Nov. 25, 2022
In late August, 1985, I held a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource department of Anhui province, and took a long distance bus from the city I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at.
Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not even. I went to the agricultural machinery bureau of the county first to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class. My role was as a trainer.
An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and let me go to the training class.
I left the bureau going to my first work unit. On my way, I asked a man how I could get there. He said, just go with me. It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit.
The work unit was also on the hill, which was very simple, and only had a few rooms. The rooms are connected in a row, from east to west. There were no inclosing walls for the office.
I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school. We all majored in agricultural machinery management.
I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town.
My First Work Unit
In late August, 1985, I heldcarrying with me a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource ds Department of Anhui pProvince, andI took a long distance bus from the city where I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to the Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at / was located.
I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.
The Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not evensloped.
"Seat" in "Jiashan Count seat" is descriptive (not part of a proper name), so "the" is needed.
I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.
I went to the(first) to the (county) agricultural machinery bureau (of the county first) to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class.
My role was as a trainer.
An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and lesent me go to the training class.
"Let me go" implies that you wanted to go, and the officer (finally) gave you permission to go. This isn't the same as 让我去 in Chinese.
"Sent me to" means the officer told you to go there. I assume that this is what you mean.
I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.
On my way, I asked a man how I could get there.
He said, j"Just go with me."
It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit.
The work unit, which was also on the hill, which was very simple,(,) and only had a few rooms.
Your original wording meant that the hill was very simple and had only a few rooms.
The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.
There were no inclosing walls for the officenclosing walls for the office grounds. / The office grounds were not enclosed in surrounding walls. / The office grounds lacked the enclosing walls that would have typically surrounded a government office like this one.
Your original wording sounds like the building had no exterior walls---it was just a roof with some supporting poles, and wind and rain could blow into it.
I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation.
I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school.
We (had) all majored in agricultural machinery management.
Since you were no longer studying (had already graduated), it's better to say you "had majored."
I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my [home town].
By "home town" do you mean the village/town where you grew up? If so, you could add "back": ...was transferred back to my home town.
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My First Work Unit
I left the bureau goingto go to my first work unit.
He said, "just go with me."
The work unit was also (on the hill/in the same building), which was very simple, and only had a few rooms.
Or maybe, "The work unit was in a building on the same hill, which was simple..."
The rooms awere connected in a row, from east to west.
There were no ienclosing walls for the office.
I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school.
We all majored in agricultural machinery management.
I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town.
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Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were not even. The Jiashan County seat was on a small hill, so the roads there were "Seat" in "Jiashan Count seat" is descriptive (not part of a proper name), so "the" is needed. I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation. |
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In late August, 1985, I held a dispatch certificate released by the Human Resource department of Anhui province, and took a long distance bus from the city I live now to Bengbu, and then took a train to Jiashan County seat, where my first work unit was at. In late August, 1985, I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation. |
I went to the agricultural machinery bureau of the county first to report for duty, and they told me that I was assigned to the bureau's subordinate unit: the agricultural machinery training class. I went |
An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and let me go to the training class. An officer at the bureau wrote me an introduction letter and "Let me go" implies that you wanted to go, and the officer (finally) gave you permission to go. This isn't the same as 让我去 in Chinese. "Sent me to" means the officer told you to go there. I assume that this is what you mean. |
I left the bureau going to my first work unit. I left the bureau I left the bureau |
On my way, I asked a man how I could get there. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
He said, just go with me. He said, "just go with me." He said, |
It turned out that he was the leader of my work unit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
The work unit was also on the hill, which was very simple, and only had a few rooms. The work unit was also (on the hill/in the same building), which was very simple Or maybe, "The work unit was in a building on the same hill, which was simple..." The work unit, which was also on the hill, Your original wording meant that the hill was very simple and had only a few rooms. |
The rooms are connected in a row, from east to west. The rooms The rooms |
There were no inclosing walls for the office. There were no There were no Your original wording sounds like the building had no exterior walls---it was just a roof with some supporting poles, and wind and rain could blow into it. I’ve adjusted my correction based on your explanation. |
I lived in a room with another new employee who was assigned to the office from another specialized secondary school. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
We all majored in agricultural machinery management. This sentence has been marked as perfect! We (had) all majored in agricultural machinery management. Since you were no longer studying (had already graduated), it's better to say you "had majored." |
I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my home town. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I started my career for the rest of my life this way, and I worked there till 1989 before I was transferred to my [home town]. By "home town" do you mean the village/town where you grew up? If so, you could add "back": ...was transferred back to my home town. |
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