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My Parents
Today my parents came to my living house from the small village where I was born. They took lots of food I liked eating when I was young, and I was so touched. They have worked hard all their lifetime, and been frugal with money, and they save money for their children although we have been adults.
Today my parents came to my living house from the small village where I was born.
"my house" already implies the house you live in.
They tookbrought lots of food I liked eating when I was young, and I was so touched.
"they took lots of food" focuses on the food coming out of their house, but for this kind of topic in English, it's more focus on the food arriving at your house, and using "brought" instead of "took" does this.
They have worked hard all their lifetime, and been frugal with money, and they save money for their children although we have beenare (now) adults.
"We have been adults" would imply you are no longer adults.
"although we are now adults" puts a little more focus on the contrast between now and the time when you weren't adults than a simple "although we are adults" would, but both work grammatically.
My Parents
Today my parents came to my living house from the small village where I was born.
They tookbrought lots of food I liked eating when I was young, and I was so touched.
Alternate suggestion:
"They brought lots of food I liked eating when I was young. I was so touched."
They have worked hard all their lifetime, and have been frugal with money, and they've been saveing money for their children although we have beendespite us being adults.
The main thing to remember for this sentence is to keep the tense the same:
"have worked" = past-tense
"have been frugal" = past-tense
"save money" = present-tense X
Also, since you (the children) are still adults, saying "been adults" doesn't make sense (because it implies that you are no-longer adults).
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Great Job! I'm happy your parent got to visit you! I always enjoy seeing my parents too.
Today, my parents came to my living housevisit from the small village where I was born.
They tookcame with a lots of food I liked eatingthat I enjoyed when I was young, and I was so touchpleased.
They have worked hard all their lifetime,ves and been frugal with money, and they save moneysaving for their children, even although we have beenare now adults.
This makes you sound confident and direct.
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Today my parents came to my living house from the small village where I was born. Today, my parents came to Today my parents came to my Today my parents came to my "my house" already implies the house you live in. |
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They took lots of food I liked eating when I was young, and I was so touched. They They Alternate suggestion: "They brought lots of food I liked eating when I was young. I was so touched." They "they took lots of food" focuses on the food coming out of their house, but for this kind of topic in English, it's more focus on the food arriving at your house, and using "brought" instead of "took" does this. |
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They have worked hard all their lifetime, and been frugal with money, and they save money for their children although we have been adults. They have worked hard all their li This makes you sound confident and direct. They have worked hard all their life The main thing to remember for this sentence is to keep the tense the same: "have worked" = past-tense "have been frugal" = past-tense "save money" = present-tense X Also, since you (the children) are still adults, saying "been adults" doesn't make sense (because it implies that you are no-longer adults). They have worked hard all their lifetime, and been frugal with money, and they save money for their children although we "We have been adults" would imply you are no longer adults. "although we are now adults" puts a little more focus on the contrast between now and the time when you weren't adults than a simple "although we are adults" would, but both work grammatically. |
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