June 1, 2020
MY FAVORITE SUMMER ACTIVITIES
I like summer because I can go to sea. I love to summer activity, for example, swimming, surfing, and tanning. When I decide my destination, I always choose a place which have beautiful sea. Last year, I went to Okinawa, that is the one of the best place of mine. I am going to Ishigaki island in this year. Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and that has also beautiful sea. I am looking forward to going there.
If possible, I wanna know your favorite place!!
MY FAVORITE SUMMER ACTIVITIES
I like summer because I can go to the sea.
I love to do summer activityies, for example, swimming, surfing, and tanning.
When I decide on my destination, I always choose a place which have beautifulbeautiful place on the sea.
Last year, I went to Okinawa, that is the one of the best place of minemy favourite places.
I am going to Ishigaki island in this year.
Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and that has alsoe sea is beautiful seathere too.
I am looking forward to going there.
If possible, I wannaould like to know your favorite place!!
"wanna" is not suitable for a formal text. It makes a person sound childish. Keep it for chats, texting, etc.
June 3, 2020
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Next time, I will care about that!
MY FAVORITE SUMMER ACTIVITIES
I like summer because I can go to sea.
I love to do summer activityies, for example, swimming, surfing, and tanning.
You have to say "do" because you are doing something (swimming, surfing, tanning)
Since you listed more than one activity, it should be plural, so I changed it to "activities"
When I decide on my destination, I always choose a place which haves a beautiful sea.
Last year, I went to Okinawa, that is the one of the best place of minewhich is one of my favorite places.
Sounds smoother this way
I am going to Ishigaki island in this year.
Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and thatit also has also beautiful sea.
I am looking forward to going there.
If possible, I wanna know your favorite place!!
technically correct, but informal. If you want to be formal:
If possible, I want to know your favorite place!
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Nice journal!
My 3 favorite places are Niagara Falls in New York, West Palm Beach in Florida, and Lake Worthersee in Klagenfurt :)
June 3, 2020
Thank you for correcting my journal!
Wow! You know a lot of beautiful places! I want to go these places!
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I am going to Ishigaki island in this year. I am going to Ishigaki island I am going to Ishigaki island |
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I like summer because I can go to sea. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I like summer because I can go to the sea. |
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I love to summer activity, for example, swimming, surfing, and tanning. I love to do summer activit You have to say "do" because you are doing something (swimming, surfing, tanning) Since you listed more than one activity, it should be plural, so I changed it to "activities" I love to do summer activit |
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When I decide my destination, I always choose a place which have beautiful sea. When I decide on my destination, I always choose a place which ha When I decide on my destination, I always choose a |
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Last year, I went to Okinawa, that is the one of the best place of mine. Last year, I went to Okinawa, Sounds smoother this way Last year, I went to Okinawa, that is |
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Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and that has also beautiful sea. Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and Ishigaki island is in Okinawa, and th |
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I am looking forward to going there. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If possible, I wanna know your favorite place!! If possible, I wanna know your favorite place!! technically correct, but informal. If you want to be formal: If possible, I want to know your favorite place! If possible, I w "wanna" is not suitable for a formal text. It makes a person sound childish. Keep it for chats, texting, etc. |
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