Today I'mIn this journal I’ll be attempting to do thmy English homework.

‘This homework’ sounds too specific natives wouldn’t say it.

The one I corrected sounds a bit formal, but addressing what you’re talking about is usually done formally. Furthermore, it gives an imperative formal tone.

You could say to be more colloquial: the topic of this journal will be my homework

But even using ‘topic’ in this way sounds a bit iffy !

(Please correct me if I made some unnecessary contractions, sometimes I don't notice them because it's adue to habit 😅)

Correcting in line with your stylistic intent :)

I am a young woman with curly hair, I am both skinny, and tall.

I have brown eyes, my hair is dark, I have long eyelashes and I have a serious countenance.

My favorite family member is my mom because she is funI love my mother the best out of all my family, because I find her find, she is always makes me laughing and she dodoing her best. in all different kinds of situations.

Very natural saying with the last clause; your attempt sounded incomplete !

I have MexicanThus, my nationality is Mexican.

In myOn weekends I like to study, read, draw, take photos, learn languages, go shopping, and knit.

You can find any placething in my city.

Natural usage

In my city, commerce exists in abundance, thuso there are a lot of products andthat I can buy cheap thingsrather cheaply.

One of my favorite things about my city is the architecture; I enjoy walking and watchobserving buildings, especially those with a colonial style or buildingsthose with incredible details that. These details, in particular, makes me thinkruly believe that it is worth living here.

I do not like that it is dangerous livingto live here, people do not follow the rules andor the law.

Some people are crude and discriminate originalagainst indigenous ethnics.

TI believe that there is too much violence in my city, so much so that many people are used to seenow view it as something normal, fincluding myself. For example, the last week I saw a man who was assassinated and people reacted in a very strange way.

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I would not use capitals for the second attempt

I hope you're doing well :)

Today, I'm attempting to do this homework.

(Please correct me if I have made some contractions, sometimes I don't notice them because it's a habit 😅)

I am a young woman with curly hair, skinny, tall. and I am tall and thin.

I have brown eyes, my hair is dark, I also have long eyelash and I have a serious countenance.

I live with my mom.ther.

More formal

My favorite family member is my momther because she is fun, she always makes me laugh and she does her best. to ( do what? )

I haveand am a Mexican nationality.citizen.

InDuring my weekends I like to study, read, draw, take photos, learn languages, go shopping, and knit.

I would break this sentence into 2 sentences

I live in Mexico.

Stylistically I would keep the 3 sentences about Mexico together ( ie live in Mexico, am a Mexican citizen..etc)

My city is scandalous and noisy.

Not sure exactly what you mean by scandalous - overpopulated?

There are beautiful places, but there also dangerous and dirty places.

You can find anyll types of places in my city.

Including restaurants, shops, and pharmacies but most of all my city is surrounded byfull of apartments.

I would make this sentence a continuation of the last one.

I like it that I can make a noise and I have more freedom, and I can wear whatever I want, I c and visit different places.

In my city, commerce exist in abundance, so there are a lot of products and I can buy cheap things.things cheap.

PThe people are funny and generous.

One of my favorite things about my city is the architecture; I enjoy walking and watchinglooking at buildings with a colonial style or buildings with incredible details that makes me think that is worthfeel it is a pleasure to livinge here.

I do not like the fact that it is dangerous living here, and that people do not follow rules and the law.

Some people are crude and discriminate original ethnicsagainst the indigenous people ( or the original inhabitants of Mexico).

There is toso much violence in my city that people are used tonow see it as something normal, f. For example, the last week I saw a man who was assassinated and people reacted in a very strange way.

Suggest you keep your sentences shorter

I hope you're doing well. :)

:)

I'm aiming for American English and I want to be formalformally written American English.

(Please correct me if I made somuse contractions, because sometimes I don't notice them because it's a bad habit. 😅)

I am a young, skinny, tall woman with curly hair, skinny, tall.

I have brown eyes, my hair is dark, I havedark hair, and long eyelash and I havees with a serious countenance.

My favorite family member is my mom because she is fun, s. She always makes me laugh and she does her best.

I have MexicanMy nationality is Mexican.

In myOn weekends I like to study, read, draw, take photos, learn languages, go shopping, and knit.

My city is scandapopulous and noisy.

We don't often describe a city as "scandalous" in American English.

There are beautiful places, but there are also dangerous and dirty places.

You can find any place in my citything in my city including restaurants, shops, and pharmacies but, most of all, my city is surrounded by apartments.

Including restaurants, shops, and pharmacies but most of all my city is surrounded by apartments.

This is an incomplete sentence so I deleted it and appended it to the previous one.

I like that I can make noise and I have more freedom,. I can wear whatever I want, and I can visit different places.

In my city, commerce exists in abundance, so there are a lot of products and I can buy cheapinexpensive things.

"Cheap" is okay but "inexpensive" is more formal.

One of my favorite things about my city is the architecture;: I enjoy walking and watchinglooking at buildings with a colonial style or buildings with incredible details that makes me think that it is worth living here.

I like looking at architecture, too. :)

I do not like that it is dangerous living here, p. People do not follow rules andor the law.

:(

Some people are crude and discriminate originalagainst different ethnicities.

I'm not sure what you're trying to say here so this is my best guess.

There is too much violence in my city that people are used to seeing it as something normal, f. For example, the last week I saw a man who was assassinated and people reacted in a very strange way.

Wow!