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2. And yet again, a bathroom story

TW: an accident and its consequences. teeth.

I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents for holidays. I remember very livingly how it happened. One moment was I laughing uncarefully in the bathtub, and one second later was I covered with blood. I had slipt then fell ahead and slaped my face on the bathtub's floor. My frontteeth were still at their right place but now moving and they did hurt badly.

My grandparents grew up in the countryside. They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reason enough to go to the doctor. They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain strongness. Drinking water was doable. But eating ?! Impossible. I remember how hungry I was this evening. My grandmother had given me a full packet of butter dry cakes (petits Lu). I ate only the corners of each of them. These four little squared millimeters were the only part I could reach with my back teeth without touching the front ones. My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discoverd all the damaged cookies.

What followed faded from my memory. My parents told me that they learned what happened at the phone and forced my grandparents to drive me to the dentist. This was a good idea because I was starting to have fever. The dentist removed just two milkteeth, that eventually did grow up again, and stopped the infection. Nowadays, everything is perfectly fine.

I still have a soft spot for these typical dry cakes, and appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany. However, their corners are tinier as the ones of their french twins. Please, buttercakes ingenieers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !

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2. And yet again, another bathroom story

TW: an accident and its consequences.

teeth.

I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents for my holidays.

I remember very lvivingdly how it happened/what exactly happened.

One moment was I laughing uncarefullyree in the bathtub, and one second later was I covered with blood.

I had sliptped, then fell ahead and slapedforward and hit my face on the bathtub's floorottom of the bathtub.

My front teeth were still at their right place but nowintact but then started to movinge and they did hurthurt really badly.

intact = not damaged

My grandparents grew up in the countryside.

They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reasongood enough reason to go to the doctor.

They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain stroengnessth.

Drinking water was doable.

But eating ?!

Impossible.

I remember how hungry I was thisat evening.

My grandmother had given me a full packet of dry butter dry cakes (petits Lu).

I ate only ate the corners of each of them.

Theose four littlepieces that were only a few squared millimeters were the only parts I could reach with my back teeth without touching the front ones.

My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discoverd all the damaghalf-eaten/nibbled cookies.

What followed had faded from my memory.

My parents told me that they had learned of what happened atover the phone and then had forced my grandparents to drive/take me to the dentist.

Thisat was a good idea because I was starting to have a fever.

The dentist removed just two milk teeth, that eventually did grow upback again, and that stopped the infection.

Nowadays, everything is perfectly fine.

I still have a soft spot for theose typical dry cakes, and really appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany.

However, their corners are tinier as the onesthan that of their french twinsversion.

Please, buttercakes ingenie producers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !

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Uhu

April 24, 2022

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Thank you ! Especially for the description of the accident. I had no idea of how to say it.

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April 24, 2022

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:)

I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents' for the holidays.

I remember very livingdly how it happened.

One moment was I laughing uncarefully in the bathtub without a care in the world, and one second later was I covered with blood.

I had sliptslipped, then fell ahead and slapedforward and hit my face on the surface of the bathtub's /floor of the bathroom.

My front teeth were still at their right place butdid not fall off but were now moving and they did hurt badly.

They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reason enough to go to the doctorthink that it was necessary to pay a visit to the doctor just because of a minor bathtub accident.

They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain stroengnessth.

I remember how hungry I was thisat evening.

It occurred in the past, so you would use "that"

My grandmother had given me a full packet of dry butter dry cakes (petits Lu).

I ate only the corners of each of thembiscuit.

These four littleose tiny pieces measuring four squared millimeters were the only part I could reach with my backs that did not touch my front teeth, without touching the front ones.hile still being big enough to reach my back teeth.

My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discovered all the damagedhalf-eaten cookies.

My parents told me that they learned what happened at thevia a phone call and forced my grandparents to drive me to the dentist.

This was a good idea because I was starting to have a fever.

The dentist removed just two milk teeth, that eventually did grow up againregrew, and stopped the infection.

I still have a soft spot for these typical dry cakes, and I appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany.

However, their corners are tinier as the ones of their french twithan the French versions.

Please, buttercakes ingenie manufacturers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !

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Uhu

April 24, 2022

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Thank you for the amazing correction. You took the time to reformulate the sentences so they sound more natural. Really appreciated.

