May 28, 2022
My Memory of Going to Primary School
Back in the 70 s, where I lived, there was no preschool education, so before going to primary school, children just played around.
One summer, I was playing around with some other children. My father told me that it was time for me to go to school.
After doing some very simple preparatory work, I went to school with a few older children.
The school was just in the northward back of my village, but there was a small river between them.
We needed to go out of my village through its southern exit first, and then went by the river around my village to the north to go to school.
When we went by the river, we could see lush reeds that grew from the river, and listened to chirping cicadas.
Along the river, there were many paper mulberry trees. Their red fruit was ripe.
A few minutes later, we arrived at school and a teacher found a place for me. My school time started.
Summer, lush plants around the river, cicada chirping, older pupils, a simple and crude campus. Those are all the things I can still remember about my first time going to school.
My Memory of Going to Primary School
BWhere I lived back in the 70 s, where I lived, there was no preschool education, so before going to primary school, children just played around.
The original is correct, but it reads clearer this way.
One summer, I was playing around with some other children.
My father told me that it was time for me to go to school.
After doing some very simple preparatory work, I went to school with a few older children.
The school was just in the *northward back* of my village, but there was a small river between them.
I'm not sure what you mean here - is it another neighbourhood/area of your village or a different village across the river
We needed to go out of my village through its southern exit first, and then went by the river around my village to the north to go to school.
When we went by the river, we could see lush reeds that grew from the river, and listened to chirping cicadas.
Along the river, there were many paper mulberry trees.
Their red fruit was ripe.
A few minutes later, we arrived at school and a teacher found a place for me.
My school time started.
Summer, lush plants around the river, cicadas chirping, older pupils, a simple and crude campus.
Those are all the things I can still remember about my first time going to school.
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A lovely piece of writing that beautifully describes your earliest days at school!
May 28, 2022
The school was just in the *northward back* of my village, but there was a small river between them.
The school is at the back of the village and the village is to the south of the school. I want to say this in a single sentence, but I am afraid that I am wrong.
May 28, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my journals.
Where I live, back in the 70s, there was no preschool education, so before going to primary school, children just played around.
One summer, I was playing around with some other children. My father told me that it was time for me to go to school.
After doing some very simple preparatory work, I went to school with a few older children. The school was just north behind of my village, but there was a small river between them.
We needed to go out of my village through its southern exit first, and then went by the river around my village to the north to go to school.
When we went by the river, we could see lush reeds that grew from the river, and listened to chirping cicadas.
Along the river, there were many paper mulberry trees. Their red fruit was ripe.
A few minutes later, we arrived at school and a teacher found a place for me. My school time started.
Summer, lush plants around the river, cicadas chirping, older pupils, a simple and crude campus.
Those are all the things I can still remember about my first time going to school.
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May 28, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my entries.
My memory of going to primary school.
Back in the 70s, there was no preschool education where I lived, so before going to primary school, children just played around.
One summer, when I was playing around with some other children, my father told me that it was time for me to go to school.
After doing some very simple preparatory work, I went to school with a few older children.
The school was just north behind of my village, but there was a small river in between.
We needed to leave my village through the south exit first and then go around the river towards the north to get to the school.
When we went near the river, we could see the lush reeds that grew and hear the chirping cicadas.
Along the river, there were many paper mulberry trees. Their fruit was red when ripe.
A few minutes later, we would arrive at school and a teacher would find me a seat. Thus, my time at school began l.
Summer, lush plants around the river, cicadas chirping, older pupils, and a simple, crude campus. Those are all the things I can still remember about my first time going to school.
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Back in the 70 s, where I lived, there was no preschool education, so before going to primary school, children just played around. Back in the 70
The original is correct, but it reads clearer this way. |
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One summer, I was playing around with some other children. One summer, when I was playing around with some other children Would flow better to combine this sentence with the following one. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My father told me that it was time for me to go to school.
Combine with previous sentence. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After doing some very simple preparatory work, I went to school with a few older children. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The school was just in the northward back of my village, but there was a small river between them. The school was just The school was just in the *northward back* of my village, but there was a small river between them. I'm not sure what you mean here - is it another neighbourhood/area of your village or a different village across the river |
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We needed to go out of my village through its southern exit first, and then went by the river around my village to the north to go to school. We needed to Not positive this is exactly what you wanted to say. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When we went by the river, we could see lush reeds that grew from the river, and listened to chirping cicadas. When we went This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Along the river, there were many paper mulberry trees. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Their red fruit was ripe. Their The original is grammatically correct, but kind of breaks the flow. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A few minutes later, we arrived at school and a teacher found a place for me. A few minutes later, we would arrived at school and a teacher To me, "found a place for me" sounds more like, there was no room for you at the school, but the teacher found a place for you, so I changed it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My school time started.
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Summer, lush plants around the river, cicada chirping, older pupils, a simple and crude campus. Summer, lush plants around the river, cicadas chirping, older pupils, and a simple Summer, lush plants around the river, cicadas chirping, older pupils, a simple and crude campus. |
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Those are all the things I can still remember about my first time going to school. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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