately is unnecessary here. Also, I feel this line has a very slight ego-centric feel to it, so some people might not like it. Depends on the person.

I have a generally understanding of what you needs to be done.

We can get into more details if you'd like to do work with me.

I have tons of experience in Django/DRF.

I've done a similar project like this in the past, so I don't think there would be any issues getting what you need done.

I am flexible and available just about any time you need me to work.

I am also available most weekends, especially during the day.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you!

Feedback

Overall, very minor mistakes. :) And if you ask me, you should send this unedited. Sure good English looks good, but it shouldn't be a deciding factor on the quality of your work since you're a developer. And I guess you work freelance, so you won't be able to get your sentences corrected every time you communicate with your clients. Plus your English is good enough :)

anim_elite's avatar
anim_elite

Jan. 11, 2020

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Thank very much for your attention. But I want my client to believe me native english. is it impossible?

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Ochita

Jan. 11, 2020

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Why? I don't know about Django but is it UI related? Does your English level matter? I would say attach a link to your GitHub in the mail, to prove your work. If you're only working on the backend, only your level of work should matter and not your level of English. To be honest with you, I would say your chances of passing off yourself as a native is not that high right now. (And you needn't either.) But it isn't impossible. You can get pretty close to native. Just keep on practicing. The sentences in the post are very natural, so you're off to a good start too. :)

Bees's avatar
Bees

Jan. 11, 2020

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My proposals text

This title doesn't sound natural and doesn't really give a good idea of what the text is about.

Ochita's avatar
Ochita

Jan. 11, 2020

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This title doesn't sound natural and doesn't really give a good idea of what the text is about.

Sorry, I completely overlooked that! Thanks a lot for correcting me. *sigh* Guess I'm not good at making corrections...

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My proposals textApplying for a job

Your title sounded really unnatural but I couldn't think of a way to fix it without changing the whole thing. Since this reads like an email sent for the purpose of applying for a job, I changed the title to reflect that.

My pProposals text

Hello, This is my preferred field, which I'm personally and professionally passionate about.


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Hello, This is my preferred field, which I'Dear (Sir, Madam, Mr./Ms. [name], etc.),¶

This is a field that I a
m personally and professionally passionate about.

It seems that this is a text written to try to secure a job. You would give a proper greeting using the recipient's name or title if you know it, not just say "Hello." Also, jumping right into talking about your interests instead of the project is not ideal.

Hello, This is my preferred field, which I' am personally and professionally passionate about.

Contractions (I'm, can't, don't, etc.) are reserved for casual writing.

Fortunately, the job description, requirement, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best aligned with my experience and interests.


Fortunately, tThe job description, requirements, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best alignedto be a good match with my experience and interests.

Fortunately is unnecessary here. Also, I feel this line has a very slight ego-centric feel to it, so some people might not like it. Depends on the person.

Fortunately, tThe job description, requirements, and responsibilities of this specific position seem best alignedalign well with my experience and interests.

Fortunately, the job description, requirement, and responsibilities of this specific position seem bestwell aligned with my experience and interests.

I generally understand what you need to be done.


I have a generally understanding of what you needs to be done.

I generally understand what you need to be dthe requirements of this positione.

I generally understand what you needs to be done.

We can get into more details if you'd like to do work with me.


We can get into more details if you'd like to do work with me.

We can get into more details if you' would like to do work with me.

We can get intodiscuss more details if you' would like to do work with me.

I have tons of experience in Django/DRF.


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I have tons ofa extensive experience in Django/DRF.

"tons of" sounds too informal for this type of text.

I have tonsplenty of experience in Django/DRF.

"tons" is slang and unsuitable for a job application.

I've done a similar project like this in the past, so I don't think there would be any issues getting what you need done.


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I've dn addition, I have worked one a similar project like this in the past, so I don' not think there would be any issues getwith completing what you need done.

I' have done a similar project like this in the past, so I don't think there would be any issues getting what you need done.

I am flexible and available just about any time you need me to work.


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I am flexible and available just about any time you might need me to work.

Since you don't have the job secured, I added "might" to add a more hypothetical feel.

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I am also available most weekends, especially during the day.


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Hope to hear from you soon.


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HI hope to hear from you soon.

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Thank you!


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