Jan. 30, 2022
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1. Only a child could remember that
One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was time to go to the bath. Instead of waiting for her help, I took myself my clothes off. But I forgot to remove my socks. Before my mother could stop me, I climbed enthusiastically on the stepstool then jumped into the bathtub. Splash! Ahahah!
I have no idea how old I was. Old enough to undress myself and enter alone into the tub. Young enough to forget about the socks and also to make of something that insignificant a long-lasting memory. I think that only a child can think that wet socks are such a big event, that it is worth remembering!
1. Only a child could remember that
One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was time to go to the bathbath time.
In most contexts as an adult, you would say "to take a bath." But in the specific context of talking to children, it's more natural to say "it's bath time." (At least in the US.)
Instead of waiting for her help, I took myself my clothes off myself.
But I forgot to removetake off my socks.
It's possible to say "to remove one's socks" but it's oddly formal. It's more natural to say "to take off one's socks."
Before my mother could stop me, I climbed enthusiastically on the stepstool then jumped into the bathtub.
Splash!
Ahahah!
I have no idea how old I was.
Old enough to undress myself and enter aloneget into the tub all by myself.
You would always say "get in the tub" and never "enter the tub."
I wrote here "all by myself;" adding the "all" adds special emphasis in the way a kid who feels proud might, or an adult looking back on their childhood and voicing the perspective of their younger self. An adult speaking as their adult self would probably just say "by myself" or "on my own."
Young enough to forget about the socks and also to make of something that insignificant a long-lasting memory.
I think that only a child can think that wet socks are such a big event, that it is worth remembering!
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You write English quite well! There were a couple of places where I think a direct translation from French results in oddly formal usage in English, which I've noted. But overall, this is quite good! And a fun story. I think a contributing factor to why you remember this is maybe the physical sensation involved--the feeling of wet socks on your feet. Sensations and smells can help things stick in one's memory. Just a theory. Fun to read--thank you!
Jan. 30, 2022
Yes, your theory is interesting. The sudden feeling was completely unexpected, as my mother would never have put me in the bathtub with my socks on :D. Thank you for the very complete comments and explanations. Also you are completely right, I still tend to translate from French, even if I’m trying not to. I do it ”all by myself”, so I’m proud, ahah
One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was time to go to the bathe.
we don't say "go to bath"
Instead of waiting for her help, I took myself my clothes off myself.
usually "myself" will go at the end of the sentence, there are a few exceptions as it changes the emphasis but the most standard would be at the end
But I forgot to remove my socks.
some people say there's a rule not to start sentences with "But". it's not completely strict but it would probably be better to connect this sentence with the previous
Before my mother could stop me, I climbed enthusiastically on the stepstool thenand jumped into the bathtub.
Old enough to undress myself and enter alone into the tub.
technically not a complete sentence but otherwise fine
Young enough to forget about the socks and also to make of something that insignificant into a long-lasting memory.
I think that only a child can think that wet socks are such a big event, that it is worth remembering!
you don't use commas before relative clauses with "that"
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One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was time to go to the bath. One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was time to we don't say "go to bath" One day, as she did any other day, my mother said to me that it was In most contexts as an adult, you would say "to take a bath." But in the specific context of talking to children, it's more natural to say "it's bath time." (At least in the US.) |
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Instead of waiting for her help, I took myself my clothes off. Instead of waiting for her help, I took usually "myself" will go at the end of the sentence, there are a few exceptions as it changes the emphasis but the most standard would be at the end Instead of waiting for her help, I took |
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But I forgot to remove my socks. But I forgot to remove my socks. some people say there's a rule not to start sentences with "But". it's not completely strict but it would probably be better to connect this sentence with the previous But I forgot to It's possible to say "to remove one's socks" but it's oddly formal. It's more natural to say "to take off one's socks." |
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Old enough to undress myself and enter alone into the tub. Old enough to undress myself and enter alone into the tub. technically not a complete sentence but otherwise fine Old enough to undress myself and You would always say "get in the tub" and never "enter the tub." I wrote here "all by myself;" adding the "all" adds special emphasis in the way a kid who feels proud might, or an adult looking back on their childhood and voicing the perspective of their younger self. An adult speaking as their adult self would probably just say "by myself" or "on my own." |
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I think that only a child can think that wet socks are such a big event, that it is worth remembering! I think that only a child can think that wet socks are such a big event you don't use commas before relative clauses with "that" This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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