My hobbies

I started this hobby when I lived far away from my parents and I had to cook every day.

At the beginning, it was quite difficult for me to cook thea good meal, and I spent much time while cooking.

By theOver time, I geot used to cooking.

I learned how to cook properly, and it becoames one of my most favorite pastime I loves.

After work, the first thing I think about is what I should cook for dinner.

I can imagine all the ingredients in my mind at that timethen.

Cooking really helps me relieve stress and to relax.

I always enjoy the moments when I focused on cooking and; it helps to clear my mind.

The most interesting thing to me is to cook for the others and see them enjoy my food.

It makes me feel happy same as, as if I help people dowith something.

this is worded weirdly, i'm ngl

I'm grateful for the time that I lived alone because I canit helped me to become be a good cook and to realized the thing I'm really intoat I enjoy cooking.

I can spend hours to cleaning up every thing around me.

My friends told me that I'm obsessed with cleaning, and it's completely true for me.

I can't stand if Ito see my room or my, house, or especially mythe kitchen is, messy.

I feel like I get out of my burden ona burden has lifted off my shoulders after I've tidyied up every thing.

iIt's a great way to feel peaceful and to light up my soul.

My hHobbies

AtIn the beginning, it was quite difficult for me to cook thea good meal and I spent mucha lot of time while cooking.

By theOver time, I geot used to cooking.

"Over time" is a good phrase here as it marks the passage of time as if someone is learning something.

"Overtime" as one word is working past your scheduled hours. If you work 45 hours in a week, you might get 5 hours overtime.

I learned how to cook properly, and it becoames my the most favorite pastime that I love.

After work, the first thing I do is think what I should cook for dinner.

I can imagine all ingredients in my mind at that time.

I would drop "at that time" as you've told us in the previous sentence it's after work and we're following along with you.

The most interestrewarding thing is toI do is cook for the others and see them enjoy my food.

It makes me feel happy same as, like when I help people do something.

I'm grateful for the time that I lived alone because I can becoame bea good cook and realized the thing I'm really into is cooking.

And tThe second hobby I love is cleaning.

I can spend hours to cleaning up every thing around me.

My friends told me that I'm obsessed with cleaning and it's completely true for me.

I can't stand it if I see my room or my house, or especially my kitchen is, messy.

I feel like I get out of my burden onthe burden lifted from my shoulders after I tidy up every thing.

iIt's a great way to feel peaceful and lighten up my soul.

At the beginning, it was quite difficult for me to cook thea good meal and I spent much time whila lot of time cooking.

indefinite vs definite article- you don't want to use THE because it means that there is ONE good meal you want to cook. A good meal means that you were trying to cook ANY good meal, not just one specific one.

To describe time we use 'a lot'.

WHILE cooking means that during cooking you were also doing something else.
ie 'WHILE cooking, I called my mom'.

By theOver time, I gethave gotten used to cooking.

If you want to express that time has passed, you could say OVER or THROUGH time.

You need to use present perfect tense. Uses auxiliary verb "have" and the past participle "gotten" and is used to describe an action that has been completed in the past, with results that are still relevant to the present.

I learned how to cook properly, and it has becomes my most favorite pastime that I love.

Becomes= currently happening. Just started.
It HAS BECOME - present perfect tense again. Something that happened in the past but is still relevant today.

You don't need 'most' when talking about your favorite thing. It is just 'my favorite'.

Need preposition THAT before 'I love'.

After work, the first thing I think is what I should cook for dinner.

VERB needed.

Subject (the first thing I think), Object (what I should cook for dinner) NEEDS VERB (is)

I can imagine all of the ingredients in my mind at that time.

Needs preposition before ingredients.

The most interesting thing is to cooking for the others and seeing them enjoy my food.

Need continuous tense for the verbs.

You don't need THE before OTHERS here, as this means that there is a SET GROUP of people you are cooking for. I think you just mean other people in general.

It makes me feel happy same, as I help people do somethingget to help others.

You are not 'helping' people do something in this sense, but you are HELPING them by giving them food.

I'm grateful for the time that I lived alone because I can becoame be good cook and realized the thing I'm really into cooking.

You are grateful FOR something.
ie I am grateful FOR you.

You BECAME a good cook, you are a good cook NOW therefore you use past tense.

I can spend hours to cleaning up every thing around me.

present continuous tense.

everything is one word.

My friends told me that I'm obsessed with cleaning and it's completely true for me.

I can't stand if I see my room or my house, especially my kitchen isbeing messy.

present perfect

I feel like I get out of mya burden on my shoulders after I tidy up every thing.

a burden is something that you carry or have, not get out of.