I phoned my friend inat the toy factory telling them that I found a good job, t. They were happy and promised to see me when they are off, they were also interested in my job.

I soon found onea special thing around theon a nearby street.

When the day was getting darkevening approaches, some children would carry some porn magazines like Playboy from the US and some other porn brands from Hong Kong and Japan.

They sold at a low price between 25 and 40 yuan each, and the quality of the paper was very good, andbut the price printed in the magazine was much higher, from about from 100 to 200.

Obviously, they were piratecontraband magazines.

Who cared about it, however?No one cared, though.

Two or three adults would usually remote-controlsupervise these children at the same time.

这里用remote control我不庭理解的

When the patrol police would passed by, the children would disappear at once, at bend come back out again afterward.

They also sold some politically forbiddenforbidden political books which revealed some secret news about political celebritieians, politburo leaders and communism.

我很好奇这些被审查的曝光共产主义的秘密的书有什么内容哈哈

The original books must behave been printed in Hong Kong or Tai Wwan, yet these books were piratedcontraband, too.

Their selling price isy usually cost from 20 to 30 yuan, which isith the printed price from 80 to 100 Hong kKong Dollars or some much higher price figure in Tai Wwan Dollars.

About in 2005, when I went back to SZ for business.

应该把这个句子连接到下面那句吧．SZ=深圳么？

My Life in SZ (13) - Officially Banned Books and Magazines

I phoned my friend inat the toy factory telling them that I found a good job, t. They were happy and promised to see me when they awere off, t. They were also interested in my job.

I soon found one special thing around theon a nearby street.

When the day was getting dark, some children would carry some porn magazines like Playboy from the US and some other porn brands from Hong Kong and Japan.

ugh.

They sold them at a low price between 25 and 40 yuan each, t. The quality of the paper was very good, and the price printed ion the magazine was much higher at about from 100 to 200 yuan each.

Obviously, they were pirated magazines.

Who cared about ithat, however?

Two or three adults would usually remote-controsignal these children at the same time.

When the patrol policeolice patrol passed by, the children would disappear at once at bend come back again afterward.

The original books must behave been printed in Hong Kong or Tai Wwan, yet these books were pirated, too.

Their selling price iwas usually from 20 to 30 yuan, which is printed frombut 80 to 100 Hong kKong Ddollars or some much high price figure in Tai Wwan Ddollars was printed on them.

Abrout ind 2005, when I went back to SZ for business, I looked for these children here and there, but couldn't find any of them.

This was a sentence fragment so I added the next line to it.

I looked for these children here and there, but couldn't find any of them.

This kind of illegal business was totally demolished, and I felt sad about it.

I phoncalled my friend in the toy factory telling them that I found a good job, t. They were happy and promised to see me when they are off, as they were also interested in my job.

"Phoned" works, but sounds a bit old-fashioned.

I soon found one special thing around theon a nearby street.

Your sentence is correct, but doesn't sound very natural.

They sold at a low price between 25 and 40 yuan each, t. The quality of the paper was very good, and the price printed in the magazine was much higher from about from 100 to 200.

Obviously, they were pirated magazines.

Who cared about it, however, anyway?

"Who cared..." is a pretty casual phrase, so saying "Who cared, anyway?" rather than "Who cared about it, however?" Sounds more natural.

Two or three adults would usually remote-controlwatch over these children at the same time.

I'm not entirely sure what you mean by "remote-control", this phrase is often used for electronics.

When the patrol police passed by, the children would disappear at once at bend come back again afterward.

Their selling price is usually from 20 to 30 yuan, which is printed from 80 to 100 Hong kong Dollars or some much higher price figure in Tai Wan Dollars.

Abrout ind 2005, when I went back to SZ for businessmy work.

"When I went back..." implies that there was an action (going back to SZ) and then a consequence (for example: "When I went back to SZ, I saw the children"). The action and consequence must be stated within the same sentence.
I changed "About" to "Around" as it usually sounds better to say "around" when talking about dates/times.