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My First Work Unit

In late August, 1985, I held a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource department of Anhui province, and took a long distance bus from the city I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at.

Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not even. I went to the agricultural machinery bureau of the county first to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class. My role was as a trainer.

An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and let me go to the training class.

I left the bureau going to my first work unit. On my way, I asked a man how I could get there. He said, just go with me. It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit.

The work unit was also on the hill, which was very simple, and only had a few rooms. The rooms are connected in a row, from east to west. There were no inclosing walls for the office.

I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school. We all majored in agricultural machinery management.

I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town.

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My First Work Unit

In late August, 1985, I heldcarrying with me a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource ds Department of Anhui pProvince, andI took a long distance bus from the city where I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to the Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at / was located.

I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

The Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not evensloped.

"Seat" in "Jiashan Count seat" is descriptive (not part of a proper name), so "the" is needed.

I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

I went to the(first) to the (county) agricultural machinery bureau (of the county first) to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class.

My role was as a trainer.

An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and lesent me go to the training class.

"Let me go" implies that you wanted to go, and the officer (finally) gave you permission to go. This isn't the same as 让我去 in Chinese.

"Sent me to" means the officer told you to go there. I assume that this is what you mean.

I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.

On my way, I asked a man how I could get there.

He said, j"Just go with me."

It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit.

The work unit, which was also on the hill, which was very simple,(,) and only had a few rooms.

Your original wording meant that the hill was very simple and had only a few rooms.

The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.

There were no inclosing walls for the officenclosing walls for the office grounds. / The office grounds were not enclosed in surrounding walls. / The office grounds lacked the enclosing walls that would have typically surrounded a government office like this one.

Your original wording sounds like the building had no exterior walls---it was just a roof with some supporting poles, and wind and rain could blow into it.

I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school.

We (had) all majored in agricultural machinery management.

Since you were no longer studying (had already graduated), it's better to say you "had majored."

I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my [home town].

By "home town" do you mean the village/town where you grew up? If so, you could add "back": ...was transferred back to my home town.

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Nov. 25, 2022

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In late August, 1985, I heldcarrying with me a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource ds Department of Anhui pProvince, andI took a long distance bus from the city where I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to the Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at / was located.

当时的中专毕业生会得到一张纸质的派遣证,上面的大致内容是:某某单位,经研究决定,某某同志前往你单位工作,请办理相关手续。然后是落款和公章。派遣证是省人事厅和省农委联合下发的。去单位报到时必须带着这个,不然没人会接纳你。你可以把它放在兜里,包里,或文件夹里,总之你必须带着它去你的新单位报到,并把它交给你工作单位的主管部门,然后他们才能帮你办理入职手续。

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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The Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not evensloped.

你查的应该是浙江省的嘉善县,因为它下辖的有魏塘街道办事处。我说的是嘉山县,但这个县在九十年代中期已经改为明光市了。如果你查明光市你就能查到了。当时县政府驻地就是明光镇。中国的县城有的有自己的名字,有的就是以县的名字命名。嘉山县地处丘陵地带,县城座落在一个小山坡上,北高南低,所以我说它的路是不平的。

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and lesent me go to the training class.

这个很有意思,以前我不知道let me go 的确切含义。应该是sent me to. 局人事科的工作人员接到我的派遣证后给我开了行政介绍信,让我去我将要工作的单位报到。

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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The work unit, which was also on the hill, which was very simple,(,) and only had a few rooms.

这个我忽略了。我实际想说的是办公室,不是指小山坡。谢谢你的提醒。

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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There were no inclosing walls for the officenclosing walls for the office grounds. / The office grounds were not enclosed in surrounding walls. / The office grounds lacked the enclosing walls that would have typically surrounded a government office like this one.

在中国,一个工作单位通常有一个大院子,院子的四周是围墙,围墙会有一个可以进出的大门。我这个工作单位只有东西一排平房及南北一排平房,没有围墙。任何人都可以走到我们办公室的门口。谢谢你的提醒,我看看如何修改它。

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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We (had) all majored in agricultural machinery management.

谢谢,你说得对。

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Nov. 25, 2022

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I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my [home town].

这个问题很有意思,至今我还没有明白如何表达。我出生在农村的一个小村庄,村庄属于宫集镇,宫集镇属于太和县,太和县属于阜阳市。我现在在阜阳市工作生活。那么我可以说生我的村庄是我的home village, 宫集是我的home town, 太和是我的home county, 阜阳是我的home city 吗?

