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My Life in SZ (11) - My Rent Room

On the second day when I arrived at download SZ. Diana rented a 25 square meters for us as male dormitory where adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continent and expensive place, which would be charged 1500 yuan per month.

Sister Wang has trained us we must show how professional before customers and must keep speaking or chattering without a pause. Therefore, I bought a book to learn some knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings. I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to end with a final product, as for me, it was not only for the future sales but actually I indeed enjoy it.

There were another two family on the same floor, we shared a same corridor. I read the book loudly at my room. My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoy listening to. At that time, people in this young city appreciated any energized and positive life style.

A about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayed next to our room, her boyfriend was much older than her. I highly suspected that the man was her sugar daddy in Hong Kong. She often invited me to have a meal together and asked me buy clothes with her, I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street. She told me that she wanted to open a clothes store at her hometown, I hope she succeeded. Frankly speaking, I am regret why I haven’t developed an intimate relationship with her. A month later, when her Hong Kong old boyfriend saw me eye to eye, they quickly moved. If I were back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would ask her to give a phone number to me. I was shy young man in 1996.

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On the second day when I arrived at downloadtown SZ.

Diana rented us a 25 square meters for us as male dormitory whereroom, which was adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continvenient and expensive place, which would be chargedcost 1500 yuan pera month.

Some guesses on meaning here

Sister Wang has trained us we must show howhow to be professional beforewith customers and mustshould keep speaking or chattering without a pauseing.

Therefore, I bought a book to learn some knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings.

I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to end with a final product, as f. For me, it was not only for the future sales but actually I indeed enjoyenjoy learning about it.

There were another two familyies on the same floor, w. We shared a same corridor.

I read the book loudly atin my room.

My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoyed listening to.

At that time, people in this young city appreciated any energized and positive life style.

An about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayed next to our room, h. Her boyfriend was much older than her.

She often invited me to have a meal together and asked me buy clothes with her,. I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street.

She told me that she wanted to open a clothesing store atin her hometown,. I hope she succeeded.

Frankly speaking, I am regret why I haven’not developeding an intimate relationship with her.

If I werent back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would ask her to give ame her phone number to me.

I was shy young man in 1996.

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Diana rented us a 25 square meters for us as male dormitory whereroom, which was adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continvenient and expensive place, which would be chargedcost 1500 yuan pera month.

Typo of “downtown” and “convenient”.

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Thank you so much for corrections! ☺️

My Life in SZ (11) - My Rented Room

On the second day when I arrived at download SZ.

This is an incomplete sentence.

On the second day after I arrived in downtown SZ, Diana rented a 25 square meters room for us as a male dormitory whereand it was adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continental and expensive place, which would bhave charged 1500 yuan per month.

Sister Wang has trained us we musto show how professional we were before the customers and musto keep speaking or chattering without a pause.

Therefore, I bought a book to learn somacquire knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings.

I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to the end with a final product, as f. For me, it was not only for the future sales but also I actually I indeed enjoyed it.

頭がいいですよね。

There were antwo other two familyies on the same floor, so we shared athe same corridor.

I read the book loudly atin my room.

My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoyed listening to me.

At that time, people in this young city appreciated any energizeding and positive life style.

A about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayedbeautiful girl who was about 25 years old stayed in a room next to our room, hs. Her boyfriend was much older than sher was.

I highly suspected that the man was her sugar daddy in Hong Kong.

She often invited me to have a meal togetwith her and asked me to buy clothes with her,. I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street.

She told me that she wanted to open a clothes store atin her hometown,. I hope she succeeded.

Frankly speaking, I am regret why I havethat I didn’t developed an intimate relationship with her.

A month later, when her old Hong Kong old boyfriend saw me eye to eye, they quickly moved away.

If I werecould go back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would have asked her to give aher phone number to me when I saw them moving away.

This is subjunctive case.

I was a shy young man in 1996.

