Aug. 4, 2025
My injury experience
My right thumb was injured by the knif when I peeled potatoes. The blood flowed to other fingers and I felt it was warm. I put my right hand in the pool in order for blood to flow away with water.And I was stupide that I let the wound came into contact with water. After that, I used a table towel to wrap my hand under the wood to prevent blood from flowing to the ground. Walked out of the kitchen, I changed the table towel, used cleaning paper to prevent blood. Gradually, I felt dizzy . I was scared by the situation, and I sat down the soft to send a message to my boyfriend and told him I was injured. At the same time, I started sweating, felt dizzier, had blurred vision, and my togue was numb. I realized I could faint at any time, so I send message to my boyfriend urging him came back soon. I just lay on the table waiting for my boyfriend came back.About ten miniutes later, he arrived home and asked how I felt was,I told him all my feelings ,he gave me a candy to eat,and wiped my sweat with a wet towel, I gradually felt better, I thought I might have low blood sugar because I lost so much blood.This is the worst injury I've had in years.
After I ate a candy and felt better, I put my head on the table and half raised my right hand, my boyfriend started to dealt with my wood,and I really appreciated him. I couldn't imagine how I should deal with this situation without him. I haven't had any experiences. When he dealt with my wood , I couldn't even be afraid of seeing my exposed wood. All I could feel was the pain from the wood. Anyway, this was an unhappy experience.
My injury experience
My right thumb was injured by the knife when I peeled potatoes.
The blood flowed to the/my other fingers and I felt it was warm.
You need a determiner or a possessive article here to indicate which fingers.
I put my right hand in the pool, in order for blood to flow away with water.And It was stupide that I let the wound caome into contact with water.
We don't usually start sentence with 'and'. Take care also with came vs come
After that, I used a table towel to wrap my hand under the woound to prevent blood from flowing to the ground.
wood = material a table is made out of, that comes from a tree
wound = injury
WI walked out of the kitchen, I changed the table towel, and used cleaning paper to prevent blood.
When you have a list of actions, you need 'and' after the comma and before the final item.
The phrasing of 'to prevent blood' is also a little awkward in English. To prevent more blood flowing out? To prevent blood touching something?
Gradually, I felt dizzy .
I was scared by the situation, and I sat down on the softa to send a message to my boyfriend and told him I was injured.
At the same time, I started sweating, felt dizzier, had blurred vision, and my tongue was numb.
I realized I could faint at any time, so I sendt a message to my boyfriend urging him caome back soon.
I just lay on the table waiting for my boyfriend cato come back. About ten miniutes later, he arrived home and asked how I felt. was,I told him all my feelings ,symptoms and he gave me a candy to eat, and wiped my sweat with a wet towel,. I gradually felt better,. I thought I might have low blood sugar because I lost so much blood.This is the worst injury I've had in years.
After I ate a candy and felt better, I put my head on the table and half raised my right hand, m. My boyfriend started to dealt with my wood,aund. I really appreciated him doing that for me.
I couldn't imagine how I shwould deal with this situation without him.
I haven't had any experiences.
This sentence does not make a lot of sense.
When he dealt with my wood , I couldn't even beinjury, I was too afraid of seeing my exposed woound.
All I could feel was the pain from the woound.
Feedback
Great text! You have a lot of great vocabulary, and have written an interesting text. Take care with the tense of specific sentences and your spellings of words. Good job!
Aug. 4, 2025
Thank you very much.
|
My injury experience This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
Walked out of the kitchen, I changed the table towel, used cleaning paper to prevent blood.
When you have a list of actions, you need 'and' after the comma and before the final item. The phrasing of 'to prevent blood' is also a little awkward in English. To prevent more blood flowing out? To prevent blood touching something? |
|
Gradually, I felt dizzy . This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
I was scared by the situation, and I sat down the soft to send a message to my boyfriend and told him I was injured. I was scared by the situation, and I sat down on the sof |
|
At the same time, I started sweating, felt dizzier, had blurred vision, and my togue was numb. At the same time, I started sweating, felt dizzier, had blurred vision, and my tongue was numb. |
|
I realized I could faint at any time, so I send message to my boyfriend urging him came back soon. I realized I could faint at any time, so I sen |
|
I just lay on the table waiting for my boyfriend came back.About ten miniutes later, he arrived home and asked how I felt was,I told him all my feelings ,he gave me a candy to eat,and wiped my sweat with a wet towel, I gradually felt better, I thought I might have low blood sugar because I lost so much blood.This is the worst injury I've had in years. I just lay on the table waiting for my boyfriend |
|
After I ate a candy and felt better, I put my head on the table and half raised my right hand, my boyfriend started to dealt with my wood,and I really appreciated him. After I ate a candy and felt better, I put my head on the table and half raised my right hand |
|
I couldn't imagine how I should deal with this situation without him. I couldn't imagine how I |
|
I haven't had any experiences. I haven't had any experiences. This sentence does not make a lot of sense. |
|
When he dealt with my wood , I couldn't even be afraid of seeing my exposed wood. When he dealt with my |
|
My right thumb was injured by the knif when I peeled potatoes. My right thumb was injured by the knife when I peeled potatoes. |
|
The blood flowed to other fingers and I felt it was warm. The blood flowed to the/my other fingers and I felt it was warm. You need a determiner or a possessive article here to indicate which fingers. |
|
I put my right hand in the pool in order for blood to flow away with water.And I was stupide that I let the wound came into contact with water. I put my right hand in the pool, in order for blood to flow away with water. We don't usually start sentence with 'and'. Take care also with came vs come |
|
After that, I used a table towel to wrap my hand under the wood to prevent blood from flowing to the ground. After that, I used a table towel to wrap my hand under the wo wood = material a table is made out of, that comes from a tree wound = injury |
|
All I could feel was the pain from the wood. All I could feel was the pain from the wo |
|
Anyway, this was an unhappy experience. |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium