Oct. 30, 2020
My home
I live in Salvador, Bahia, Brasil. I love my city, she is beautiful, happy, warm (or hot?) -calorosa, Smell history. Salvador is the first capital of Brazil. She had an important city during the navigations because the sea current brings the ships to her and she has a huge bay that helps Portugal to defend your ships.
Salvador always receives several different people, forced or not, maybe because that, until today, Salvador is friendly with your tourists.
In this town, you can visit your historical places and churches. You can eat your food, some of that doesn't have in all country, like acarajé e vatapá, you only can eat this in Salvador. She has music: the axé, capoeira. You can visit your beaches, I recommend Barra and your lighthouse. The city is alive during the night so you can party all night. Salvador has the biggest Carnaval de Rua of the world.
This city is amazing. You must know.
My hHome
I live in Salvador, which is in Bahia, Brasil.
I love my city, she iit's beautiful, happy, and warm (or hot?) -calorosa, Smellwith a rich history.
I don't know what you meant be "Smell" so I tried to go from context.
Salvador iwas the first capital of Brazil.
She hadIt was an important city during thefor navigational purposes because the sea current brings the ships to here and sheit has a huge bay that helpsed Portugal to defend your ships.
Salvador halways receivesd several different groups of people, forced or not, and maybe because of that, untileven today, Salvador is friendly with your tourists.
In this town, you can visit your historical places and churches.
You can eat yourdifferent foods, some of that doesn't havwhich isn't found elsewhere in allthe country, like acarajé e vatapá, you only can eat thiswhich you can only eat in Salvador.
She haThere is music: the axé, capoeira.
You can visit your beaches, I recommend Barra and yourits lighthouse.
The city is alive during the night, so you can party all night.
Salvador has the biggest Carnaval de Rua of the world.
This city is amazing.
You must know.
I agree with the previous correction in that this fragment would go much better with the previous sentence.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! I noticed that you seemed to refer to the city as "she" a lot and that you used the possessive "your" a lot. While some things are referred to as "she" in English, boats and animales for example, cities aren't often included in this category, unless maybe it's poetry or symbolism. You also used "your" in many places where you would normally put "the". I hoped that all this helps!
My home
I live in Salvador, Bahia, Brasil.
I love my city, sheit is beautiful, happy, warm (or hot?) -calorosa, Smell. It also has a rich history.
Between warm and hot, both mean calorosa. However, warm is more of a positive quality, whereas hot is hotter, and it's a negative quality. Warm is a pleasant heat, and hot is a suffocating, insufferable heat. If you used hot, you'd probably want to say "beautiful and happy, but hot".
Salvador iwas the first capital of Brazil.
Unless Salvador still is the capital (I'm sorry, I don't know anything about geography), in which case it would be better to just say "Salvador is the capital of Brazil"
She hadIt was an important city during the navigations because the sea current brings the ships to here, and sheit has a huge bay that helps Portugal to defend your ships.
Salvador always receives several different people, forcedwho were forced to move or not, m. Maybe because of that, until today, Salvador ishas been friendly with your tourists.
In this town, you can visit yourmany historical places and churches.
You can eat yourmany different foods, some of that doesn't havewhich are not in all countryies, like acarajé e vatapá, which you only can eat this in Salvador.
She has musicThere are many types of music here: the axé, capoeira, ect.
I'm assuming that you have a list of types of music at the end? Ect. is simply something you can add to the end of a list of examples.
You can visit yourthe beaches, I recommend Barra and yourthe lighthouse.
The city is alive during the night, so you can party all night.
Salvador has the biggest Carnaval de Rua of the world.
This city is amazing.!
Technically, what you wrote is grammatically correct, but it would be strange to end with a period. It would be as if you said "This city is amazing" in an uncaring, unexcited monotone.
You must know.On second thought, it might be best to combine this with the previous sentence. "This city is amazing, you must know!" Or, perhaps, "you must come see for yourself!"
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This is really good! Overall, it's generally understandable. You probably don't want to refer to a city as "she", although this is common with countries, it doesn't sound right with cities. Other then that, this is pretty good!
Oct. 30, 2020
Salvador iwas the first capital of Brazil.
was the capital. My mistake
Oct. 30, 2020
You can eat yourmany different foods, some of that doesn't havewhich are not in all countryies, like acarajé e vatapá, which you only can eat this in Salvador.
I don't know when i have to use which.
Oct. 30, 2020
Thank you Carita
Oct. 30, 2020
I don't know when i have to use which.
Hmm... To be honest, this trips me up as well! I think which is sometimes used in absence of a pronoun or other connector? For example, you could end the sentence and say "You can only eat this in Salvador," but if you want to connect it to the previous sentence, then you must use "which" in order to connect it to the "many different foods." That's also why it takes the place of "this", perhaps, as "this" connects the phrase as a different sentence to the original idea. If you wanted to seperate the first phrase into a new sentence, you would have to say "These are not in all countries." So, I guess "which" in this case is a connector that takes the place of "these" or "this" when you are in the same sentence as the original subject? I'm sorry I can't explain this better, that is a really good question!
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I live in Salvador, Bahia, Brasil. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I live in Salvador |
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I love my city, she is beautiful, happy, warm (or hot?) -calorosa, Smell history. I love my city, Between warm and hot, both mean calorosa. However, warm is more of a positive quality, whereas hot is hotter, and it's a negative quality. Warm is a pleasant heat, and hot is a suffocating, insufferable heat. If you used hot, you'd probably want to say "beautiful and happy, but hot". I love my city, I don't know what you meant be "Smell" so I tried to go from context. |
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Salvador is the first capital of Brazil. Salvador Unless Salvador still is the capital (I'm sorry, I don't know anything about geography), in which case it would be better to just say "Salvador is the capital of Brazil" Salvador |
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She had an important city during the navigations because the sea current brings the ships to her and she has a huge bay that helps Portugal to defend your ships.
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Salvador always receives several different people, forced or not, maybe because that, until today, Salvador is friendly with your tourists. Salvador always receives several different people, Salvador ha |
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In this town, you can visit your historical places and churches. In this town, you can visit In this town, you can visit |
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You can eat your food, some of that doesn't have in all country, like acarajé e vatapá, you only can eat this in Salvador. You can eat You can eat |
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She has music: the axé, capoeira.
I'm assuming that you have a list of types of music at the end? Ect. is simply something you can add to the end of a list of examples.
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You can visit your beaches, I recommend Barra and your lighthouse. You can visit You can visit |
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The city is alive during the night so you can party all night. The city is alive during the night, so you can party all night. The city is alive during the night, so you can party all night. |
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Salvador has the biggest Carnaval de Rua of the world. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This city is amazing. This city is amazing Technically, what you wrote is grammatically correct, but it would be strange to end with a period. It would be as if you said "This city is amazing" in an uncaring, unexcited monotone. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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You must know.
You must know. I agree with the previous correction in that this fragment would go much better with the previous sentence. |
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