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My New Plants

I bought some new plants after moving to my new apartment.

The first one I bought was a blueberry plant. I was strolling on my phone and accidentally noticed that the flowers of blueberries are cute and beautiful. When my blueberry was delivered to me, it had a few fruits and some flowers on the tops of the branches -- that's a long story. I will tell it alone someday.

After planting this blueberry plant, I found it was fun to plant fruit because you could enjoy both the flowers and the fruit. Then I bought some strawberry plants.

I'm very happy when I get up every day and see my fruits become bigger and bigger.

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My New Plants

I bought some new plants after moving to my new apartment.

更简洁地说: The first one I bought was a blueberry plant.

NOTE: You can safely delete the phrase "I bought."
注意:您可以安全地删除短语"I bought."。

I was更平滑: When strolling on my phone and, I accidentally noticed that the flowers of blueberries flowers are cute and beautiful.

COMMENT: Here in Shizuoka City, Japan my wife and I also have a blueberry plant. It blossoms in March and the blueberries ripen in August.

When my blueberry was delivered to me, i也有可能: At first, my blueberry plant had a few fruits and some flowers on the tops of the branches --only a few flowers.

that'OPTION A: How I came to own that plant is a long story.¶
OPTION A: How that plant became mine i
s a long story.

I will tell it alonOPTION A: Perhaps I will tell that story someday.¶
OPTION B: Perhaps I'll share that tal
e someday.

After planting this blueberry plant, I found it was fun to plant fruit because you could enjoy both theits flowers and the fruit.

COMMENT: Indeed. In our garden in Shizuoka, we have blackberries too. I will trying kiwi plants. (Strawberries are possible, but insects love to eat strawberries!)

Then I bought some strawberry plants.

I'm very happy when I get up every day andtoo see my fruits become bigger and bigger.

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My New Plants

I bought some new plants after moving to my new apartment.

The first one I bought was a blueberry {plant | bush}.

We normally call them “bushes,” but “plant” is OK.

I was stcrolling on my phone and accidentallyhappened to noticed that {the flowers of blueberries | blueberry flowers} are cute and beautiful.

When my blueberry was delivered to me, it had {a few berries | some fruits} and some flowers on / at the tops of the branches --

In my version of English, we only use “a few fruits” when we mean “a few kinds of fruit,” but others might use it differently—I don’t know.

that's a long story.

I will tell it alone someday.separately someday. | I will tell it some other time.

Suggestion: But that’s a story for another day.

In your original sentence, “alone” would describe you: you would tell the story by yourself, without assistance from other people.

After planting this blueberry plant, I found it was fun to plant fruit because you could enjoy both the flowers and the fruit.

Then I bought some strawberry plants.

I'm very happy when I get up every day and see my fruits {becomeing | getting} bigger and bigger.

“Become” is not idiomatic to me in this sentence. “Becoming” sounds better, but “getting” is most natural.

My New Plants


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I bought some new plants after moving to my new apartment.


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The first one I bought was a blueberry plant.


The first one I bought was a blueberry {plant | bush}.

We normally call them “bushes,” but “plant” is OK.

更简洁地说: The first one I bought was a blueberry plant.

NOTE: You can safely delete the phrase "I bought." 注意:您可以安全地删除短语"I bought."。

I was strolling on my phone and accidentally noticed that the flowers of blueberries are cute and beautiful.


I was stcrolling on my phone and accidentallyhappened to noticed that {the flowers of blueberries | blueberry flowers} are cute and beautiful.

I was更平滑: When strolling on my phone and, I accidentally noticed that the flowers of blueberries flowers are cute and beautiful.

COMMENT: Here in Shizuoka City, Japan my wife and I also have a blueberry plant. It blossoms in March and the blueberries ripen in August.

When my blueberry was delivered to me, it had a few fruits and some flowers on the tops of the branches --


When my blueberry was delivered to me, it had {a few berries | some fruits} and some flowers on / at the tops of the branches --

In my version of English, we only use “a few fruits” when we mean “a few kinds of fruit,” but others might use it differently—I don’t know.

When my blueberry was delivered to me, i也有可能: At first, my blueberry plant had a few fruits and some flowers on the tops of the branches --only a few flowers.

that's a long story.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

that'OPTION A: How I came to own that plant is a long story.¶
OPTION A: How that plant became mine i
s a long story.

I will tell it alone someday.


I will tell it alone someday.separately someday. | I will tell it some other time.

Suggestion: But that’s a story for another day. In your original sentence, “alone” would describe you: you would tell the story by yourself, without assistance from other people.

I will tell it alonOPTION A: Perhaps I will tell that story someday.¶
OPTION B: Perhaps I'll share that tal
e someday.

After planting this blueberry plant, I found it was fun to plant fruit because you could enjoy both the flowers and the fruit.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After planting this blueberry plant, I found it was fun to plant fruit because you could enjoy both theits flowers and the fruit.

COMMENT: Indeed. In our garden in Shizuoka, we have blackberries too. I will trying kiwi plants. (Strawberries are possible, but insects love to eat strawberries!)

Then I bought some strawberry plants.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Then I bought some strawberry plants.

I'm very happy when I get up every day and see my fruits become bigger and bigger.


I'm very happy when I get up every day and see my fruits {becomeing | getting} bigger and bigger.

“Become” is not idiomatic to me in this sentence. “Becoming” sounds better, but “getting” is most natural.

I'm very happy when I get up every day andtoo see my fruits become bigger and bigger.

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