Sept. 17, 2024
My Late Mother
It has been 7 years since my mother passed away. In a small hospital room, despite the care of the medical staff, she took her last breath. For a while after that, my heart ached when I thought about my mother. Only recently have I been able to remember that day without tears. Time is certainly a good medicine. Lately, I have often remembered the happy moments associated with her. As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist places around the country. After I gave birth to children, she took care of them while I went to work. We spent very happy hours, but on the other hand, we must have had many arguments as well. However, my mind can filter out such negative memories. I would like to remember my mother with warmth.
母が亡くなって7年が経ちました。狭い病室で、医療スタッフの看病もむなしく、母は息を引き取りました。その後しばらくは、母のことを思うと胸が痛みました。最近になってようやく、涙を流さずにあの日のことを思い出せるようになりました。時間は確かに良薬です。最近、母と関わった幸せな瞬間をよく思い出します。子供の頃、母は私をよく国内の様々な観光地に連れて行ってくれました。私が子供を産んだ後は、私が仕事に出ている間、母が子供たちの面倒を見てくれました。私たちはとても幸せな時間を過ごしましたが、その一方で、たくさんの喧嘩もあったに違いありません。しかし、私の心はそのようなネガティブな記憶をフィルタリングすることができます。私は母を温かい気持ちで思い出したいと思います。
My Late Mother
It has been 7 yearsALSO POSSIBLE: Seven years have elapsed since my mother passed away.
(The original is also fine.)
In a small hospital room, despite the care of the medical staff, ALSO POSSIBLE: Despite good medical care in a small hospital room,she took her last breath.
STYLISTIC: Move the phrase "despite the care of the medical staff" to the head of the sentence to emphasize this more.
MORE SUCCINCTLY: For a while after that, my heart ached whenever I thought about my mother.
ALSO POSSIBLE: For a while after that, my heart ached whenever thinking of her.
MY PREFERENCE: Only recently have I been able to remember thather final day without tears.
Time is certainly a good medicine.
Lately, I have often remembered the happy moments associated with her.
ALSO POSSIBLE: As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist placespots around the country.
After I gave birth to children, she took care of them while I went to work.
MORE SUCCINCTLY: We spent many very happy hours, but on the other hand, we must have together, but also had many arguments as well.
However, my mind can filter out such negative memories.
I would like to remember my mother with warmth.
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Glad you can remember the warm memories.
Sept. 26, 2024
添削とコメント、誠にありがとうございます。
My Late Mother
It has been 7 years since my mother passed away.
In a small hospital room, despite the care of the medical staff, she took her last breath.
For a while after that, my heart ached when I thought about my mother.
Only recently have I been able to remember that day without tears.
This sentence is fine.
You might say
"Only recently have I been able to remember that day without coming to tears"
Time is certainly a good medicine.
We can also say that "time is a great healer"
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/time-s-a-great-healer
Lately, I have often remembered the happy moments associatedemories spent with her.
Your sentence is fine grammar, just making it sound more natural.
As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist placedestinations around the country.
"tourist places" doesn't sound quite right but I understood the meaning
After I gave birth to children, she took care of them while I went to work.
We spent vermany happy hours together, but on the other hand, we must have had many arguments as well.
However, my mind canis able to filter out such negative memories.
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This was written very, very well. I would struggle to tell that it wasn't written by a native speaker. Good job.
Sept. 26, 2024
添削とコメント、ありがとうございます。
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As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist places around the country. As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist "tourist places" doesn't sound quite right but I understood the meaning ALSO POSSIBLE: As a child, my mother often took me to various tourist |
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After I gave birth to children, she took care of them while I went to work. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We spent very happy hours, but on the other hand, we must have had many arguments as well. We spent MORE SUCCINCTLY: We spent many very happy hours |
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However, my mind can filter out such negative memories. However, my mind This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I would like to remember my mother with warmth. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After that, my heart ached when I thought about my mother. |
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In a small hospital room, despite the care of the medical staff, she took her last breath. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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For a while after that, my heart ached when I thought about my mother. This sentence has been marked as perfect! MORE SUCCINCTLY: For a while after that, my heart ached whenever I thought about ALSO POSSIBLE: For a while after that, my heart ached whenever thinking of her. |
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Only recently have I been able to remember that day without tears. Only recently have I been able to remember that day without tears. This sentence is fine. You might say "Only recently have I been able to remember that day without coming to tears" MY PREFERENCE: Only recently have I been able to remember |
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Time is certainly a good medicine. Time is certainly a good medicine. We can also say that "time is a great healer" https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/time-s-a-great-healer This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Lately, I have often remembered the happy moments associated with her. Lately, I have often remembered the happy m Your sentence is fine grammar, just making it sound more natural. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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