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applebubble

April 25, 2022

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je vous en prie :)

My oldest memories 2/3


2. And yet again, a bathroom story


2. And yet again, another bathroom story

TW: an accident and its consequences.


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teeth.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents for holidays.


I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents' for the holidays.

I was exactly four and a half years old and was at my grandparents for my holidays.

I remember very livingly how it happened.


I remember very livingdly how it happened.

I remember very lvivingdly how it happened/what exactly happened.

One moment was I laughing uncarefully in the bathtub, and one second later was I covered with blood.


One moment was I laughing uncarefully in the bathtub without a care in the world, and one second later was I covered with blood.

One moment was I laughing uncarefullyree in the bathtub, and one second later was I covered with blood.

I had slipt then fell ahead and slaped my face on the bathtub's floor.


I had sliptslipped, then fell ahead and slapedforward and hit my face on the surface of the bathtub's /floor of the bathroom.

I had sliptped, then fell ahead and slapedforward and hit my face on the bathtub's floorottom of the bathtub.

My frontteeth were still at their right place but now moving and they did hurt badly.


My front teeth were still at their right place butdid not fall off but were now moving and they did hurt badly.

My front teeth were still at their right place but nowintact but then started to movinge and they did hurthurt really badly.

intact = not damaged

My grandparents grew up in the countryside.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reason enough to go to the doctor.


They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reason enough to go to the doctorthink that it was necessary to pay a visit to the doctor just because of a minor bathtub accident.

They did not consider a simple bathtub accident as a reasongood enough reason to go to the doctor.

They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain strongness.


They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain stroengnessth.

They simply told me to drink and eat well to regain stroengnessth.

Drinking water was doable.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But eating ?!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Impossible.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I remember how hungry I was this evening.


I remember how hungry I was thisat evening.

It occurred in the past, so you would use "that"

I remember how hungry I was thisat evening.

My grandmother had given me a full packet of butter dry cakes (petits Lu).


My grandmother had given me a full packet of dry butter dry cakes (petits Lu).

My grandmother had given me a full packet of dry butter dry cakes (petits Lu).

I ate only the corners of each of them.


I ate only the corners of each of thembiscuit.

I ate only ate the corners of each of them.

These four little squared millimeters were the only part I could reach with my back teeth without touching the front ones.


These four littleose tiny pieces measuring four squared millimeters were the only part I could reach with my backs that did not touch my front teeth, without touching the front ones.hile still being big enough to reach my back teeth.

Theose four littlepieces that were only a few squared millimeters were the only parts I could reach with my back teeth without touching the front ones.

My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discoverd all the damaged cookies.


My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discovered all the damagedhalf-eaten cookies.

My grandmother was a bit surprised the next morning, when she discoverd all the damaghalf-eaten/nibbled cookies.

What followed faded from my memory.


What followed had faded from my memory.

My parents told me that they learned what happened at the phone and forced my grandparents to drive me to the dentist.


My parents told me that they learned what happened at thevia a phone call and forced my grandparents to drive me to the dentist.

My parents told me that they had learned of what happened atover the phone and then had forced my grandparents to drive/take me to the dentist.

This was a good idea because I was starting to have fever.


This was a good idea because I was starting to have a fever.

Thisat was a good idea because I was starting to have a fever.

The dentist removed just two milkteeth, that eventually did grow up again, and stopped the infection.


The dentist removed just two milk teeth, that eventually did grow up againregrew, and stopped the infection.

The dentist removed just two milk teeth, that eventually did grow upback again, and that stopped the infection.

Nowadays, everything is perfectly fine.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I still have a soft spot for these typical dry cakes, and appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany.


I still have a soft spot for these typical dry cakes, and I appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany.

I still have a soft spot for theose typical dry cakes, and really appreciate that I can find similar ones in any supermarket here in Germany.

However, their corners are tinier as the ones of their french twins.


However, their corners are tinier as the ones of their french twithan the French versions.

However, their corners are tinier as the onesthan that of their french twinsversion.

Please, buttercakes ingenieers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !


Please, buttercakes ingenie manufacturers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !

Please, buttercakes ingenie producers, make the shape of your biscuits easier to eat for the children whose teeth are hurting !

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