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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谢谢你的修改。为了回复你的问题,我不得不使用我的母语,因为目前我还没有能力用英文说清楚。如果有些中文你看不明白,你可以问我。但我觉得你应该都能看懂的,因为你的中文很好。

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JoeTofu

Nov. 26, 2022

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这个问题很有意思,至今我还没有明白如何表达。我出生在农村的一个小村庄,村庄属于宫集镇,宫集镇属于太和县,太和县属于阜阳市。我现在在阜阳市工作生活。那么我可以说生我的村庄是我的home village, 宫集是我的home town, 太和是我的home county, 阜阳是我的home city 吗?

The terms “home village,” “home town,” “home county” and “home city” can all be used in the way you described, but their meanings are also flexible in that they can refer to “the place where I grew up” or “the place which I now consider my ‘home.’” Based on your explanation, I would keep “home town.”

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JoeTofu

Nov. 26, 2022

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谢谢你的修改。为了回复你的问题,我不得不使用我的母语,因为目前我还没有能力用英文说清楚。如果有些中文你看不明白,你可以问我。但我觉得你应该都能看懂的,因为你的中文很好。

I was able to understand everything you wrote and learned a lot from it. Thanks for explaining in such detail.

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Jack

Nov. 27, 2022

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谢谢兄弟。非常感谢你的修改,这对我帮助特别大。你有任何中文方面的问题只管问我,我会给你详尽的解释。再次感谢!

My First Work Unit

I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.

He said, "just go with me."

The work unit was also (on the hill/in the same building), which was very simple, and only had a few rooms.

Or maybe, "The work unit was in a building on the same hill, which was simple..."

The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.

There were no ienclosing walls for the office.

I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school.

We all majored in agricultural machinery management.

I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town.

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Nov. 25, 2022

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The work unit was also (on the hill/in the same building), which was very simple, and only had a few rooms.

The two work units are not at the same building. They are just on the same hillside and separate about 1.5 kilometers.

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Jack

Nov. 25, 2022

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Thank you very much.

Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not even.


The Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not evensloped.

"Seat" in "Jiashan Count seat" is descriptive (not part of a proper name), so "the" is needed. I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

My role was as a trainer.


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My First Work Unit


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In late August, 1985, I held a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource department of Anhui province, and took a long distance bus from the city I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at.


In late August, 1985, I heldcarrying with me a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource ds Department of Anhui pProvince, andI took a long distance bus from the city where I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to the Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at / was located.

I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

I went to the agricultural machinery bureau of the county first to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class.


I went to the(first) to the (county) agricultural machinery bureau (of the county first) to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class.

An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and let me go to the training class.


An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and lesent me go to the training class.

"Let me go" implies that you wanted to go, and the officer (finally) gave you permission to go. This isn't the same as 让我去 in Chinese. "Sent me to" means the officer told you to go there. I assume that this is what you mean.

I left the bureau going to my first work unit.


I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.

I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.

On my way, I asked a man how I could get there.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

He said, just go with me.


He said, "just go with me."

He said, j"Just go with me."

It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The work unit was also on the hill, which was very simple, and only had a few rooms.


The work unit was also (on the hill/in the same building), which was very simple, and only had a few rooms.

Or maybe, "The work unit was in a building on the same hill, which was simple..."

The work unit, which was also on the hill, which was very simple,(,) and only had a few rooms.

Your original wording meant that the hill was very simple and had only a few rooms.

The rooms are connected in a row, from east to west.


The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.

The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.

There were no inclosing walls for the office.


There were no ienclosing walls for the office.

There were no inclosing walls for the officenclosing walls for the office grounds. / The office grounds were not enclosed in surrounding walls. / The office grounds lacked the enclosing walls that would have typically surrounded a government office like this one.

Your original wording sounds like the building had no exterior walls---it was just a roof with some supporting poles, and wind and rain could blow into it. I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.

I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We all majored in agricultural machinery management.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We (had) all majored in agricultural machinery management.

Since you were no longer studying (had already graduated), it's better to say you "had majored."

I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my [home town].

By "home town" do you mean the village/town where you grew up? If so, you could add "back": ...was transferred back to my home town.

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