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面白そうです。上手に書けています!

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Scarlett_Father

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いつもありがとうございます!😊

My Life in SZ (11) - My Rent Room


My Life in SZ (11) - My Rented Room

On the second day when I arrived at download SZ.


On the second day when I arrived at download SZ.

This is an incomplete sentence.

On the second day when I arrived at downloadtown SZ.

Diana rented a 25 square meters for us as male dormitory where adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continent and expensive place, which would be charged 1500 yuan per month.


On the second day after I arrived in downtown SZ, Diana rented a 25 square meters room for us as a male dormitory whereand it was adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continental and expensive place, which would bhave charged 1500 yuan per month.

Diana rented us a 25 square meters for us as male dormitory whereroom, which was adjacent to the highest building in SZ, so it was a continvenient and expensive place, which would be chargedcost 1500 yuan pera month.

Some guesses on meaning here

Sister Wang has trained us we must show how professional before customers and must keep speaking or chattering without a pause.


Sister Wang has trained us we musto show how professional we were before the customers and musto keep speaking or chattering without a pause.

Sister Wang has trained us we must show howhow to be professional beforewith customers and mustshould keep speaking or chattering without a pauseing.

Therefore, I bought a book to learn some knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings.


Therefore, I bought a book to learn somacquire knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings.

Therefore, I bought a book to learn some knowledge about porcelain ware and traditional paintings.

I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to end with a final product, as for me, it was not only for the future sales but actually I indeed enjoy it.


I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to the end with a final product, as f. For me, it was not only for the future sales but also I actually I indeed enjoyed it.

頭がいいですよね。

I even learned the process from the extraction of natural resources to end with a final product, as f. For me, it was not only for the future sales but actually I indeed enjoyenjoy learning about it.

There were another two family on the same floor, we shared a same corridor.


There were antwo other two familyies on the same floor, so we shared athe same corridor.

There were another two familyies on the same floor, w. We shared a same corridor.

I read the book loudly at my room.


I read the book loudly atin my room.

I read the book loudly atin my room.

My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoy listening to.


My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoyed listening to me.

My neighbors could hear my voice, however, they didn’t care it and once said to me that they enjoyed listening to.

At that time, people in this young city appreciated any energized and positive life style.


At that time, people in this young city appreciated any energizeding and positive life style.

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A about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayed next to our room, her boyfriend was much older than her.


A about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayedbeautiful girl who was about 25 years old stayed in a room next to our room, hs. Her boyfriend was much older than sher was.

An about 25 year-olds beautiful girl stayed next to our room, h. Her boyfriend was much older than her.

I highly suspected that the man was her sugar daddy in Hong Kong.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She often invited me to have a meal together and asked me buy clothes with her, I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street.


She often invited me to have a meal togetwith her and asked me to buy clothes with her,. I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street.

She often invited me to have a meal together and asked me buy clothes with her,. I felt comfortable when walking with her on the street.

She told me that she wanted to open a clothes store at her hometown, I hope she succeeded.


She told me that she wanted to open a clothes store atin her hometown,. I hope she succeeded.

She told me that she wanted to open a clothesing store atin her hometown,. I hope she succeeded.

Frankly speaking, I am regret why I haven’t developed an intimate relationship with her.


Frankly speaking, I am regret why I havethat I didn’t developed an intimate relationship with her.

Frankly speaking, I am regret why I haven’not developeding an intimate relationship with her.

A month later, when her Hong Kong old boyfriend saw me eye to eye, they quickly moved.


A month later, when her old Hong Kong old boyfriend saw me eye to eye, they quickly moved away.

If I were back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would ask her to give a phone number to me.


If I werecould go back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would have asked her to give aher phone number to me when I saw them moving away.

This is subjunctive case.

If I werent back into the time, when I saw they were moving, I would ask her to give ame her phone number to me.

I was shy young man in 1996.


I was a shy young man in 1996.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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