Oct. 12, 2020
My pet!
Presently, I have no pets. I wish I had a dog or a parrot. Actually, my landlord does not allow me to keep pets. It is very unfortunate. Years ago, I had a parrot which I loved a lot. My parrot liked to eat walnuts and apples every day. One day, after finishing my work at the office, I got home and knocked on the door. When my sister opened the door, unfortunately, the parrot flew away.
It was my fault because my sister told me to close the door immediately because the parrot was out of the cage. But I did not listen to her and thought that the parrot also loves me and will not fly away. I was wrong. I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot being an opportunist, flew away.
Presently, I have no pets.
This is grammatically correct but doesn't sound natural/
I wish I had a dog or a parrot.
ActuallyHowever, my landlord does not allow me to keep pets.
"does not" is more commonly written as "doesn't".
It is very unfortunate.
"It is" is more commonly written as "It's".
Years ago, I had a parrot which I loved a lot.
My parrot liked to eat walnuts and apples every day.
One day, after finishing my work at the office, I got home and knocked on the door.
WUnfortunately when my sister opened the door, unfortunately, the parrot flew away.
It was my fault, because my sister had told me to close the door immediately becauseas the parrot was out of the cage.
But I did not listen to her and thought that the parrot also lovesd me and will noouldn't fly away.
"Did not" is more commonly written as "Didn't".
I was wrong.
I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot, being an opportunist, flew away.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! I hope you get a new pet soon!
Oct. 12, 2020
I don't think the problem is one of grammar but of register. "Presently" is a very formal word. Perhaps "at the moment" or "right now" would be a less formal alternative?
Oct. 12, 2020
Yes, I agree. I think it might also have to do with where one grew up as sometimes expressions change from region to region (California - Maine etc.)
Oct. 13, 2020
Thanks a lot, Oceandrive76! Yes, I hope to get a parrot soon. Stay safe!
My pet!
Presently, I have no pets.
This is grammatically correct, but we usually would not say it this way. Better:
Currently, I have no pets.
Right now I don't have any pets.
I wish I had a dog or a parrot.
ActuallyHowever, my landlord does not allow me to keep pets.
It is very unfortunate.
Years ago, I had a parrot which I loved a lot.
My parrot liked to eat walnuts and apples every day.
One day, after finishing my work at the office, I got home and knocked on the door.
When my sister opened the door, unfortunately, the parrot flew away.
Again, this is grammatically correct, but does not sound natural. Better:
When my sister opened the door, the parrot, unfortunately, flew away.
It was my fault because m. My sister told me to close the door immediately because the parrot was out of the cage.
But I did not listen to her and. I thought that the parrot also lovesd me and willould not fly away.
I was wrong.
I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot, being an opportunist, flew away.
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So sorry to hear about your parrot! Good writing though
Oct. 13, 2020
Thanks a lot! yes, I still miss him a lot. Many thanks for the correction.
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Presently, I have no pets. Presently, I have no pets. This is grammatically correct, but we usually would not say it this way. Better: Currently, I have no pets. Right now I don't have any pets. Presently, I have no pets. This is grammatically correct but doesn't sound natural/ |
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I wish I had a dog or a parrot. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Actually, my landlord does not allow me to keep pets.
"does not" is more commonly written as "doesn't". |
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It is very unfortunate. This sentence has been marked as perfect! It is very unfortunate. "It is" is more commonly written as "It's". |
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Years ago, I had a parrot which I loved a lot. Years ago Years ago |
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My parrot liked to eat walnuts and apples every day. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One day, after finishing my work at the office, I got home and knocked on the door. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When my sister opened the door, unfortunately, the parrot flew away. When my sister opened the door, unfortunately, the parrot flew away. Again, this is grammatically correct, but does not sound natural. Better: When my sister opened the door, the parrot, unfortunately, flew away.
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It was my fault because my sister told me to close the door immediately because the parrot was out of the cage. It was my fault It was my fault, because my sister had told me to close the door immediately |
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But I did not listen to her and thought that the parrot also loves me and will not fly away. But I did not listen to her and thought that the parrot also love "Did not" is more commonly written as "Didn't". But I did not listen to her |
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I was wrong. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot being an opportunist, flew away. I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot, being an opportunist, flew away. I kept the door open for around 10 seconds, and the parrot, being an opportunist, flew away. |
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