Aug. 1, 2023
My Elementary School
My elementary school
The elementary school I studied at was at the back of my village. Between them, there was a moat.
The moat was around my village and it was a square. Inside the circle of the moat was my village. The only exit of the village was in the middle of the southern side.
Around my village, there were three villages. Dou village was to the southeast of my village. You village was to the northwest of my village. To the west of my village was Liu village. The three villages were not far from my village, only 200 to 300 meters. Children in the four villages all went to this elementary school.
Most of the teachers in the school were from these four villages. They were not formal government employees but actually farmers.
The schoolhouses were really shabby, which were made of dirt and straw. Our school tables and stools were also made of dirt. In summer vacation, we students and a few teachers made the dirt tables and stools ourselves.
I studied there for four and a half years. After that, I moved to another elementary school in another village to finish the other half of grade five.
Now the school of my village no longer exists. I don't even know when because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school.
My elementary school The elementary school I studied at was at the back of my village.
Between them school and the village, there was a moat.
The moat was around my village, and it was a square.
Inside the circle of the moat was my village.
This sentence is correct on its own, but it's a little confusing because you just said that the moat is a square.
The only exit of the village was in the middle of the southern side.
Around my village, there were three villages.
Dou village was to the southeast of my village.
You village was to the northwest of my village.
To the west of my village was Liu village.
The three villages were not far from my village, only 200 to 300 meters.
Children in the four villages all went to thise same elementary school.
It's not clear what you mean by 'this' so I replaced it with 'the same.'
Most of the teachers in the school were from these four villages.
They were not formal government employees but actually farmers.
The schoolhouses were really shabby, which were made of dirt and straw, were really shabby.
Our school tables and stools were also made of dirt.
InDuring summer vacation, we students and a few teachers made the dirt tables and stools ourselves.
I studied there for four -and a -a-half years.
After that, I moved to another elementary school in another village to finish the other half of grade five.
Now the school ofin my village no longer exists.
I don't even know when it was shut down because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school.
My Elementary School
My elementary school The elementary school I studied at was at the back of my village.
Between them, there was a moat.
The moat was around my village and it was a square.
Inside the circle of the moat was my village.
The only exit of the village was in the middle of the southern side.
Around my village, there were three villages.
Dou village was to the southeast of my village.
You village was to the northwest of my village.
To the west of my village was Liu village.
The three villages were not far from my village, only 200 to 300 meters.
Children in the four villages all went to this elementary school.
Most of the teachers in the school were from these four villages.
They were not formal government employees, but actually farmers.
The schoolhouses were really shabby, which were made of dirt and straw.
Our school tables and stools were also made of dirt.
InDuring summer vacation, we students and a few teachers made the dirt tables and stools ourselves.
I think "the students" would make more sense than "we students", but it is not wrong.
Now the school of my village no longer exists.
"School of my village" is more formal. Commonly / colloquially, people will often say "village's school." However, what you wrote is correct.
I don't even know when, because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school.
Put the comma before "because", since everything after it describes why you don't know.
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This was very well written! I enjoyed learning about your school.
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My elementary school The elementary school I studied at was at the back of my village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Between them, there was a moat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Between the |
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The moat was around my village and it was a square. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The moat was around my village, and it was a square. |
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Inside the circle of the moat was my village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Inside the circle of the moat was my village. This sentence is correct on its own, but it's a little confusing because you just said that the moat is a square. |
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The only exit of the village was in the middle of the southern side. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Around my village, there were three villages. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Dou village was to the southeast of my village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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You village was to the northwest of my village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To the west of my village was Liu village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The three villages were not far from my village, only 200 to 300 meters. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Children in the four villages all went to this elementary school. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Children in the four villages all went to th It's not clear what you mean by 'this' so I replaced it with 'the same.' |
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Most of the teachers in the school were from these four villages. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They were not formal government employees but actually farmers. They were not formal government employees, but actually farmers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The schoolhouses were really shabby, which were made of dirt and straw. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The schoolhouses |
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Our school tables and stools were also made of dirt. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In summer vacation, we students and a few teachers made the dirt tables and stools ourselves.
I think "the students" would make more sense than "we students", but it is not wrong.
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I studied there for four and a half years. I studied there for four |
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After that, I moved to another elementary school in another village to finish the other half of grade five. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Now the school of my village no longer exists. Now the school of my village no longer exists. "School of my village" is more formal. Commonly / colloquially, people will often say "village's school." However, what you wrote is correct. Now the school |
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I don't even know when because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school. I don't even know when, because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school. Put the comma before "because", since everything after it describes why you don't know. I don't even know when it was shut down because I have lived outside of my village since I graduated from middle school. |
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