Jan. 21, 2022
I consider that one of the most important things in the life are goals, in my particular case sometimes these goals dont look up toward same direction.
My life's goal are: To have a family, to have a succesful profesional carrer, to have some economics stability.
Regard to have a family, I'd love to spend most time possible with my loved ones including parents, wife, children, brothers, to achieve this target it's necessary earn a decent living, in fact for these reason I gratuated as Engineer, First of all because Engeneering is what I most love to doing, It is my passion and secondly because it's a tool that allow me earn a decent living.
And the other hand, I'm currently lving in a place where at the moment its impossible make a real my goals for some reasons such as: I have to work a lot of hour to I be able to save money, It's a place unsafety to my children that I still no have but I hope to have, I don't like the mood in which It living here.
For those reasons, I consider strongly move to a place in which I can achieve my goals and where there will be better condition that I living currently, for this I started the journal tipying that sometimes our goals don't look uo toward same direction, but the best of all, We ever will have the possibility of look for our dream and strugle for them.
I consider that one of the most important things in the life are goals, in my particular case sometimes these goals dont look up towardhead in the same direction.
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A complex idea that you put across well. My suggestion would be to make your sentences shorter. 👍
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I'm not sure what you mean by "don't look up toward same direction." Maybe there is another way of phrasing this?
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These statements should be separate sentences.
I also cleaned up the grammar a bit.
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These statements should also be separated into multiple sentences.
I re-worded the first sentence to sound more natural. And I also edited some spelling and grammar mistakes.
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These statements should also be separated into multiple sentences.
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Well done! I hope you can achieve your goals one day.
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My life's goal are: To have a family, to have a successful professional carreer, to have some economics stability.
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I just made some corrections to simplify it a bit, that way your meaning is a bit more obvious.
AndOn the other hand, I'm currently living in a place where, at the moment, it is impossible to make a real my goals for somea reality, for reasons such as: I have to work a lot of hours to I be able to save money,. It's a place unsafety to my children that I still no have but I hope to have, I don't like the mood in which It living here. would rather live in a place which is safer for the children that I hope to have one day.
I wasn't too sure of the meaning in your second sentence, hopefully my correction makes sense?
For those reasons, I considerwould strongly prefer to be able to move to a place in which I can achieve my goals and where there will be better living condition that I living currently, for thiss for myself, and for my future family. I started the journal tipby saying that sometimes our goals don't look uo towardall point in the same direction, but the bemost of all, We ever will have the possibility of look for our dream and strugle for them.important thing of all, is that we are all capable of dreaming, and in struggling for our dreams, we can make them a reality.
Again, wasn't quite sure of your meaning, but made some suggestions along what I think you were trying to say.
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Well done !
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I consider that one of the most important things in the life are goals, in my particular case sometimes these goals dont look up toward same direction. I consider I I'm not sure what you mean by "don't look up toward same direction." Maybe there is another way of phrasing this? I consider that one of the most important things in the life are goals, in my particular case sometimes these goals dont |
Regard to have a family, I'd love to spend most time possible with my loved ones including parents, wife, children, brothers, to achieve this target it's necessary earn a decent living, in fact for these reason I gratuated as Engineer, First of all because Engeneering is what I most love to doing, It is my passion and secondly because it's a tool that allow me earn a decent living.
I just made some corrections to simplify it a bit, that way your meaning is a bit more obvious.
These statements should be separate sentences. I also cleaned up the grammar a bit.
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And the other hand, I'm currently lving in a place where at the moment its impossible make a real my goals for some reasons such as: I have to work a lot of hour to I be able to save money, It's a place unsafety to my children that I still no have but I hope to have, I don't like the mood in which It living here.
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