May 18, 2025
My First Workplace
In late July 1985, I graduated from a technical secondary school and was assigned a job by the government in a county 200 kilometers away from my hometown.
At the beginning of August, I took a work dispatch certificate jointly issued by the Agricultural Commission and the Personnel Department of Anhui Province to go to the county.
There was no direct transport to the county. I needed to take a bus to Bengbu, then take a train to Jiashan (now Mingguang City).
The county seat of Jiashan was situated on a small hill (the territory of Jiashan County is a hilly area).
When I got out of Jiashan Railway Station, I walked northwest to the center of the town.
At an intersection in the downtown, I arrived at the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of the county. I was supposed to report to the bureau and let them assign a work unit for me.
They told me that they had decided to assign me to their subordinate agricultural machinery training center to work.
After I left the bureau and walked onto the street, I met a middle-aged man and asked him where the training center was located. He didn’t answer me and just said, "Follow me."
I walked with him northwest up a hill until we arrived at the training center, and it turned out he was the director of the training center.
Well, that is all about how I went to my first workplace.
The county seat of Jiashan was situated on a small hill (the territory of Jiashan County is a hilly area).
If you describe physical features of a settlement, it's understood that you're referring to its location, so I think it's more natural to omit "the territory of" here.
At an intersection in the downtown, I arrived at the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of the county.
"Downtown" can be used as a sort of direction, and is more naturally used that way rather than "in the downtown", though "in the downtown" isn't wrong either.
They told me that they had decided to assign me to their subordinate agricultural machinery training center to work.
"subordinate" is mostly used for people. You could use "subsidiary" when a business owns another business. But in this case, the most natural way to describe a training center owned by a bureau would be as a "facility". Since "facility" and "center" are kind of redundant then, it sounds better to just omit entirely, I think.
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This is very good, the corrections I made are mostly about small details of style.
May 18, 2025
Thank you very much.
I was supposed to report to the bureau and lethave them assign a work unit for me.
They told me that they had decided to assigned me to their subordinate agricultural machinery training center to work.
I walked with him northwest up a hill with him until we arrived at the training center, and it turned out he was the director of the training center.
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Shorter sentences would be better
May 18, 2025
Thank you very much.
I walked with him northwest up/ on top of a hill until we arrived at the training center, and it turned out he was the director of the training center.
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Great work! I don't see any mistakes!
May 18, 2025
Thank you very much.
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My First Workplace |
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In late July 1985, I graduated from a technical secondary school and was assigned a job by the government in a county 200 kilometers away from my hometown. |
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There was no direct transport to the county. |
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At the beginning of August, I took a work dispatch certificate jointly issued by the Agricultural Commission and the Personnel Department of Anhui Province to go to the county. |
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I needed to take a bus to Bengbu, then take a train to Jiashan (now Mingguang City). |
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The county seat of Jiashan was situated on a small hill (the territory of Jiashan County is a hilly area). The county seat of Jiashan was situated on a small hill ( If you describe physical features of a settlement, it's understood that you're referring to its location, so I think it's more natural to omit "the territory of" here. |
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When I got out of Jiashan Railway Station, I walked northwest to the center of the town. |
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At an intersection in the downtown, I arrived at the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of the county. At an intersection "Downtown" can be used as a sort of direction, and is more naturally used that way rather than "in the downtown", though "in the downtown" isn't wrong either. |
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He didn’t answer me and just said, "Follow me." |
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I was supposed to report to the bureau and let them assign a work unit for me. I was supposed to report to the bureau and |
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They told me that they had decided to assign me to their subordinate agricultural machinery training center to work. They They told me that they had decided to assign me to their "subordinate" is mostly used for people. You could use "subsidiary" when a business owns another business. But in this case, the most natural way to describe a training center owned by a bureau would be as a "facility". Since "facility" and "center" are kind of redundant then, it sounds better to just omit entirely, I think. |
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After I left the bureau and walked onto the street, I met a middle-aged man and asked him where the training center was located. |
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I walked with him northwest up a hill until we arrived at the training center, and it turned out he was the director of the training center. I walked with him northwest up/ on top of a hill until we arrived at the training center, and it turned out he was the director of the training center. I walked |
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Well, that is all about how I went to my first workplace. |
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