Aug. 16, 2020
My laud neighbor!
My neighbor is too laud two or three times a week. She invites her friends and they start talking very laud. Their conversation starts around 12:00 am and continues until 3 am. I usually go to bed at 12 am and at this time she starts talking loudly. She does not only talks but also laughs which can be a reason for a heart attack for anyone. When she laughs, the walls of my room shake. One night, I even shouted from my window and said " Shut up I want to sleep!". They were quiet for about three minutes, and then they started talking and laughing once again.
One night, I really got upset because I was not able to fall asleep, and the next day I had an exam. That night, I decided to complain to the hostel's administration, but I have not done it yet. I think I should knock her door one night, and show my interest in joining her party.
She is from Iran and speaks Persian. At the moment that I am typing this, she is singing a Persian song. She is a crazy girl. Sometimes, I think with myself that she might feel homesick, but it cannot be a reason to disturb others.
My laoud neighbor!
My neighbor is too laoud two or three times a week.
She invites her friends and they start talking very laoudly.
Loud is the adjective (the neighbor is loud) and loudly is the corresponding adverb (they talk loudly).
I think I should knock on her door one night, and show my interest in joining her party.
At the moment thatwhere I am typing this, she is singing a Persian song.
Sometimes, I think withto myself that she might feel homesick, but it cannot be a reason to disturb others.
Aug. 17, 2020
Thanks a lot for your help!
My laoud neighbour!
My neighbour is too laoud, they are like this two or three times a week.
She invites her friends over and they start talking very laoud.ly
Their conversation noise starts around 12:00 am and continues until 3 am.
I usually go to bed at 12 am and at this time she starts talking loudly.
No need to add again about how this is when she talks loudly as it was already mentioned in the previous sentence.
She does not only talks but also laughs which can be a rheason for a heart attackdache for anyone.
This was makes more sense. Normally people say that noise is a “headache” or gives them a headache. Not heart attack
When she laughs, the walls of my room shake.
One night, I even shouted from my window and said " Shut up I want to sleep!".
They were quiet for about three minutes, and then they startcontinued talking and laughing once again.
“Continued” is a better word to use as it highlights that they were already talking and laughing previously.
One night, I really got upset because I was not able to fall asleep, and the next day I had an exam.
That night, I decided tothought about complaining to the hostel's administration, but I have not done it yet.
If you say “I decided to” it gives the impression you done it. So saying “I decided to but I didn’t do it yet” doesn’t make sense.
I think I should knock her door one night, and show my interest in joining her party.
She is from Iran and speaks Persian.
At the moment that I am typing this, sShe is singing a Persian song. whilst I am typing this.
She is a crazy girl.
Sometimes, I think withto myself that she might be feeling homesick, but it cannot bethat’s not a reason to disturb others.
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Very well done! I’d look at focusing on sentence structure! The way you wrote this do make sense but improving sentence structure would help things flow more smoothly.
Aug. 17, 2020
Yes! I done it late at night and forgot to mention that haha, thank you!
Aug. 17, 2020
Got it. I will focus more on my sentence structure next time. Thanks a lot for your help!
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My laud neighbor! My l My l |
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My neighbor is too laud two or three times a week. My neighbour is too l My neighbor is too l |
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She invites her friends and they start talking very laud. She invites her friends over and they start talking very l She invites her friends and they start talking very l Loud is the adjective (the neighbor is loud) and loudly is the corresponding adverb (they talk loudly). |
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I usually go to bed at 12 am and at this time she starts talking loudly. I usually go to bed at 12 am No need to add again about how this is when she talks loudly as it was already mentioned in the previous sentence. |
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She does not only talks but also laughs which can be a reason for a heart attack for anyone. She does not only talk This was makes more sense. Normally people say that noise is a “headache” or gives them a headache. Not heart attack |
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When she laughs, the walls of my room shakes. |
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One night, I even shouted from my window and said " Shut up I want to sleep!". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They were quiet for about three minutes, and then they started talking and laughing once again. They were quiet for about three minutes, and then they “Continued” is a better word to use as it highlights that they were already talking and laughing previously. |
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One night, I really got upset because I was not able to fall asleep, and the next day I had an exam. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That night, I decided to complain to the hostel's administration, but I have not done it yet. That night, I If you say “I decided to” it gives the impression you done it. So saying “I decided to but I didn’t do it yet” doesn’t make sense. |
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I think I should knock her door one night, and show my interest in joining her party. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I think I should knock on her door one night, and show my interest in joining her party. |
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She is from Iran and speaks Persian. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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At the moment that I am typing this, she is singing a Persian song.
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She is a crazy girl. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Sometimes, I think with myself that she might feel homesick, but it cannot be a reason to disturb others. Sometimes, I think Sometimes, I think |
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When she laughs, the walls of my room shake. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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