Oct. 9, 2023
My opinion on work culture
I agree that our jobs take up too much time in our lives. As a society, we should ensure everyone can find ways to be more independent or work doing things they enjoy. Unfortunately, that would require a radical paradigm shift, starting with proper parenting and schooling to help children develop their strengths and find which activities they enjoy doing. That way, they could find a job suited to their personalities, but instead, we are pushing onto them the societal expectation that they should find any job for money's sake.
As a society, we should ensure everyone can find ways to be more independent or work doingdo things they enjoy.
Or did you mean "...enjoy their work"?
That way, they couldan find a job suited to their personalities, but i. Instead, we are pushing onto them the societal expectation that they should find any job for money's sakejust for the sake of money.
Oct. 10, 2023
Yeah, I meant it in the sense that they should get to work doing what they enjoy when they grow up.
My opinion on work culture
I agree that our jobs take up too much time in our lives.
As a society, we should ensure everyone can find ways to be more independent or work doing things they enjoy.
or " find ways to be more independent and do things they enjoy"
Unfortunately, that would require a radical paradigm shift, starting with proper parenting and schooling to help children develop their strengths and find which activities they enjoy doing.
That way, they could find a job suited to their personalities, but i. Instead, we are pushing onto them the societal expectation that they should find any job for money's sake.
Breaking it up this way is more natural and flows better.
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Great job! I agree with your thought.
Oct. 10, 2023
I appreciate the corrections, thanks.
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Unfortunately, that would require a radical paradigm shift, starting with proper parenting and schooling to help children develop their strengths and find which activities they enjoy doing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That way, they could find a job suited to their personalities, but instead, we are pushing onto them the societal expectation that they should find any job for money's sake. That way, they could find a job suited to their personalities Breaking it up this way is more natural and flows better. That way, they c |
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