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My June

Hi! Today I'm want to talk about my June. This month was very busy , because I had exams and graduation. I have finished 9 grade. In my country , June was so cold,so I didn't walk in the city or near home. But I started self development, which has already good outcomes. When you start development, you see your changes and better understand yourself. I hope that I will be better. Also, in June my dad had a birthday,and I'm with my class noted our graduation in big house. In reality, my class wasn't good, they're selfish and they're have many bad habits. I don't like this kind people. I feel better when I am alone at school,because I think I'm a little different. I'm an extrovert,I like talking ,but only with good people. What do you think, my friend?

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About graduation: in Russia, we have 2 graduation, in 9th grade and 11th grade. Because after 9th grade we can go to college, after 11th- to university

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My June

Hi!

I hope that I will be better.

What do you think, my friend?

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Hi!

I feel better when I am alone at school,because I think I'm a little different.

I'm an extrovert,I like talking ,but only with good people.

What do you think, my friend?

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My June


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My June My June

definitely works, but it's stylistic speech. "My June Diary" or just "June" may be more clear.

Hi!


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Today I'm want to talk about my June.


Today I'm want to talk about my June. Today I want to talk about my June.

Today I'm want to talk about my June. Today I want to talk about my June.

Today I'm want to talk about mywhat has happened in June. Today I'm want to talk about what has happened in June.

also keeps the stylistic speech. "what has happened in June" specifies you are referring to action

This month was very busy , because I had exams and graduation.


This month was very busy , because I had exams and I graduationed. This month was very busy , because I had exams and I graduated.

This month was very busy , because I had exams and my graduation. This month was very busy because I had exams and my graduation.

This month was very busy , because I had exams and graduation. This month was very busy , because I had exams and graduation.

Because graduation is an event separate and posterior to your exams, I would recommend to split this sentence up. "This month was so busy with exams! And I got to graduation, which was busy too."

I have finished 9 grade.


I have finished 9ninth grade. I have finished ninth grade.

I have finished 9 grade. I have finished 9 grade.

In the US, 9th grade is a freshman in high school, so like 14-15 years old. If you're in 9th grade, you didn't graduate, you only moved up a grade. Graduation means to leave an institution of learning with a diploma. You receive your high school diploma after 4 years of education.

In my country , June was so cold,so I didn't walk in the city or near home.


In my country , June was so cold, so I didn't walk in the city or near home. In my country June was so cold so I didn't walk in the city or near home.

In my country , June was so cold,so that I didn't even walk in the city or near homein the neighborhood. In my country, June was so cold that I didn't even walk in the city or in the neighborhood.

"so cold that" is the preferred comparative construction "June is so cold, so I..." by putting "June is cold" in the present you are generalizing to every June and you split the meaning of the sentence, which warrants the "so" which is a coordinating conjunction. "June was so cold that..." by putting "June was" in the past you are personalizing this June to the June you personally experience, so you combine the meaning of the sentence. "near home" is technically understandable but a bad style choice. "home" is an affectionate term for the place or area you live in and are attached to, whereas "house" is a physical object in the world. "near" is a preposition of place which prefers a physical object. "near the house" > is a location by a physical place But if you'd like to keep this affectionate undertone, I'd recommend "in the neighborhood" because it's a physical location that also implies an affectionate tie to the area.

But I started self development, which has already food outcomes.


When you start development, you see your changes and better understand yourself.


When you start self development, you see your changes and better understand yourself. When you start self development, you see your changes and better understand yourself.

When you start developself-improvement, you see yourself changes and better understand yourself better. When you start self-improvement, you see yourself change and understand yourself better.

"better" modifies "understand yourself" "you see your changes" < I understand why you phrased it this way. But, when you "own" a change, it's implying that you've made a change to a document or some other thing. "You can see your changes in the version history section of the document". So, instead I would recommend the verb to make your intention clear.

I hope that I will be better.


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I hope that I will be better. I hope that I will be better.

Yes, this 100% works. But stylistically, know that "be better" implies that you are morally a bad person and wish to be a better person. I would recommend "I hope I will become a better version of myself" < this is a phrase you will hear a lot if you watch self-improvement videos on youtube

Also, in June my dad had a birthday,and I'm with my class noted our graduation in big house.


Also, in June my dad had a birthday, and I'm, with my class no, celebrated our graduation in a big house. Also in June my dad had a birthday, and I, with my class, celebrated our graduation in a big house.

Also, in June my dad had a's birthday,and I'm with my class noted our graduation in big house. was in June Also my dad's birthday was in June

"it was my birthday" is more conventional. It's the same construction as "it is raining. It is Monday. It is your turn". I'm sorry, not to be rude but I do not understand this second sentence.

In reality, my class wasn't good, they're selfish and they're have many bad habits.


In realitHonestly, my class wasn't good, they' were selfish and they're havehad many bad habits. Honestly, my class wasn't good, they were selfish and had many bad habits.

In reality, my class wasmates weren't good, they're selfish and they're have many bad habits. In reality, my classmates weren't good, they're selfish and they have many bad habits.

In reality, my class wasmates aren't good people, they're selfish and they're have many bad habits. In reality, my classmates aren't good people, they're selfish and they have many bad habits.

*my class can be ambiguous between your classmates or the academic concept of the class. "Classmates" makes it clear you're talking about poeple "good" is an adjective. It needs a noun. "they're" means "they are", you accidentally put two verbs next to each other "they have many bad habits" is the better form

I don't like this kind people.


I don't like thisose kind of people. I don't like those kind of people.

I don't like thisese kind of people. I don't like these kind of people.

I don't like thisese kinds of people. I don't like these kinds of people.

*kind of people Don't forget the "of" for "kind of" "type of" "group of"

I feel better when I am alone at school,because I think I'm a little different.


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I feel better when I am alone at school, because I think I'm a little different. I feel better when I am alone at school, because I think I'm a little different.

I'm an extrovert,I like talking ,but only with good people.


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I'm an extrovert, I like talking , but only with good people. I'm an extrovert, I like talking, but only with good people.

What do you think, my friend?


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But I started self development, which has already good outcomes.


But I did started self development, which has already had some good outcomes. But I did start self development, which has already had some good outcomes.

Or "I started self development...". The "But" means a contrast to previous sentense, so "But I did..." contrasts the "I didn't walk"

But I started self development, which has already-improvement, and I've already begun to see good outcomes. But I started self-improvement, and I've already begun to see good outcomes.

"self-improvement" is the conventional term for this idea "already has good outcomes" < already shouldn't modify "good", it should modify "has good outcomes", hence why I put it at the beginning But, an "outcome" is "That which is produced or occurs as a result of an event or process" Self-improvement doesn't not produce anything on its own and requires a person to perform a process. Outcome is the RESULT, but self-improvement is a continuous process. "I've started a self-improvement regime, which is already showing some good results" is another alternative that avoids "outcomes"

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